Bleach Anime Make your own zanpakuto!

jadzter18 posted on Jan 01, 2009 at 06:06PM
enhance your imagination!
If you were a shinigami what will your zanpakuto's name and abilities be?

share your thoughts and ideas of your ideal zanpakuto!!!

(note:please follow this format so that there will be a uniform ideas, and so that people would read this topic more interesting and more easy to read, thank you)

<format>

[zanpakuto's name/shikai name]
[release command]
[bankai name] - optional
=description - optional

[shikai abilities] - limited only (3)
=description

[bankai abilities] - limited only (3)
=desciption - optional


=(then comments on your zanpakuto)


that's all we want to know!
last edited on Jan 02, 2009 at 05:48AM
save

Bleach Anime 6347 replies

Click here to write a response...

Showing Replies 3601-3800 of 6347

over a year ago ShinjiNix said…
KazeMaru - Combat Type Zanpakutou

Shikai - Yurari , Ryu No Mai ... Kazemaru!
1) Increases the length of the zanpakutou & The User's Strength & Agility
2) Windwalk
3) Testament ( Similar to getsuga tenshou )

Bankai - Reppu no Akashi ... Kazemaru
1) causes a huge amount of reiatsu to flow from Kazemaru onto the user, starting at his head which the spiritual particles forms onto in the shape of a dragon's head, Armor & Wings at the body and lastly changes the zanpakutou shape ( similar to cloud strife sword )
2) Omnislash
3) Omni star slash ( optional )

Kazemaru - a green dragon ...
over a year ago CanisDirus212 said…
Guess who's back!? well it's not me if thats what your thinking haha
( sidenote: have some crazy new ideas for my old zanpakuto)
( sidenote #2: Whiteflame, fantastic your still on! haha)
last edited over a year ago
over a year ago wolfmaster3000 said…
okay flame i'm not gonna put them in edits but i'm gonna start with your Overall review

Moon &Sun Review

yes when he is switching he is open other wise it would be over powered and redculies so yes in the 30 seconds it take's for him to change blade's he is Drasticly open.



okay Moon blade Shikai abilties Review


Getsuei Bakudan -yes he can move them Indviually into the path of the oppent and he can throw them and yes he can get as close as he wants to them and they won't go off.


Aisu Keta -if you read my abilty I said they spikes can be melted by Kido and anythign else that melts ice I also said they freeze what they touch so EX a spike hit's my finger my finger freeze's and nothing else. the spike's would be about 3 feet long and 3 feet wide and would have to Pierce the skin because for them to touch and freeze you seems OP for a shikai.



Hisakata Rei - well I don't know how big to make it so I guess just Sight and hearing could be lost but than i'd feel like i'm stealing Brokensun35's Idea from his blade...I guess the flash of light could pose a type Radition in it and the Flash of light will take up a 10 foot Circular Raiduis.


Sun shikai abilties Review


Naiya Misairu - I said that they Pierce you first than they explode so yes it's a contact explosion if parried by a blade they will explode if knocked by into shin they will explode this abilty is risky the diamonds have the measurements of the Ice spikes.


Tenpi rei -the fire is released from the tip of the blade and no becuase it's from the tip Shin is not harmed by this abilty in anyway unless again it's re-directed at him


Taiyou kai -well the reason i didn't state it in the second shikai abilty is because well let me shoot a torrent of fire at you and see if you get 3rd degree burns XD.and the blade take's 3 minutes to heat up completely to the point of flame and because the blade is Completely in flames by than it cause's 3rd degree burns in two strikes. when he first activates the blade 8 strikes to cause 3rd degree burns, during the second minute 4 strikes. because the Blade is on fire Shin's hand would indeed get a little burnt but nothing serouis more or less his skin woud be a bit dry.


okay hope that cleared up my shikai's for you :)

Moon blade bankai Review



Kyo Hi sono Hisakata - now these are equal to a level 35 Hado so they would be a Mild annoyance but get hit by them all and it would be utter insainty,now in my abilty I said "Rain droplets" of energey fall from the sky so they are shaped like small rain droplets and the explosive power is like that of a Gernade.

Gekidou Hi sono Hisakata - I alreayd said has to Strike his blade into the ground than the spike's pop up at Kido speed and travel to you at Kido speed. I also stated it moves in a Staright line. so I guess that would be more of an Area the number of spikes that appear would be 100.

umm I mixed up the final abilty of this blade so edit it first than i'll tell you about what your confused on



Sun blade Bankai review

Enjin Hi sono Tenpi -Okay IDK the actual mesurements of Kirlin's Dustructo disc if I had to guess I'd say it's 5 feet wide and 4-10 inches thick, and yes the blade is completly fire but the reason why it lasts to long is because it's spining at a high speed the wind is feeding the flame.

Kanetsu Nami -well for him to completly burst something into flames it would take 90% of his focus with in that Raiduis if you leave that Raiduis the abilty doesn't affect you, and no he can't use other abilties when he is useing this one because it take's all concenteration.

Kasai Bakuha - okay for this abilty think a wind scar of fire balls however when launched though the enemey can't see it there 2 seconds apart , take's 1 second for him to launch the attack and it travels for a 20 feet in a staright line.


hope this clears everything up for yeah flame
over a year ago Ulquiorra1313 said…
ShinjiNix i am very confused by your whole thing. You need to explain way more. I mean you did not even describe what your zanpakuto looks like, its name meaning, its release phrase, what the abilities do or the character to go with it. plus it seems to lack any sort of coherence at all
over a year ago CanisDirus212 said…
Zanpakuto: Terra Scinda ( earth split)pronounce tear- uh sin-duh

Release: Fragor Calx ( Crack the Bone)

Shikai form: The wielder moves their sword hand much like they are flicking water or blood off the blade, and a ripple ( like if you shook a rope) moves down the blade. When it reaches the end, the tip stays curved up slightly. The hilt is an amber color.

Shikai ability 1: Tremo (shake)
Tremo is a simple latent power that can be used a variety of different ways. The blade of Terra Scinda, when shikai is activated, begins to vibrate. The purpose of this vibration is to achieve something called resonation with whatever touches the blade. This transforms blocks by the user into a method of dealing damage. When the blade is used to block a strike by an enemy, Tremo causes serious damage to the enemies flesh and bone structure. The harder an enemy strikes Terra Scinda, the more damage they take. Similarly, if the user of Terra Scinda strikes at an enemy and said strike is blocked, the enemy still takes massive damage to their body. Until eventually their bones become pulverized and they are unable to move. The pulverization only occurs however after multiple strikes and is the result of a drawn out fight. Or internal hemorrhaging causes death ( after many, many strikes). Tremo is also good for blocking kido and other energy attacks, the resonating energy is used to destabilize the attack and the users own reiatsu is used to blow away the remainder.

Shikai ability 2: Directus Vulnus ( Dire Wound)
When someone or something is cut by Terra Scinda, the cut is made 3x deeper because of the resonating blade. Thus a cut that would have otherwise been small is turned into a serious wound by Tremo.

Shikai ability 3: Intorqueo Quod Frendo (twist and grind)
This ability uses the disruptive resonating power of Terra Scinda to increase the speed of the user. Especially when the user activates shunpo. Intorqueo Quod Frendo uses vibrations to excite and disrupt particles along the users path, making them easier to pass through thus increasing the speed of the users movement and strikes by 2x. Intorqueo Quod Frendo also allows the user to utilize the disruptive field against very low level kido spells, letting the user simply run right through them. This concept is similar to how a diver places their hands in the water before their heads in order to make it easier to enter the water during their dive.

(as you can see, this is only the shikai half of Terra Scinda! Let me know what you think! and tell me if there are obvious problems!)
last edited over a year ago
over a year ago CanisDirus212 said…
Whiteflame: I really like your new blade. The mongolian/chinese blend is really interesting. I can really see the influence of the mongolian cavalry archers. I also really enjoy this blade because its a strategists blade, its not overpowered but because of its extreme efficiency its still insanely dangerous. More so because of its defense bypassing capabilities. Good show old chap!
over a year ago Soundsword102 said…
for my character, am i aloud to take one of the captain or lieutenant positons?
over a year ago whiteflame55 said…
Canis - thanks for the words on my blade, been working on that one for a while and I'm glad that the end result turned out so well.

Now, let's take a look at this new blade. All the moves are interesting, and I think you've described them well, though I feel they're a little overpowered.
1) It sounds like every ability that's blocked with the blade directly basically causes damage to your opponent. I'd say either limit the damage (internal hemorrhaging shouldn't be systematic even in the worst of circumstances, it's a lot of damage for blocking a single strike) or make it work only with certain strikes (as in, if they strike with their blade, this doesn't function, but if they strike with their body itself, it'll cause the damage).
2. This is mostly fine, it just needs to be a little limited itself. Just keep to the 3x depth (a medium wound would be pretty unlikely to cut someone in half, so it's just about keeping to the same proportion).
3. I think you should provide some downside to this. The ability to move at 2x speed and go through kido spells is pretty hefty, so either give it a feature that harms the wielder, or (and this is the main one I'd say you should do) remove one aspect (the speed boost or the kido spell disruption) and keep the other. Also, it's sort of repetitive to have 2 abilities that can disrupt all kido strikes, so place it on one and not the other.
over a year ago whiteflame55 said…
Also, another new blade:

Shikai Name: Shōgeki (Bombardment)
Release Command: Devenir ma cheville ouvrière… (Become my linchpin…) [that's French]
Bankai Name: Taema nai hōgeki (Ceaseless Bombardment)

Shikai Appearance: No scabbard or blade exists that anyone has seen. When the release is called out, the wielder’s cloak turns to titanium metal, though it continues to act as cloth (in other words, it’s not rigid like metal, but just as solid). The underside of the cape is covered with cannon and gun barrels, varied in length between 0 inches and 6 inches. Their width is also widely varied between 1 and 10 inches. Due to the heat created from its use, the guns must be facing normally (as in, he can’t just turn it inside out, the heat would be too much). Too many uses of it will cause it to overheat as well.

Shiaki Abilities:
1. Massed Military Batteries – The wielder pushes their cloak out behind them to reveal all of the underside of the cloak. Any hado used #40 and under will spawn anywhere between 5 and 25 forms of the same kido spell all at the cost of the single cast kido spell. The more the wielder uses, the more the cloak heats up as a result. These must all launch in the same direction, which is decided after the energy has completely formed. There is a 30 second cooldown on this ability.
2. Counter-battery Fire – The cloak will automatically respond to any kido based attack by launching one of the same power level at it. Attacks launched in this way look like cannonballs, and explode with a tremendous area, allowing it to block widely ranged attacks. The energy will be taken in an equal amount from the wielder. This only works if the inside of the cloak is facing the opponent.
3. Single Shot – There are 2 much larger than usual cannons under each of his arms on the cloak. These can be used to create kido missiles. Kido missiles are based directly on the energy put into them, and can therefore utilize any kind of kido spell (hence electricity kido will make it an electric missile, blue energy will make it blue, etc.). These missiles move at half the rate of the kido spell used to create them. They explode with double the force of the original kido spell. 2 of these can be used at once. Only kido of level 70 or lower can be used in this way. The cost is the same as the normal kido spell.
Bankai Appearance: The cloak expands dramatically to 4 times its original surface area, making the wielder almost seem to disappear beneath it. The number of weapons underneath it increases by a similar proportion. The way the cloak looks is much the same, except that thousands of tiny holes (almost imperceptible to the naked eye) now cover the back of the cloak. A cooling system is now built into the cloak, allowing for 3 separate cooling phases that bring the cloak back to normal temperature when it becomes too hot. After these are done being used, they regenerate after 24 hours.

Bankai Abilities:
1. Rolling Barrage – This is an upgrade from the first shikai ability. First, there is no cooldown. Second, abilities up to 70 are usable through this technique. Third, the amount of creation expands. 5-100 attacks can all be created at once. The heating of the cloak scales linearly. The higher levels now cause more heating than the ones at 40 or lower.
2. Directed-energy weapon (DEW) – This ability only works if the underside is not showing at all (so it cannot be used with any offensive abilities). Each of the tiny holes creates a laser that extends out for 100 yards. Any and all kido within that area is destroyed and negated when touched by one of these. It has absolutely no effect on solid matter (so if a kido spell is surrounded by something, it is not affected). However, denser kido spells take more laser hits to completely dissociate, so the denser and stronger the spell, the more likely that it will reach him, though the power level will be reduced.
3. Air Burst – This is an upgrade to the third shikai ability. Kido spells released in this fashion no longer look like missiles. Instead, these are much smaller and look like shrapnel shells. They can be launched from 4 points in the cloak. Energy is loaded differently into it, it no longer explodes normally. Instead, the energy is compacted massively into small capsules inside. When the shell explodes (the timing is the will of the wielder, shells destroyed before he activates them will not do this), these compacted bits of energy are shattered and scattered, acting like shrapnel. The wielder is unaffected by energy released in this fashion. The limitations on kido put into this are the same as before. The speed of the shots remains the same, though the explosions release the shrapnel at kido speed.
over a year ago CanisDirus212 said…
Whiteflame:

Ah let me clarify, only sword strikes and hierro strikes cause the block damage and the damage is largely a cumulative effect. the pulverized bones and hemorrhaging are the worst case result of a drawn out fight and dozens upon dozens of heavy strikes are needed to get to that critical point. haha that much damage from a single strike would be ridiculous.

haha ill be more careful with the examples but 3x depth is the model im going off of.

Finally the speed booster. Your right, Im going to put a downside and that is that while using the increased speed neither the Tremo, nor Directus Vulnus will function in any way. But dont misunderstand, the Kido blocking aspect is only for the weakest level kido spells. and its only there because i have to assume that creating a disruptive reiatsu field around my body will provide only a very slight shielding effect. again i will stress that it will only block the weakest of the weak kido spells

(P.S. did you get the Shogeki idea from the French Maginot Line?)
last edited over a year ago
over a year ago whiteflame55 said…
Heh, that is really close actually. A lot of these abilities were developed from examples of Napoleon's fighting tactics. Some are the result of more recent tactical examples (air burst and such), but the Maginot Line actually used many of the artillery techniques Napoleon popularized (though not with much success...considering the German Blitzkrieg went around it).
over a year ago BrokenSun35 said…
Zanpakuto/Shikai Name: Atena kenmei (Athena the Wise)
Release Command: Show your Wisdom!

Appearance: In its sealed state it is a small 1 foot completely gold dagger with writing engraved on the side when released it turns into a completely gold spear that shines like the sun, the spear has what seems like writing engraved all over the spear .

Shikai Abilities:
Interijensu (Intelligence): The wielders eyes begin to shine and after a few seconds the light dies down but the wielder now have extreme intelligence and foresight, the wielder can now predict a few steps of the opponent when they attack the wielder.

Konran (Turmoil): This ability is constant; it causes the opponents judgment of right and wrong to be clouded by anger and the battle, so the opponent will know something is wrong and will do it anyways this ability can be resisted by stronger willed people.

Shīrudo o ori (Weaving Shield): When attacked a shield that was instantaneously weaved together this shield can block any kido 40 and below and can block moderate physical attack, this ability can be used every 1 minute and the shield lasts for 2 minutes...

Bankai Name: Subete shitte iru atena (The All Knowing Athena)
Bankai Appearance: She keeps the spear but gains a pure golden shield with a red X going across it she also gains a golden helmet, golden armor and a gold skirt armor piece, all of these pieces of armor have writing engraved on them and the writing seems to be constantly moving.

Bankai Abilities:
Kanzen'na konran (Complete Turmoil): This ability is constant, this ability is like the 2nd Shikai but the effect on the opponent is greater, clouding their sense of judgment faster and even more and the clouding stays for the entire battle.

Orību no ki (The Olive Tree): An olive tree sprouts out of the ground holding a single Olive the wielder can pick this olive and eat it this olive can heal the wielders wounds like cuts and minor broken bones, If the opponent eats this it will slowly eat away at their spiritual energy until it has taken away 1/2. This olive tree can be used every 2 minutes.

Sensō no raiburari (Library of War): A total of 50 books appear out of nowhere and start circling with a 5 feet radius around the opponent after about 1 minute of circling they stop and glow, the wielder then slams down her spear and words molding together to look like swords, spears, knives, daggers, words shaped like weapons of all sorts shoot out of the books towards the opponent. They travel at kido speed and have a normal cutting ability but do not follow the opponent around and can be blocked by the opponent but this circle of books follows the opponent but the wielder cannot attack the opponent while this ability is in use.
last edited over a year ago
over a year ago BrokenSun35 said…
Zanpakuto/Shikai Name: Tan'ya (The Blacksmith)
Release Command: Build the Pathway to the Heavens

Appearance: In its sealed state it is a 2 foot tall axe and a 3 foot tall handle with carvings all over it when released the wielders axe turns into a giant gold battle hammer with a 5 foot long handle that is made of pure gold the hammer itself is 3 feet in length and 2 feet in width.

Shikai abilities:
Saisho sakusei (The First Creation): The wielder’s hammer disappears and is replaced by a solid red spear the tip of the blade is on fire, the wielder can send columns of fire that are 5 feet wide and ten feet tall or small bullet like blasts of fire at the opponent(He can use as many blasts of fire as he wants ti,, the time is over), the wielder can use this ability for 3 minutes and has a recharge time of 3 minutes

Dai sakusei (The Second Creation): The wielder’s hammer starts to peel away and start to form 2 metal men on both sides of the wielder once the wielders hammer is completely gone there are 2 gold men standing next to the wielder the have piercing red ruby like eyes, and instead of hands they have swords that are as wide as their arm and about 1 foot long they are relatively slow and have slightly above average strength they are semi easy to destroy (It takes a above average attack from the opponent) but if hit by a kido spel 40 and below the men will just abosrb the attack, if not killed this ability lasts for 2 minutes and has a recharge time of 5 minutes..

Kami mono no buki (Weapons of the Divine Creator): The wielder slams his hammer down on the ground and a circle of black fire surrounds an area of 50 feet the fire is 10 feet tall and is diffucult to escape anw iwll burn like a normal fire, after about 2 seconds a circle opens up in the sky around the circle,different types of weapons then rain down for 10 seconds these weapons vary from arrows, tridents, spears, swords, staffs, if hit it does not hurt the opponent just leaches away 1/5 of their spiritual energy for each time they are hit (So if they are hit 5 times they are completely defenseless)

Bankai Name: Hēpaisutosu-shin sumisu (Hephaestus the Divine Smith)
Bankai Appearance: The wielders hammer splits into 2 smaller hammers with the same appearance, each hammer is a total of 4 feet in length the handles being 2 feet long and the hammer being 2 feet long and 2 feet in width it still is all gold.

Bankai Abilities:
Tan'ya no hi (The Blacksmith’s Fire): The wielder clangs the hammers together causing them to set on fire, tendrils start to snake out of the hammers these tendrils lash out and are extremely hot the wielder can morph and shift these tendrils into different items (when morphed they retain the heat)(Swords, spears, ect..). This ability is active for 3 minutes and has a recharge time of 5 minutes

Shippai no sakusei (The Failed Creation): The hammers start to glow and cracks appear all around the hammers. Each hammer now will explode with the force of a 20 ton TNT bomb if it makes contact with something this can only be used twice for each hammer (Meaning each hammer will only explode twice) per Bankai release.

Saikō no sakusei (The Supreme Creation): The a 20 feet tall golden man covered in golden armor appears behind the wielder this man has red eyes and is wielding a large sword and shield the armor is covered in strange designs, the man has the strength and speed of the wielder but the man stays on the area for 5 minutes and has a recharge time of 10 minutes (The Man can be cut by a very strong attack from the opponent but kido spells 70 and below will be absorbed)
last edited over a year ago
over a year ago BrokenSun35 said…
Zanpakuto/Shikai Name: Erumesu ryokō (Hermes the Traveler)
Release Command: Take Them to the Underworld

Appearance: The sealed form of the zanpakuto is normal katana with a gold handle and has compass rose as a guard, the only that is special about the blade is that their seems to be things written on the blade, when released the wielder gains a pair of bronze gauntlets and on the top of the gauntlets near the knuckles there are 2 feet blades protruding out of it.

Shikai Abilities:
Erumesu no kōi (Hermes’s Favor): This is a constant ability that increases the speed of the wielder by 2x for 2 minutes but doesn not increase the speed of shunpo and has a recharge time of 5 minutes

Hi no tabi (Traveling Fire): Fire surrounds the gauntlets of the wielder the wielder can now control fire as a defense or a attack (pillars of fire, whips, ect..) when the wielder cannot do 2 things at the same time (Can’t do a wall of fire and attack with a whip at the same time and the )fire generated by the ability is limited by the surface area of the gloves (how much fire surrounds them is how much you can make), fire is restored instantaneously after it is used up. After one minute of using this ability it has a 5 minute recharge.

Bankai Name: Erumesu no kami (Hermes the God)
Bankai Appearance: He still keeps the gauntlets but the swords are replaced by sharp spikes at the end of the knuckles, he gains a bronze cap with 2 small wings coming out of the sides and gains a pair of bronze boots with bronze wings protruding out of the back (The wings start at where the boots start and stop just below the heel and extend out at about a foot) and what looks like a white Greek toga.


Bankai Abilities:
Erumesu no shukufuku (The Blessing of Hermes): This ability is now constant his speed is now doubled and this ability lasts until the wielder disengages his Bankai but this ability does not increase shunpo speed

Kyūkyoku no hi (The Ultimate Fire) The wings of his boots and the knuckles of his gauntlets are engulfed in flames the wielder now has a control of this fire he can add on to the fire only if the area around them is not moist and he can use this fire as a defense or an attack he can also do 2 things at once with the fire (Like make a wall of fire AND use a fire whip) plus this ability has unlimited use for as long as Bankai is activated.

Keiken'na torikku (Godly Trickery): The scene around the wielder starts distort and shift after a minute it turns back to normal, this ability toys with the opponents senses making them see everything backwards (Like Shinji but everything isn’t upside down for the opponent) this ability lasts for 5 minutes and has a recharge time of 10 minutes
last edited over a year ago
over a year ago BrokenSun35 said…
Zanpakuto/Shikai Name: Aresu senshi (Ares the Warrior)
Release Command: Rip them to Shreds!

Appearance: Sealed it is a 5 foot long spear with a 2 foot long pure black tip when released the wielders spear disappears and are replaced by a normal katana and a shield which seemed to be splattered with blood which are stained on.

Shikai Abilities:
Senshi no shien (The Warrior’s Assistance): The wielders strength is doubled for 2 minutes after the time is up the ability has a 3 minute recharge time.

Piasu kōgeki (Piercing Attack): When this ability is used the strength of the wielders attack increased by .1 when they are repeated so first attack normal strength then the second 1.1 then the third 1.2 and so on and so forth, but this increase does not work if the wielder stops attack repeatedly.

Kōmuin (The Servants): This ability calls upon Ares 2 servants Phobos “Fear” and Demios “Terror”, their appearance is horrifying they have distorted faces and have greenish blue skin, Phobos and Demios are have relatively slow speed but have above average strength and have the experience of a 3rd seated squad member if not killed they last for 5 minutes and have a recharge time f 10 minutes and have normal skin so they can be cut like a normal person.

Bankai Name: Aresu chi ga sāsuti (Ares the Blood Thirsty)
Bankai Appearance: The sword grows an extra foot and becomes pitch black and jagged the wielder also keeps the shield but it becomes slightly larger, black with a red X on it the wielder also gains pitch black armor and a pitch black helmet all of the items are stained with blood.

Bankai Abilities:
Senshi no chikara (The Warrior’s Power): The wielders strength is increased by 2x , this ability lasts for 5 minutes but has a 10 minute recharge time.

Buki-ko (Armory): Different types of weapons appear in random locations stuck in their place (Not inside the opponent or cutting them) this battle area is where both the wielder and the opponent have to fight in

Warenai gun (The Unbreakable Army): More creatures looking like Phobos and Demios appear there is a total of 50 each of them they all have distorted faces but their skin are different colors, they are relatively slow speed but have above average strength and have the experience of a 3rd seated squad member these soldiers are unbreakable so they cant die but can be blasted back buut not killed, they last for 5 minutes and have a recharge time f 10 minutes.

last edited over a year ago
over a year ago BrokenSun35 said…
Zanpakuto/Shikai Name: Utsukushi (The Beauty)
Release Command: Intoxicate them with your Beauty!

Shikai Appearance: Sealed the blade is a pure white katana that is completely straight with a heart engraved in the middle of the blade, the handle of the blade is a very bright pink, when released it becomes an average sword sized Keris (It is a wavy dagger) with a peal white blade and a white handle.

Shikai Abilities:
Miru hito no me (Eye of the Beholder): The wielder is surrounded by a pink mist, it swirls around her like a violent tornado for 10 seconds then disperses, Now every time the opponent is about to harm the wielder, either it be a sword strike or a kido spell, the opponent sees the person they love or loved the most in their life instead of the wielder for the time they are attacking the wielder.

Raburī wa hato (The Lovely Dove) The wielders Keris turns into a pure white dove in the wielders hands, the dove then flies towards the opponent when it is 5 feet away from the opponent it turns into a explosion of white feathers, these feathers are razor sharp and there are a total 20 of them. The wielder can use this ability 5 times before they have to wait 3 minutes for a recharge, (They can be used every 2 seconds between each other)

Awa no tate (Shield of the Foam): Foam forms around the wielders hand, it then hardens into a clam shell that is pure white, the shell can be broken by any kido spell 75# and above, this has a 3 minute recharge time.

Bankai Name: Afurodīte eien utsukushi (Aphrodite the Everlasting Beauty)
Bankai Appearance: The wielder Keris turns into a staff 6 feet tall scythe that is pure white that has the word “Love” Written in pink on both sides of the scythe, the wielder also is now wearing a white dress that stops at her knees and a pure white tiara

Bankai Abilities:
Miru hito no me (Eye of the Beholder): This abilities is exactly the same as the first shikai but the wielder now stays the person the opponent loved or loves the most the whole entire battle and the wielder also gains knowledge about the person they are to use against the opponent

Ai no juchū (Love’s Orders): The wielders voice seems to echo when she talks, the wielder now can be “persuasive” if the wielder says to stop attacking if the opponent doesn’t have a strong mind the will follow her order but if they do have a strong mind they will still have a VERY strong urge to stop attacking and even hesitate to attack..

Shi no ai (The Dying Love): An image appears behind the wielder, if the opponents person they loved the most has died their death is shown in the images behind the wielder if the opponents loved one hasn’t died it shows a “Murder” of their loved one, who “murders” the loved one is the person the wielder hates the most in their current life and if the opponent doesn’t love any one at all and is isolated it shows the reason why the don’t love anyone and are isolated , this ability lasts for 3 minutes and has a 10 minute recharge time limited
last edited over a year ago
over a year ago wolfmaster3000 said…
Name : Shun Iba

Age : 350 ( he looks like he's in his mid 30's )

Height : 5'11

Weight : 190 LBS

Muscel build : Meduim and lightly toned

Body type : Athlectic with a slender look

Rank : asstaint captain 7th divsion. former asstaint captain 8th divsion


Apperance : Shun wears a normal shinigami rob but he has it open with no shirt underneath revealing his Muscel's he wears glasses Simlair to Nano and Lisa he also carryies a small black book with him in witch he writes things down in. his hair is long and Brown it's down to his shoulders but he wears it in a pony tail and has one bang covering his left eye his eye's are a deep golden color and his skin is very lightly tan.


Persnailty : he is one of the most Loyal people in all of soul soceity and he thinks Highly of his Captain as well as his Divsion often caliming that 7th divsion is the best Divsion in Goeti 13 also he loves to meet new people and is very humble and friendly with members of other Divsions but much like his captain/ best friend he hold his Honor and pride and will always fulfill a promise.


Bio : not much is known about where shun came from just that he grew up in one of the poor parts of soul soceity and that he met shin when he entered the acdeamy and was put into squad 8 and late on moved out into 7th divsion he also has had history in squad 13 and 1 it is unknown if he was a seated offcier while he was in these squads or if he was a random soul reaper.


stats :

Strength : 85

Shunpo : 89

Kido : 59

Agility : 100

Hand to hand : 100

Durabilty : 65

Stamina : 65


Zanpakuto :



Shikai name : Kaze katta ( wind cutter )

Bankai name : Taka Katto Kaze ( Falcon cutting wind )

Release phrase : Take flight


Sealed state description : in it's sealed state Kaze looks like a Wizakshi green wraping around it's hilt it's also shorter than most Wizakshi by 3 inches.

Shikai description : once Kaze transforms it keep it's form as a Wizakshi but the blade turns into a deep forest green Color and the gaurd turns into that of a wing of a Falcon.


Shikai abilties : Tatsumaki Bakuha ( Tornado Blast ) what Shun does is he thrusts his blade forward and a Tornado come's blasting out of the tip of the blade the Tornado is the size and power of an F3 Tornado so it can Destory buildings and can cause Major Damage of hallow Meduim Damage on Fraccion and low Damage on espada. the Tornado is equal to a level 35 Kido and can be blocked by Kido the Tornado also travels at Kido speed. Shun can use this abilty once every 5 minutes.


Kaze Bakuha ( Wind Blast ) this abilty is a torrent of Razor wind so when caught in the torrent you get sliced up each cut is 4 inches deep the cut's are "salshing" inside the torrent is equal to a really sharp Razor blade cutting your skin. the torrent is 10 feet long and 10 feet wide it travels at kido speed and can be blocked by kido level 35 and lower.


Kaze Kire ( Wind Slice ) this abilty let's Shun fire Sickle shaped blasts of wind from his blade he can fire up to three of these at a time each sickle travels at Kido speed and is equal to a level 25 Kido .the blasts are 4 feet long and 4 feet wide and have a 2 minute cool down time. yes they can cut you other wise it would be useless


Bankai description : when Kaze Katta turns into Taka Katto Kaze it turn into Trench spikes with Combat looking knives on the ends that are to a Dead point the brass Kunckel part of his Trench spikes are to a point as well ( so picture Assuma's Trench spikes but there more pointed ) they are no longer green in color they are now Falcon coloration pattern so Brown and a faded white.


Bankai abilties :

Tatsumaki Sentou ( Torando Punch ) with this abilty Shun thrusts his hand forward and a F5 Torando come rageing out of the tip of his Trench spikes it at Kido speed and is 20 feet long and 20 feet wide and can be stopped by kido of level 35 still also he can now use this abilty once every 3 minutes.


Meshi Hi Sono Kaze ( call of the wind ) this allows Shun to control all the wind in a 5 foot Circular Raiduis yes he can move the Area . he can control it in Varies forms ( sickle like shaped blasts, small breeze's , Tornado's ETC ) each one traveling 2x faster than normal Kido and can be stopped by Kido of level 35 and lower. this abilty lasts for 5 minutes and has the same cool down time of 5 minutes.

Kaze Butoku ( Wind Martial Arts ) with this abilty when shun kicks or punches he can make a Gust of wind come out of the tip of his feet or hand . the gusts of wind can range from a small summer breeze with barely anyharm to a Vicious gust of wind that blows the enemey 10 feet away from him the breeze's can be stoped by any form of kido because this is a melee move the gusts of wind are equal to a level 25 kido spell.

last edited over a year ago
over a year ago wolfmaster3000 said…
Name : Kintaro komamura
Age : 1400 ( Looks like he's in his Mid 40's early 30's )
Height : 6'1
Weight : 220LBS
Muscel Build : exterme Heavily Toned
Body type : Athletic Body Builder
Rank : 7th divsion 3rd seated member
Apperance : Kintaro wears a shinigami robe with shortend slevee's and hand gaurds exactly like Sajin Komamura. His face and body are that of a more human like Were-wolf so his face is that of a wolf but his body looks like a really Muscular Man with all black fur his eye's are a deep yellow . ( so Picture a Black more wolf like Version of Komamura ).

Persnailty : much like his Grandfather he is Loyal Respectful Honorable and Humble to everyone he meet's he is also a Prime example of the 7th Divsion he is short tempered at time's but much like Shun he thinks Highly of his Captain and would die for him in a spilt Second. he is also a fan of the Illutetant Shun they often have tea together every wedenseday and hang out on there days off. However he dislike's the 11th divsion members with a passion.

Stats :
Strength : 65
Durabilty : 65
Stamina : 65
Kido : 70
Shunpo : 70
Swordsman ship : 80


Zanpakuto :

Shikai name : Musha Kara Tsuchi ( Warrior from Earth )

Bankai name : Musha Kara Tentou ( Warrior from Heavan )

Release Phrase : Show them the power of a Warrior Musha

Zanpakuto Sealed state Description : when Musha is in it's sealed form it is a full sized Katana with a Rectangular Shaped Hilt and is a normal Silver color blade with light fire red wrapings around the hilt.

Shikai Description : once in shikai the blade remains it's same look but the dull side is a dark grey and the Tip of the Katana also looks like a Rectangular shape.

Shikai Abilty : Once in Shikai much like his Grandfather when he strikes his blade turns into the Limb of a Gaint that can extend up to 20 feet the arm doesn't retract when he is done fighting he can keep the Arm of the Gaint out and use it as he please's the arm travel's at Kido speed and can be blocked by all Kido. the arm has the same blade diffrent hilt as Kintaro the blade is ten feet and the arm is 10 feet for the total of 20 feet . the arm can also grab and throw things.








Bankai Description : once in Bankai the blade is Black on top with a matching silver color on the bottom but looks no diffrent from Shikai. Also a 300 ft tall Samurai appears it's in all Black Armor and wear a Demon Kabuto that take's up it's whole face the Armor as I said is black with a red Triming and the sword in it's hand is Identical to the one Kintaro is holding on the right arm the Gaint has a Built in small sheild in it's Armor.


Bankai Abilty : Kintaro and the Gaint are sycronized to one another and can move Indviually when the Gaint moves Induvally it's really slow but has devistateing strikes on the Enviorment and functions like a human by that I mean it can Grab things throw them etc. when they are Sycronized the Gaint move's at Kido speed the Gaint can also Launch a Gaint cero based attack at the enemey that is equal to a level 50 kido spell the blast is 20 feet long and 20 feet wide and travels at Kido speed. the down side to this massive Bankai is any wound inflicted on Kintaro appear on the Gaint any Wound inflicted on the Gaint appear on Kintaro.
last edited over a year ago
over a year ago bleachfan12 said…
whiteflame55 i still don't get the third abillity of that one that i asked you about but don't try to explain it for it takes me a wile to get things if i don't understand them by the second time but thanks for the attempt. by the way nice zanpakuto, i would change the release comand, it's really long but it is up to you. i guess that you like sajin kommomura(sorry if the name is spelled wrong).

this is a new zanpakuto that i just thought about


name: fate

release command: deal

shikai appearance: sword gains a light in the midle of the handle of the sword that flashes super fast different colors that represent the different attacks, the soul reaper knows what the colors mean. the blade changes from a standard blade and gains saw like edges.

abillities: ( all of the abillities are randomly chosen the soul reaper has no choise in the matter)
-gattling gun- is a ground type attack, it launches fifty golf ball sized rockes that can destroy buildings.
-wave- is a water type attack, basicly it launches a wave of water from the sword at the target.
-flame whip- a whip of flame erupes from the tip of the blade and can be controled for five minites, the whip extends up to fifty feet.
-holy light- causes an extremly bright light to eroupt from the blade that blinds anyone (incluting the soul reaper) that looks at it for five minites.
-winter chill- it lauches freezing cold air/water that is capable of freezing a person to death if they can't excape the blast, the blast is shot in the direction the soul reaper is facing for a mile and is easly dogable for a person who knows shunpo.
(many others that i can't think of)

bankai: eternal fate

i can't think of the apperance of the bankai

bankai special abillities: it increases the chance of the soul reaper geting the attack that he wants and the attacks power is increased as well.
-for example the flame whip gains four whips instead of one
-the wave is biger and faster
etc,ext...

whiteflame55 i always like to hear your comments as well as anyone else.
last edited over a year ago
over a year ago wolfmaster3000 said…
here is finally the Revised version of 4th divsion asstaint captain Reiku Mandran

Name : Reiku Mandran

Age : 22

Height : 5'2

Rank: Asstain captain of 4th Divsion, Former 8th seat of 9th divsion, future captain of 4th divsion

Muscel build : Low muscel build

Body type : slender and lanky ( like Retsu )

apperance : Reiku has Meduim legength blonde hair that she always wears in a bun or a ponytail she has beautiful baby blue eye's. the sleeve's of her shinigami Rob look a bit long for her because of her slender body she is also very chesty so her breasts tend to pop out of her robe. as quoted by Nabimaru during her short stay in squad nine "welcome to squad nine I adore haveing the most Beautiful woman in soul society as my eigth seat." guy's in squad nine and in squad four seem to have a natural atteraction to reiku of wich she despise's.


persnailty : reiku is a shy outgoing person but she is also the type to speak her mind when asked she only speaks when spoken too and thinks highly of the fourth divsion as well as the other captains in the gotei 13 she thinks all captains are useful she also thinks highly of her captain.


Bio : Reiku had a tuff life she was always the one who her family depended on she made dinner and cooked and cleaned in hope's of one day joining the shinigami acdeamy and becomeing a squad four member one day when she was off doing shopping a fourth divsion shinigami sensed that she had high level retsu and that she join the acdeamy at once and gave her a one way ticket and so she packed her bag's and is now liveing what she often calls the high life and sends her family little bits of her income as a soul reaper.


Stats

Strength : 15

shunpo : 100

Agilty : 90

Kido : 100


Stamina : 60


Durabilty : 40


Endurance : 20




Zanpakuto :


release phrase : Heal the world


shikai name : Narou ( to heal )


Bankai name : Narou seken ( to heal the world )


Shikai abilties :

shikai descirption : in it's shikai and sealed state the blade looks normal with a ghostly white sash around it. when the blade enters in shikai it turns into a Reverse blade sword with the sharp part of the sword on top.

aigo sekisho ( Protection barrier ) this abilty prodouce's a small barrier that acts as a level 55 Bakudo it protects the user from binding skills it can stop any given sword strike the barrier can only block up to levl 50-60 Kido spells, this abilty has no given time limit but can hold up to 3 people in the barrier the barrier is eight by eight.



engo sutansu ( protection stance )


this abilty allowes Reiku to use Bakudo's , healing kido and Binding spells at half of the cost of what they normailly cost they also seem to be 3x more effective however the moment she trys to activate a Hado this abilty wears off, the binding spell she casts are little one by one barrier's that heal the people inside minor wounds heal in seconds major wounds heal in 2-5 minutes. Only one person to a barrier and people who are dead cannot be healed.


mamori sutansu ( Deffense stance ) the blade completely melts away and turns into a green liquid that take's up a 10 foot Raiduis if the liquid touches an enemey it freeze's them ( I.E if a drop is on your finger your finger freeze's) it take's 2 minutes for some one to completly defrost and 30 seconds for parts of the body to deforst the liquid can be moved around to get in the enemyies way the liquid moves 1x faster than kido speed. the liquid can only freeze up to three people at a time and can be stopped by level 35 kido.





Bankai Abiltyies


Bankai desciption : the blade give's off a blinding green flash the blade keep's it's fourm as a reverse blade sword but extends two inches and the sharp side looks dull.

Chiyu Tacchi ( healing touch ) this abilty is staright forward but is riskey if Reiku's Blade touches anything that has Human tissue it heals it with great effectivness it take's Milliseconds for Minor wounds to heal and 60 seconds to 2 minutes for major wounds to heal however the blade has to be constantly touching the person for the person to be healed if the person runs off before all wounds are healed there injuries will come back slowly ( EX : if a shinigami was stabbed in the gut and only had the wound healing partly the wound would return in 10 seconds or sooner ) this move is also risky because it counts for Espada's too so if a really injured espada touches the blade it's wounds heal as well.




Yakushi ( The healing Buddha ) the blade transforms into a Gaint Buddha like Figure it's mouth is wide open and a green liquid is pouring from it's mouth into a bowl of which is held in the bottom two hands of the Buddha the other two arm's are used to grab up to 4 people at a time two in each hand , they place you in the bowl with the green Liquid of wich can heal you this abilty is also Deffensive if the two hands aren't being used for healing , the two hands make a hand the sigin of the Tiger and a liquid leaks out of the Budha's mouth the liquid take's up a 20 foot Raiduis and is used to freeze the enemey the enemey can be defrosted in a peroid over five minutes or melted out it take's 30 seconds for some one to become completely frozen the Ice this abilty can be stoped by level 45 Kido spells.


Shouheki benso ( Barrier of Deffense ) this is a Gaint 20 by 20 Barrier that can hold a Crowd of 10 people Reiku can also make smaller Barriers that are one by one and protect one person if she does this she make's 20 small barriers this abilty protects agaisnt all sword strike's that are captain level. the small barriers protect people from level 50-60 Kido. the Gaint barrier protects people from Kido level 60-70 and can also stop captain level sword strikes.




over a year ago whiteflame55 said…
Alright, no more putting this off:
wolfmaster (Kaze katta) -
The language you use for speed is really confusing. "1x faster than kido speed" speaks to me as "2x kido speed," though you may mean "equal to kido speed". Make that clear.
1) So I thought I'd recognized the F5 classification, and when I looked it up, I turned out to be right. F5 is the highest class of tornado. It's so high that they document every single one. The ability to spawn one, even once every 5 minutes, is ridiculous for a shikai ability. Even with what you've given about the amount of damage it causes, I'm skeptical. Wind doesn't tend to do a tremendous amount of damage, but this would basically throw your opponent around without any control. Traveling 2x the speed of kido makes it all the more ridiculous. We're talking about a gigantic torrent of wind.
2) This one's also too fast. Someone who gets caught in this will have 4 inch cuts all over themselves, so it shouldn't ever be so fast as you've said.
3) So can these sickle blasts cut? I mean, when I think sickle, I think cutting blade, so making it equivalent to a kido blast seems...odd. If it acts like a normal kido blast, why does it look like sickles? And if it cuts, it shouldn't move at 2x kido speed.

1) Look to #1 among the shikai. As a bankai ability, it's not too strong without the speed increase, but it is still rather insane at that speed.
2) Controlling all that wind seems pretty overzealous. Basically what that would mean is that your opponent would be almost completely incapable of hitting you. The difficulty with wind as opposed to ice, water, fire, lightning, etc. is that it's unlimited. You will never run out of wind. So I'd say either make this area much smaller (so small that it's only defensive and assisting in your physical strikes) or reduce your capacity to use it.
3) This one's fine.
over a year ago BLAMargera123 said…
cool
Zanpakuto/Shikai: Mallanose II "Scarab King"
release command: "Swarm Mellanose"
Description: The blade is golden with a scarab engraved in the middle of the blade, and the handle is golden with a ruby at the end of the handle.
Bankai Name: "Swarm King Mellanose II"
Description: The Whole Sword transforms into a giant shield to look like a scarab, the horn of the scarab shield is used as a cannon, and the wings of the shield cause flight.
Shikai Abilities:
"Swarm" the users zanpakuto blade turns into a swarm of locusts to eat away the enemy.
"The swarm that killed the world" The users blade transform into a never ending swarm that the user cant even possess.
Bankai Abilities:
"Fly King Mallanose II" the shield's wings open up to make a golden aura to cause flight.
"Protect King Mallanose II" the shield expands to make an even larger shield.
"Conquer King Mallanose II" the shields horn creates a large blast that can level a whole city.
Zanpakuto Spirit Appearance: Mallanose II is 10 feet tall and wears golden armor with a cape of scarabs, large wings, and the shield attached to his arm.


(NOTE: this is my cousins zanpakuto not mine i wanted to make him one!)

last edited over a year ago
over a year ago whiteflame55 said…
wolfmaster (Musha Kara Tsuchi) -
There's no problems with the ability, but it is way too similar to Komamura's. It's obvious that you planned on him being closely related to the captain, it's just too much. You're going to have to find a way to separate them definitively.

bleachfan12 -

1) This needs more specifics. How fast are these launched? How much explosive power does each have? Are they launched all together, or sequentially?
2) So it's just a wave of water? How quickly does it move, how large is it?
3) Does the whip just burn? Is it substantial (i.e., can it be stopped by a physical force) or is it entirely made of fire?
4) So the light is continuous, or is the light just a one time flash?
5) How large is the expanse of ice that is shot out (i.e., what area does it cover)?
You might want to limit the shikai abilities to 3, even if they're randomized this is a bit much.

Bankai: You should make this more specific. Increasing the success of an attack is extremely vague and difficult to measure. Increasing the power is not. You explained how it increases in some ways, but you'd need to do it for every one of them.
over a year ago wolfmaster3000 said…
Kaze Katta I didn't change the Bankai abilty with thef5 tornado is because I find it suits it because Bankai's are spouse to be powerful but I did tone down it's speed.

I gave the nesscary Changes to Kintaro
over a year ago Soundsword102 said…
Name: Aekongre Tuparba

Age:176(18 in apperance)

Height:5`9

weight:193

Muscle build:Completely average

Rank: Lieutinant of 3rd divison

Apperance:Dark brown long hair, deep blue eyes, tan skin, tall for his age, hansome facial features, thin narrow eyebrows, curved scar that runs down the bottom of hid left eye to his chin. Large feather tatto on his right tricep. Has a double cowlick. wears a half black, half white sleavless hakama.

Personality:keeps to himself often and feels very self concious tword what people think of him. very smart and speaks only when spoken to. jokes very rarely. likes to be secluded, and prefers to fight alone.

Bio: When he was in the soul society, he joined a family consisting of an older sister, a mother, and a father. The mother and father took a big liking to aekongre, sometimes forgetting that the sister was even there. This caused her to be cold and hard twords aekongre.On night, the sister killed the parents in there sleep. she then found out aekongre had seen the whole thing. He cried out, alerting nearby shinigami. she cut him across the face with a sicle and fled. His anger twords her caused him to have an immense. He trained and entered the soul academy. he passed all tests perfectly. He then learned his sister had become a powerful hollow.

Strength:70
Shunpo:60
Kido:30
Swordsmanship:95
Hand to Hand:100
Durability:80
Stamina:100

Zanpaktou:

Name:Komanchiarumjiro muchi(Comanche armadillo whip)
Sealed:Perfect straight katana with an axe like square tip. the guard is triangular with 3 small holes, in each hole is tied a length of beads, one has red, one has black, one has yellow. Tsuba is a grainy yellow with a black arrow on either side. has a white and red feather dangling from the back end.

Spirit: small old man with a huge featherd headress. holds a smoking pipe and has a long thick speat attached to his back.

Release:Roll up and protect.

shikai description:very long whip chain with silver beads all over it. Blade is a large tomahawk with red and black markings. handle looks exacly like its sealed form.

shikai ability:1.san shima arumajiro(Three banded armadillo)Creates a segmented sheild that protects the front half of aekongre. only protects from narrow or weak attacks. takes time to form.2.Roku Bando arumanjiro(six banded armadillo) created a segmented sheild that covers aekongre is a ball like shield. protects against wide or multiple attacks. very strong, takes time to form.3.Arumajiro no shippo ponchi(Armadillo tail punch) handle of chaim flys forward and wraps around enemy. aekongre pulls him forward and punches him in the face, sending him striaght to the ground.

Bonkai name:Komanchiarumjiro muchi, senso yansu kaze(comanchi armadillo whip, war lance wind)
Release:Dig and fly

Desription: chain retreat back into the handle and tomahawk turns into a war lance. Blade is all black and oval shaped. Blade is also serrated. pole is a grainy yellow and has white and red feathers. Chain is longer and thinner.

Bonkai ability:1.Chihiyo jishin danso(surface rupture) oval blade spins and chain creates a shield around aekongre. Just digs into the ground.2.Chenyansu Yajirushi(Chain lance arrow) used in unison with chihiya jishin danso. chain elongates an takes the form of a bow. war lance is fired from it. accuracy is low from under ground. can be used above ground.3. Ransu tatsumaki(lance tornado) War lance erupts from the ground and takes a tornado like formation, damage will be great if hit by it.
last edited over a year ago
Name: Aekongre Tuparba

Age:176(18 in apperance)

Height:5`9

weight:193

Muscle build:Comple
over a year ago bleachfan12 said…
hmmm
thank you whiteflame55 i thought i'd try one that was based soly on chance, and boy do you think these things through. i got the idea from reading about the 8th captains zanpakuto were it wouldn't let him use an abillity if it wasn't in the mood.

i think i'll just scrap that one for it's to difficult to think about what attacks should be included, i wanted more then 3 abillities so the chance of geting the same one would be minimal thanks for the comment though.
over a year ago ShadowCodie1234 said…
I've come up with a new zanpakuto so here it is.

Zanpakuto apperance-Dual full tang katanas. One has a gold sheath and the other has a black sheath.
The gold ones name is Genwaku Awai (Blinding Light)
The black ones name is Fuhen Kuragari (Everlasting Darkness)

Shikai Release Command-Through the Everlasting Darkness shines the Blinding Light Genwaku Awai, and The Everlasting Darkness shuts out the Blinding Light Fuhen Kuragari.

Shikai appearance-Genwaku Awai has become a completely Golden Schimatar and Fuhen Kuragari has become a completely black Schimatar

Shikai Power 1-I can teleport into any shadowed area with Fuhen Kuragari.

Skikai Power 2-Genwaku Awai can blind my oppenents with a flash of light (only last about 10 seconds).

Skikai Power 3-Genwaku Awai allows me to heal moderate injurys to myself.

Bankai Name-Amatsu Genwaku Awai (Heavenly Blinding Light)
Tenma Fuhen Kuragari (Demonic Everlasting Darkness)

Bankai appearance-Same as Shikai

Bankai Power 1-Changes battlefield from complete blackness to blinding sunlight every 15 seconds.

Bankai Power 2-Swing of blade creates a dragon out of light or darkness, depending on the blade swung, that attacks the oppenent causing severe damage if it connects. Very slow moving attack though.

Bankai Power 3-I get two wings one made out of pure light the other out of pure darkness, making me four times faster than normal and twice as strong. (Can only use at brink of death)

Spirit appearance-Genwaku Awai is a dragon that looks light she is made of pure light and Fuhen Kuragari is a dragon that looks like he is made of shadows.

Bio-Woke up one day in the Rukon District after being attacked and killed by a hollow in the human world with two swords on his side. He was then attacked by bandits and found and saved by a old retired shinigami. He was then trained in basic sword fighting skills before setting out on his own. After getting into several fights and showing signs of spiritual pressure, old man yamamoto came and told him that he would no longer be allowed to live in the Rukon District. From there he was trained and graduated from the shinigami academy in less than five months. After that he was placed in squad 10. Soon after discovering his zanpakutos abilities he was moved to squad 2 because of the assasin like abiilites his zanpakuto showed. From there he became the captain of squad 3 and is to this day.

Behavior-Doesn't like to be shown up by any woman in battle, and prefers to be alone. The only people he is nice to belong to squad 3.

I think this one is pretty good myself but i would like everybodys comments if they don't mind.
over a year ago kimoy4321 said…
smile
Name: Kim ( last name unknown )

Age: 160 ( 21 yrs. old in appearance )

Height:5'4"

weight: 122 lbs

Muscle build: average

Rank: Covert Ops Agent

Apperance:

kim has black hair, dark-brown eyes and he also wears the standard Shinigami robes.

Personality :

Kim is neutral to every thing he encounters but is serious during battles.

Bio:
As an agent of the covert ops he chooses to hide every info about him.

Offense : 100

Defense : 80

Mobility : 90

Kidō/Reiatsu : 100

Intelligence : 80

Physical Strength : 80

Total : 530/600


[zanpakuto's name/shikai name]

Sashimasu ( Sting )

[release command]

Mokuteki , Sashimasu ( Aim , Sting )

[bankai name]

Kami no Hari ( God's Stinger )

=description -

Sashimasu in its sealded state takes the form of a wakizashi with dark green hilt and a silver round guard.


[shikai abilities] -
after saying the release command, Sashimasu will take the form of a katara (dagger). The wielder's lower arm holding Sashimasu is covered by an armor connected to the handle of the weapon.

= Kumon no kiri ( Mist of Agony )

- every time the wielder waves the dagger Sashimasu creates dark green mist, those who smell its strong scent will suffer intense pain making them unable to fight at their full potential. This ability also allows Sashimasu to extract small amount of reaitsu from the opponent and/or its zanpakuto. Extraction of reaitsu is only possible after the opponent smells the scent and Sashimasu gets contact with the zanpakuto and/or its owner. The wielder is unaffected by this ability. This ability is usable in both bankai and shikai modes.



[bankai abilities] -


= in its bankai state the zanpakuto retain its dagger form but is more dangerous, Kami no Hari creates large amount of poisonous mist ( without waving the weapon ) . The wielder is able to control the mist to avoid hurting allies. The unique poison of Kamisama no Hari can now burn( when the mist gets contact with the skin and the scent is not smelled ) or worst , damage and destroy cells ( only possible after smelling the strong scent of the mist ) at cellular level. Anyone affected by this ability suffers more intense pain while his body is destroyed at cellular level and turns into mist same to what Kami no Hari's. Either in shikai or bankai, the blade secretes poisonous fluid that flows from the handle to the tip.


Dokuga ( Venom Fang )=

this ability allows the wielder to fire highly condensed spiritual energy. The wielder pulls his dagger back as it gathers dark green spiritual energy around the blade and launches it towards his opponent. The fired spiritual energy contains Kamisama no Hari's poison and takes the form of a projectile when fired. Anyone hit will suffer intense pain while his body is destroyed at cellular level and turns into mist. The wielder can fire multiple blast in rapid succession with relative ease. These blast has enough force to demolish several buildings.

Hyaku doku-dama ( Hundred Venom Spheres )=

the wielder forms hundred venom spheres overhead. The spheres are made of reaitsu that contains Kami no Hari's poison. At the wielder's will the hundred spheres shoot towards the opponent. When it hits an opponent the poison will go to its body and destroy it at cellular level.





:)
last edited over a year ago
over a year ago Chaosforgotten said…
English name: Shifting Mist

Japanese name: ShifutoMisuto

Release command: Shade!

Bankai name: Itsuwari no

misuto o shifuto

Descrption: It's Shikai has a

guard shaped like a swirling

cloud with sharp pointed

features. The blade is white

and the hilt is red with white

stripes from guard to bottom.

Bankai is a scythe with a

black pole and red blade.

There is a second blade going

the opposite way from the main

blade it is half the length

of the main blade. The

bladeless end features a pure

white billowing plume.

Shikai abilities:

Kumo o katameru- It condenses

the air in the area designated

by a swing of the blade into a

hard substance resembling a

small patch of heavy fog. Can

be used as a shield, meant to

be used as a shield.

Kiri o tsutsumu- Covers the

field with heavy fog

concealing movements to all

(Including the user.)

Bankai abilities:

Misutokurōn- Creates a perfect

image of the wielder that can

attack as a real being but

dissaparates when struck.

Kanzen ni kiri o kakusu- The

wielder becomes one with the

mist created and in exchange

for massive amounts of riatsu

can take on the properties of

mist when attacked (An example

is when a blade swings at

wielder, it passes through as

if it were cutting mist.)
over a year ago bleach_num4_fan said…
Chaosforgotton - can you try to use a different format for typing your zanpakuto? yours gave me a headache.
over a year ago Mei_Hana-chan said…
wink
Hey everybody! Im Hana Mei and I'm relatively new to Bleach and its fan stuff and was wondering if anybody could give me some pointers about making my own zanpakuto! Thanks!!! ;P
over a year ago CanisDirus212 said…
Hana Mei: Make sure you try to be as creative as possible. Picking traits and powers for your blade that resonate with you and your particular personality should be a goal while making your zanpakuto. After all, the zanpakuto soul is supposed to be born directly from yours. Its also a good idea to make sure that your blade isnt crazy overpowered. Ex. one hit kills, all powerful illusions and the like. also try to avoid blades that copy the powers of other blades, its been done 1000 times and honestly is getting rather obnoxious. Mostly just try to think outside of the box and think it through before you post it.
over a year ago Mei_Hana-chan said…
Thanks CanisDirus212!!! You've been very heplfull and im already working on making it. Do you know a good place to get your translations?
over a year ago CanisDirus212 said…
Haha what kind of translation? If you check my most recent blade on page 146 you'll see that I prefer to use Latin base names for my blades and their releases. But most online translators are fairly decent. At least for Latin translations.
over a year ago Mei_Hana-chan said…
wink
Okay, thanks! I think I'll use Japanese since thats where my grandparents and up lived. Lol. THANKS!!!
over a year ago Soundsword102 said…
Two things, One, HOW THE HECK DOES THE FIRST PART OF THE HUECO MUNDO SEASON ENTER THE FRIGGIN NEW CAPTAIN SEASON! IS IT IN THE PAST OR DID HE GET ORDIHEMA OUT THAT FAST! AND WAS CHAD ACCUALLY KILLED! and two, hana mei, to get translations, google translator is wat i use.
over a year ago Mei_Hana-chan said…
wink
Ah Okie thanks! All the other places were really confusing... :P
over a year ago Kazen217 said…
Name: Kazen Kusimuki
Father: Kenkyū-kai Kusimuki aka The Royal King
Personalility: Ruthless, which means he wont show mercy
Family Orgin: The Royal Family

Zanpakuto Name: Kuiaratameru (repent)
Shikai's Name: kuiaratameru Korosu (Repent Kill)
Release Command: Slay Sen shibō (Slay a thousand Deaths)
Bankai Name: Shi Kuiaratameru (Death Repents)

Shikai Abilities: Gives his master more powerthan before and slows down his masters opponent

Bankai Abilities: 1st form can transform of others swords and bankai and is able to use their abilities, 2nd form can be formed out of nowhere at anytime

More is to come i will post more about my character and his sword later please let me know what you think thx
over a year ago Dragonbane78 said…
Hey I'm new so i just wanted to see if you guys like my idea for m a zanpakuto. here goes nothing. also there will be three of the zanpakutos.

Hain [Dragons eye(truth)]
Shikia: release "blaze"
Bankia: Dragons fang and eye
The shikia looks like an old fashion longsword exept the hilt is a dragons mouth.

Seerer: lets user see the future.

Hells wrath: releases the fires of hell

Min [Dragons fang(justice)]
Shikia: release "Blaze"
the sword looks like an old fashion broadsword exept has dragons mouth for hilt.
Bankia:HainMin(the dragons eye and fang)
Hain and min merg together to form a broad-longsword with dragon heads juting out for hilt gaurd.

Shikia ablities:

has only one Divine punishment: the sword attaches a thread of reistiu to the opponent if it turns gray you are guilty and will die extremely painful death.

bankia abilities:

seerer becomes more powerful.

Divine punishment becomes more powerful capturing multiple targets.

hells wrath becomes strong and greater in proportion and makes the shikias look like a small wild fire.

Gligamesh
Gligamesh looks like a regular zanpakuto execpt the hilt guard is curved up. it is in fact ten blades.

release: "incarnete"
the ten blades in to one gaint broadsword the weilder also gains the ability to control time and demonsions.

alpha: he can freeze, speed up, slow down, or destroy time all together.

Beta: can create or open demonsional portals.

Bankia: spidre(spider) Gligamesh

Gligamesh seperates and connects to chains. loses the hilts the chain is actually tiny blades connected by a large amount of reistiu. attach to the wielders back. the lenght is to how far the blades can go is unlimited. the wielder can either control the blades wiht his mind or his hands. the second form is for drastic measures only( other words you pissed me off).

abilities:
The ability to control time becomes even more powerful. Can also fire a slash like Ichigo's execpt it is compressed of time energy.

the ability to control demonsions becomes even more powerful. some thing as the time ability.

(When blades merge again) Apocalypse: can hold the opponent in a certian radius and release the end of the world on the opponent. can be so powerful completely destory the opponents zanpakuto.
over a year ago jason_denean said…
No offense intended,Dragonbane, but most of your post is somewhat confusing. Could you maybe but in things like time limits or cooldowns on the see the future ability and time control? If the shinigami can use those whenever that would seem rather over powered. The other znapakutos count in this too. And your zanpakutos are already rather over powered as it is. You just really need to tone it down alot because they are all way to over powered. P.S. I;m not trying to be mean so please don't take it that way...
over a year ago Dragonbane78 said…
Now for my character.

Name Cyrus bane

Cyrus used to be Captian of squad 14. when he was in charge people feared him the only person loyal to him was his leutenaint Simin. Simin and CFyrus left the Soul scoiety brand tratiors for no reason the 14 squad was destroyed and all records of Cyrus or squad 14 destroyed. when he was in the human world he gained the power of the vizards by force. he then became their leader. soon after thought he was killed by hollows. he then became a hollow because he heard that they were becoming arrancars like Arturo. he became an arrancar like arturo they he did not hate the soul scoeity or the human world. the reason for doing this was so he could experince both parts of the Sprirt Cycle. he still has all of his abilities including the vizard mask. He has so much spiritual pressure now he can hold his bankia for years with out worry. he has black hair that goes to his waist it is tied in a ponytail. His eyes are blue but its all blue no pupils are whites. All that is left of his hollow mask is a dragons jaw. when he was a vizard his hollow mask was a dragon with blue black silver and gold marks. he has to wings on his back and a long tail( both dragons!).






Now for the zanpukto spirits. hain and min are twin dragons thought they look nothing alike. Hain is a deep green. Hain has only one eye(his right), and is smaller compared to his brother. Hain is playful and does not like to fight but will if he has to.
Min is a deep red he is very aggressive and is more mature then Hain. Of the to hain is the smart one despite his young age.Min has only his left eye. when in bankia form they merge into one dragon and that is the only time Min ever listens to Hain.hain and Min learned honor and pride from gligamesh.

Gligamesh is a swordsmen who enjoys a good fight thought he has honor. he will not fight if his opponent is weak and nor will he fight (no disrespect people but i agree with 200%) a girl. Hain and Min look at him like a father.

simin was with Cyrus when he died he has always followed Cyrus where ever he went so he followed cyrus in death(thoght you better to know what happen to simin is zanpakuto is a secret because nobody but cyrus knew about it).
over a year ago sushi116 said…
rainy
zanpakuto name: hyokami (ice wolf)

shikai: howl at the ice moon, hyokami

bankai: aisu tsuki hyokami (icy moon ice wolf)

shikai attacks: kimi onimasu(ki-mi o-ni-mas)(ice coffin) it incloses the enemy and it strikes all ur presure points at once with shurikens made of ice.
chihoun sanimo (chi-hon san-i-mo)(breaking box) if u get a cut from my sword a box forms around ur bones and it tightens on ur heart every 10 seconds.
sugiruu (su-gi-ru)(devoring death) ice forms in ur pupils and it grows till it reaches ur brain and from there it starts to devore it.

bankai attacks: aisu chin(i-su sh-in)(crushing death)if i give the smallest cut an ice box forms around ur heart and it crushes it every time u block or attack.
imi no hana(i-mi no ha-na)(concealing ice flower) it sucks ur blood out if ur cought in it. (its huge)
kuririn tou hyokami(ku-ri-rin toe he-o-ka-mi)(call the pack ice wolf) this is my favorite! hyokami calls a never ending pack of wolves its never ending because theyre created by the moister in the air making it my best attack.

and when i use shikai my sword turns into a double edge sword and it turns ice blue.
in bankai she appears in her human formand her wolf form and her human form she also has a sword and the wolf has steel claws and fangs, she can make them grow or shorten.

thank u!
last edited over a year ago
over a year ago wolfmaster3000 said…
well let me start reviewing these two blade's first up is Dragonbane78 I may sound dickish but i'm not trying to be


Seerer: lets user see the future.

Hells wrath: releases the fires of hell


okay let me start with the two abilties above are those Natura abilties ? or Zanpakuto even if what do you mean by releaseing the fire's of hell ? and let's you see into the future ? that's really OP and OR

your first shikai is also overrated you kill some one instantly ? are you nut's okay we try to make our Zanpakuto like in the show even Azein had to put effort into killing people sorry but this abilty is to OP and OR.

bankai

look to the first shikai review

look to what I said about your two abilties let alone stregthening them.


now I recemend before you make another blade to follow the format or see what other's have done and how people have been able to make OP thing's less OP and acceptable.


Giglamesh In general the description of the blade's was confuseing also slowing down time and opening rift's is a big power to be messing with I don't have problem's when most people do so but when people just say they can slow time I wanna know for how long , the area of witch it take's up and if it affects the user. now with rifts what I wanna know is how big are the rifts how long dos it take you to travel inbetween rifts and can you put other people in there.


to get good idea's for Zanpakuto and see the proper format I recomend you look at some of Jstar18 whiteflame55 and Brokensun35 you can see all there work on this form or go to bleach the fallout charcter's and you will see there work.


okay next blade sorry shushi116 but it's your turn to get burned :P


Hyokami-

first shikai- okay encloseing the enemey and than proceeding to launch shuriken sounds alot like a doubble abilty it's ethier you launch the shuriken or you enclose the enemey, I also wanna know how big the shuriken are how powerful they are and how fast they move. I'd also like to now how big this ice coffin and how long your enclosed for , how long do I remain traped ? .


second shikai - well again this is an OP and OR ablity so what your saying is if I get cut on the arm this ice box forms on my heart witch is a one hit kill but saying I live through it, it curshes my heart every 10 seconds thats not right a abilty like this should have a HUGE cool down time and a very minimal effect time. however to make this abilty just as effective and not so OR and better in combat is this you have a freezeing slahs abilty meaning when you strike the part of the body you strike freeze's. but you'd have to state for howlong and howlong it take's to melt.

third shikai- well again that abilty is Over powered and Overrated again i'm not trying to be mean but WTF ice not only randomly forms in my eye's makeing me blind but it stetches to my brain and eat's it again this is a doubble abilty. okay a abilty like this shouldn't even exist it's so OP you should have to hit the person in the eye it should have a time limit and a huge cool down time again to make this abilty less overrated but effective in comabat use something that cut's off the sense of sight.


Bankai abilties

first bankai-look to the first shikai

second bankai-now I have no clue how big the area is now you say it's huge so what could that mean ? and how does this suck out your blood and i'm assumeing this take's the shape of a flower or something or other.


Third bankai-okay you can't just use Moister in the air however give a Raiduis how big it is this is a abilty that's too much and how many wolves at a time can you make ? how big are they and how fast do they move ?


okay in bankai can your spirts fight or are they just there ? if they can fight that would be a fourth bankai abilty.
over a year ago Dragonbane78 said…
thanks for the advise wolfmaster and jason_dean. I realized after i log off how vague i had been. I was going to make a zanpukto for Cyrus' leutanit. Plus Because cyrus' and Simin's need Resurrección blades blades because they are arrancars.
over a year ago Dragonbane78 said…
Simin Valdas

Bio: Simin was born when two hollows where in battle. When they collided for the finally attack their spiritual pressure merged and took on a human form. Cyrus found Simin right after. Simin at the time had enough spiritual pressure to match that of a captian. Cyrus took him and trained him. Later Cyrus made Simin his leutanit. At the time his spiritual pressure was greater than any other captian(beside Cyrus).After Cyrus left the Soul society and became a vizard Simin contiuned to train with Cyrus.

Well Simin may seem rude and arragant, he is very respectful refering to people higher than him as sir. He is more respectful to Cyrus refering to him as Lord Cyrus or Master or My lord. He followed Cyrus even in death.
His Vizard mask looks more like a plain skull then anything else.
All that is left of his mask when he was a hollow is a blue strand of hair. Simins hair is black and he has Navy blue eyes. he Has a black angels wing and a serpents tail.

Zanpakuto: Thor

when sealed the sword looks like a regular zanpukuto. the hilt gaurd is a dark green.
release phrase: engulf the world.

when released the hilt guard merges with the sword kinda. the blade extendes and becomes a double sided sword. the zanpakuto is a fire and wind based though it looks like lighting.

Shikia abilities:

Thors Wrath: the blade is engulfed in a lighting colored fire and can be fired off like Getsuga Tesho. It also can be used to increase Thor's physical strenght. Though it only lasted for 50 minutes.

Lokies Might: The blade is engulfed in spiritual pressure. This move will aloow the user to attack from a further distance. This attack can only be used as long as their is spiritual pressure to be found.

Almighty power: The two abilities from before merge. the users speed and strenght increase. the attack can only be used for 2 hours.

Bankia: The Almighty power of Thor.

The blade remains the same. the hilt extends into a gauntlet and goes all the way up the users are. it ends at a prong shaped shoulder plate but is filled with the the lighting colored fire.

The winds sorrow: the opponent and the wielder can no longer use Flash Step. This lasts as long as the Bankia is activtated.

The Earths Despire: the opponent and the wielder can no longer use hakudo. Lasts as long as the bankia is activated.

Natures end: opponent and wielder can no longer use Kido. last as long as Bankia is activated.

Resurreccion: Mayhem

The strand of blue hair extends into the skull mask. He takes the form of a sprite ( being mixed with two attributies). in this form he can now use the special technique Cyrus taught him. Its called Durri. it is a combination of sonido,Shupo, And the quincies technique.

over a year ago Byakuyaboo said…
[zanpakuto's name/fenikkusu no koto soaring phoenix
[release command spread you're wings]
[bankai name] - not achieved yet...
description it has burnt orange detales with an oval gaurd
with 4 phoenix claws around it but in shikai it changes to a
Kusarigama
[shikai abilities] 1 is Hi o kurenjingu (cleansing fire)
my shimigami swings The kusarigama in to an apponent and thay catch
fire 2 Iyashi no kasai healing fire if my shimigami wants he can
cut a wound and a white fire heals a wound on him or who ever he wants 3 Jigoku saikuron inferno syclone my shimigami swings the kusarigama over
his head and a tordado of fire surrounds him and attacks by
scorching eny thing in its path

[bankai abilities] - not achieved
so what do you think?
over a year ago Dragonbane78 said…
Byakuaboo, its ok but its kind vague and confusing. Next time try to be more descriptive. also spell the words correctly. Please don't take this the wrong way but it made no sense to me.
over a year ago Dragonbane78 said…
About Durri, only three people can use it Cyrus his father and Simin.
So you can't copy this technique.
over a year ago Dragonbane78 said…
Cyrus' Resurreccion: cuerpo del dragón (Dragon's body)

In this form Cyrus turns in to a hollow dragon but it stands an looks human like( ten fingers ten toes stuff like that). his Cero like Simins is a multicolored cero.
over a year ago Dragonbane78 said…
Jstar18 i noticed that ( maybe someone else told you this but right now i want to get it out of the way) when you created Izangi you used a character from a game called Naruto. And all of your abilities from naruto to. Don't mean to cause any harm but its true so try creating something off the top of your mind. Thats what i did for my zanpakuto.
over a year ago whiteflame55 said…
Um...which blade are you talking about Dragonbane? I've looked at jstar's blades, and I don't recall anything using something like Izanagi.
But that's besides the point. I encourage people on here to transform ideas they've seen elsewhere into abilities for their blades, mainly because anything we come up with is biased by something we've seen before. Your blade's name, Thor, and many of the pieces of its abilities, come from the Norse god. There's no problem with that, I'm just pointing out that no one comes up with ideas in a vacuum. Jstar's created a lot of amazing blades, and I'd encourage you to look at them on Bleach: Fallout Characters where they're all listed.

That said, I'll get you a review of your blade later today when I have a chance.
over a year ago wolfmaster3000 said…
ummm Dragonbanke

Tsukiyomi

Sasunoo

and Ameratsu are all japense god's and Izangi being the there father .....
over a year ago whiteflame55 said…
Alright, here's my review:

Shikai
1) So this seems like 2 separate abilities put together. The first is the energy strike (lightning colored fire) and the second is the physical strength buff. You can have it one way or the other. I'd go with the former, considering the strength buff is undefined. In terms of the latter situation, I have to ask whether the fact that the attack is made of fire makes it affect differently. Since it's fire, does it burn the opponent? Does it spread like fire? Does it have properties of lightning?
2) What does it mean to attack from a distance? Does it mean that a strike extends much further out from the blade, or that it launches a strike from the blade? What does it look like? Can that strike block other strikes? How far does it extend?
3) Again, this looks like 2 separate abilities: a merger of the first 2 (which seems kind of odd...why can't the first 2 just be used at the same time?) and the speed and strength increase. What's more, I'm wondering why the first 2 should be used at all when he's capable of using this ability at the exact same time, no matter that it lasts so much longer (2 hours vs. 50 minutes). Either way, this needs to be better defined overall. It's all rather ambiguous.

Bankai
1) I get this one, but I don't see how it follows on from the shikai. Seems like speed decreases (which is what this basically is) is the opposite of what your shikai stands for, and while there's supposed to be differences between bankai and shikai, this seems like a complete turnaround.
2) I think you meant "The Earth's Despair," might want to clarify that. Again, the deprivation of abilities seems rather odd here. I think you meant "Hakuda", not "Hakudo", which means hand to hand combat, but I'm not sure. If that's the case, I have no idea how this functions. How is someone prevented from using their hands, and still able to wield their zanpakuto?
3) I understand this one, but this is probably more out of place than anything. You haven't even addressed kido in any of the other abilities, seems odd to include it here. Overall, the bankai is just so much about negation that it becomes a battle of strength, swordfighting and zanpakutos with nothing else in between. What's more, this seems heavily focused on fighting a soul reaper and not anyone else. For example, when it comes to speed, shunpo is affected by your first bankai, but not sonido or hirenkyaku. Kido also doesn't include cero, bala, or anything a quincy or arrancar uses. Hand to hand combat may be the only thing with even effect.
over a year ago jstar18 said…
@Dragonbane78 - Yeah not trying to bash you or anything like that but Izanagi is a Japanese Deity and he had 3 kids: Amaterasu (Sun Goddess), Tsukuyomi (Moon God), and Susanoo (Storm God)! I was making a blade based on them. The kids are spirits so the shikai only plays with their mind and I named the Bankai Izanagi because he represents creation so the powers take a physical form. Just google it next time.
over a year ago jstar18 said…
@Dragonbane78 - Also I've made about 20 blades up here so of course I'm making them from the "top of my mind"!
over a year ago kimoy4321 said…
smile
[zanpakuto's name/shikai name]

Runa ( Luna )

[release command]

Suraisu , Runa ( Slice , Luna )

[bankai name] -

Ketsueki Runa ( Blood-Luna )

=description -

- Runa's sealed form resembles a typical Wakizashi with a rectangular guard, a black handle and a blood-red sheath. When in its shikai state, Runa extends into a double-edged sword with the same length and width of a katana but the crossguard is missing.

[shikai abilities] -

Shi no tokkō ( Death Slayer )

Runa gathers large amount of spiritual energy in the blade and every time the wielder slashes down opponents the spiritual energy overflows from the tip that forms into a large blade-like appearance that slices and explodes in contact. The blast then leaves a large crater on the ground and even destroy buildings in area of the blast..

Jigoku no kiba ( Hell fangs )

Runa can fire, by slashing or pointing , three large ( double the size of the wielder ) needle-like projectiles at its target. These needle-like projectiles are capable of causing large-scale damage and destruction. The destruction power of this ability can destroy several buildings and leave a large crater on the ground. These needle-like projectiles are formed in front of the wielder that is triggered by the wielder's slashes ( fired simultaneously ) or by pointing at his target ( fired at once ) and explode in contact.


[bankai abilities] -

= Ketsueki Runa retains its shikai shape but the blade is blood-red instead.

In its bankai state, Ketsueki Runa retains the use of her shikai abilities in the same manner but the power ( enough to destroy a large radius of a town ) and speed ( doubled ) are augmented. The wielder can control the path of the projectiles ( 5 seconds ) (blood-red in color ; dark-green in shikai).

The speed is enhanced : The released of the bankai augments automatically the speed ( doubled ) of the wielder. The wielder can fight at high-speed combat thus allowing him to create afterimages of himself to confuse opponents.

Enhanced strength : also doubled, with the same manner as the enhanced speed. The wielder can level buildings or mountains in just a single sway of his sword. He can also block and break attacks just like strong blade attacks and binding kido spells with his bare hands.

Enhanced spiritual energy : The wielder can sense spiritual energy blocks away from him even those who have low spiritual energy are sensed. The wielder's spiritual energy is so strong that it could do damage to humans just by being in the vicinity of his released bankai.

Even the wielder's bankai duration is enhanced as well because spiritual energy is compressed thus allowing the wielder to use the abilities at much longer duration.


hhmmmm..


last edited over a year ago
over a year ago whiteflame55 said…
kimoy -

From what I can see here, you have a good concept of how this works, though you have to explain it a good bit better for others to have the same knowledge.
On the shikai, you describe the power of their strikes, but I'm a bit confused. I don't often see needles creating craters or going through buildings in the manner you've described, mainly because they don't slice or hit concussively. It seems you're ascribing abilities seen in other weapons to needles, though I could be wrong. As far as I know, needles are very much about causing damage by stabbing force, so I could see them going through buildings, and even going deep into the ground, but that's about it. But this also lacks a good deal of specificity. What's the speed of the needles? Are they all released at once, or does the swing release each simultaneously? You say they're large, what's large?
On the bankai, many of these questions are exacerbated by the fact that you're enhancing it. I don't know what level we're starting with, so an understanding of what a power and speed increase can do is lacking. What's more, the power and speed increase should be quantified in order to make this more understandable. If the projectiles are now blood red in color, what were they before? If the speed of the projectiles is intense (which I'm guessing it is), why is control of direction helpful (high speed projectiles can only be controlled to a certain extent no matter how hard you try after they launch)? You've also added on factors to the wielder, those need to be quantified in some way. The most confusing aspect, however, is the final one. How is a bankai able to enhance its own duration? What does that mean? Does it mean less energy is spent than with other bankais? How long would it last without this aspect? How long does it last now?
over a year ago Dragonbane78 said…
Jstar18 not trying to be rude but i have seen Izanagi for Naruto. The abilities I have also seen being used as well. go on google and check if I'm wrong.
over a year ago Dragonbane78 said…
Wolfmaster i try not to familarize myself with legends to much. Plus I make it my job to know as much about anime and manga of stuff that interests me as possible. Also its Dragonbane.
over a year ago Dragonbane78 said…
Whiteflame Simins Bankia abilities are meant to even up a fight. also his bankia is very heavy and he can't much use his hands for kido or shupo. last by hands to hand combat i mean that if somebody( like Yoruichi Shihōin) can't bash him around(also using your zanpukto is called zanjustu).i didn't mention the fact he could still use his shikia abilities because that would seem a little over kill
over a year ago Dragonbane78 said…
If people are curious what a sprite looks like here is an image. subtract the blood and add the serpents tail an you got Simins hollow form(also the skull mask).
If people are curious what a sprite looks like here is an image. subtract the blood and add the serpe
over a year ago whiteflame55 said…
dragonbane - I know they're meant to even up the fight. The issue is that they're massively disjointed with the shikai. It's like 2 completely different blades. You'll notice from the show that the vast majority of bankais are extensions of shikai abilities in some way at least. These have nothing to do with the shikai. You still aren't explaining the hand-to-hand combat issue very well. HOW are their punches stopped? You're saying an opponent literally cannot use them. What does that mean? Are their arms and legs suddenly going to become worthless when they hit someone? Will they be permanently worthless and you'll just flail against your opponent? I want to know what's going on with that ability. I never asked whether he was able to use his shikai abilities in bankai. I'm still very confused on your blade in general.

As for your point to jstar about use of Izanagi, let's refer back to the blade that you're talking about. It literally only mentions Izanagi as the name of the Japanese deity. You're right, that just happens to be the name of an ability in Naruto whereby the boundaries between reality and illusion are removed. I see absolutely no mention of anything resembling that in the blade he created. I find it really hard to believe that he copied the name from Naruto when he doesn't even take away the basic concept behind the abilities. As for the individual abilities (Tsukiyomi, Amataseru, and Susanoo), let's compare between these abilities and the ones in Naruto.
Tsukiyomi (jstar): neurotoxin that affects vision (shikai), creates a zone of influence wherein all the opponent's worst fears become reality and are able to attack and damage them (bankai).
Tsukiyomi (naruto): an entirely psychological ability, this allows the person to go inside the mind of the opponent and inflict tremendous torture on them without ever inflicting real wounds on their body.
Amataseru (jstar): neurotoxin that affects the nervous system, causing them to feel a burning sensation at the slightest touch (shikai), heat is stored in the blade and transferred to the opponent upon being cut or thrust out in a wave form from the blade in the ground or the air, releases of the heat require more heat to be stored before it can be used again (bankai).
Amataseru (Naruto): The eye of the wielder starts to bleed, and a black fire is released wherever their gaze lands. That black fire burns hotter than normal flames and cannot be put out. The amount of black flame is nearly infinite.
Susanoo (jstar): neurotoxin that weakens muscle tissue (shikai), samurai armor surrounding the wielder that releases electric pulses that mirror enemy attacks, though it cannot block sword swings, and causes paralysis upon touching the opponent (bankai)
Susanoo (Naruto): A giant armored spirit comes into existence. This spirit, as far as we know, is immune to all attacks, and has the ability to make physical strikes with a weapon (though that weapon seems to change between Itachi and Sasuke), as well as using ranged strikes of multiple sorts. It will block and rebound any physical strike.

There are similarities here (though, I would argue, there are dramatic differences as well), but at worst, jstar did a good job of adapting and changing the ideas from Naruto to a Bleach-centric system. What I think is more likely, however, is that Naruto borrowed their ideas from the mythos of these Japanese gods, and that jstar used the same mythos to craft his own. Seems a reasonable explanation, doesn't it?
last edited over a year ago
over a year ago Soundsword102 said…
Wait, i just got here, what is this argument about?
over a year ago whiteflame55 said…
Whether jstar used abilities found in the anime Naruto as abilities for a blade that he'd made a while back.
over a year ago kimoy4321 said…
smile
whiteflame

actually i was lacking of tym wen i made the post...couldn't get ideas that much wen i was making RUNA...but i edited it...the power and speed varies though on how strong and fast the wielder is before the release ( bankai ) it will be doubled after Ketsueki Runa is released...

but as what my post says...the wielder is really strong...and even stronger when bankai is released...
last edited over a year ago
over a year ago jstar18 said…
@Whiteflame - Thanks for defending my blade but its obvious that the guy thinks the creator of Naruto created Izanagi, Amataresu, Tsukuyomi and Susanoo as well as all the powers too, SMH! There's no point in trying to make him understand as he already said that he doesn't care to know anything about Mythology or Legends so he's not gonna understand where I got my blade idea from. No need to waste anymore of your time explaining.
over a year ago Soundsword102 said…
i get it and jstar and whiteflame are right, Izanagi, Amateratsu, Tsukuyomi, and susanoo are all japanese gods and naruto copied moves of there names. Amateratsu is the god of day(or sun) and they use that name to make black fire, i should know. my father was a teacher.
last edited over a year ago
over a year ago Dragonbane78 said…
Guys its not that i don't care about Mythology or legends i just try not to get caught up in them. Personal I'm for the Greek and Rome Mythology then anything else. Whiteflame, what i mean is it would be like a regular punch form a human( like Kiego). The difference between the shikia and the Bankia abilities are from his hollow nature and i have know other way to explain it.
over a year ago Dragonbane78 said…
Also before you guys make anymore comments I understand and will cease the argument about Jstar's blades. Next i might not be able to make some posts for a will. Take some time to think stuff through. You guys should try this some time it works. Finally for the people who jump around from episodes or are behind in the episodes and are confused, use hule and watch the episodes there.
over a year ago whiteflame55 said…
...Alright, while I don't understand a good portion of what you said in that last post, I'm a little taken aback by you saying that we should "think stuff through." I've enjoyed making the blades I've made, and I've enjoyed reviewing other people's blades. I don't need to "take some time" because this is what I do for fun. I'm in a graduate school program, and I take this as one of my few opportunities to get away from schoolwork and enjoy reading other peoples' ideas for blades, characters and stories. So why should I "take some time"?
over a year ago whiteflame55 said…
So I know that this is a zanpakuto forum, but considering the egregious lack of attention the "create your own arrancar" forum gets, I figure I'll post this here. This is my latest and, probably, most treacherous creation yet. I really tried on this one to defy a lot of the major dogma behind Bleach, most notably the concept of how an ability is activated. It's rather long and detailed, though I'd encourage anyone to give me positive or negative (especially negative, I am very big on making my ideas better) feedback on this.

Pandora is an extremely odd arrancar. She appears normal from outside impressions (though absolutely stunning in appearance), though her eyes are unnaturally clear blue, and people who stare into them get lost in their depths like staring into a bottomless lake. After she is damaged, however, her appearance dramatically modifies. All of her tissues exist as normal, but their makeup is entirely earth. Water runs in her veins instead of blood. She regenerates by pulling earth and water from the landscape around her.
She wears a silvery gown that hugs her curves with a high neck, and a long, silver broidered veil. Her hair has bright garlands of fresh flowers of all colors that never seem to wilt, with a crown of gold set atop her shoulder-length, straight brown hair.
Cero: Pandora was a creation of the gods meant to placate and fool the Titans, so her own ability to use energy is limited. Unlike other arrancar, she cannot fire off ceros made of pure energy. As such, her is a representation of the Four Winds. She essentially has 4 separate ceros that she can use, depending on the situation, though they are all (except Notus) invisible to the naked eye.
Boreas: This is basically a highly compressed storm launched out in a pocket of air. It hits with concussive force, slamming the opponent back with the force of a hurricane, though the pocket of air is the size of a normal cero and can be blocked in the same way as any cero.
Eurus: This is an extremely compressed and superheated vapor-based cero.
Notus: A wave of red sand is launched out in the forum of a cero beam. Each grain of sand quickly absorbs a very small portion of the opponent’s energy (1/10,000th of the average captain’s). It takes 5 seconds to absorb, meaning they can be brushed off before they do.
Zephyrus: This cero is focused on negation. A bubble of air is launched out that, when it collides with another energy-based attack, will transform it into a harmless gust of air.
Each ability gains strength the longer that the box remains sealed. The release happens in 3 separate stages.
Endless Curiosity (the box is opened only a crack, releasing a dark light, and then closed quickly) – Pandora’s story includes her being provided the box as a wedding gift, though one she was told never to open. The gods gave it to her under the pretense that she would eventually open it, however, due to her neverending curiosity, which they gave her. This is as far as the release can be accomplished by Pandora alone. Everyone and everything in the area is consumed by an ever-growing need to open the box. They are all able to do this. A strong will can avoid succumbing to this for as long as 10 minutes, though Pandora tends to taunt her opponents and thus accelerate the process.
Unleashed Scourge (the box is opened wide, bathing the area in the dark light, before being closed) – This requires the opponent to open the box, but will only function in this way as a result of the box being opened wide, then closed. The box will automatically open wide upon being wedged open by the opponent, but can be closed immediately. Each time it is opened in this way, it will release one spirit upon being closed. The spirit is entirely random, and will fuse with Pandora creating a one of four lines in tattoos on her face. Each provides an ability that can be used only be used for a fixed period of time, after which the tattoo disappears and the spirit returns to the box.
Insanity: Imagine something similar to Maka in her fight against Crona in Soul Eater. Her strength increases by 3x, her skin becomes as hard as steel, and she feels no pain. She has limited control over herself, and becomes intensely crazed, attacking almost nonstop. She remains in this state for as long as it takes to strike her opponent 5 times.
Pestilence: The spirit becomes a blade much like that of a scythe attached to a 2 foot handle. The blade wraps around far more, curving 270 degrees in a 2 foot wide circle. A cut suffered by it prevents platelet aggregation in the body, effectively making it impossible for the blood to clot. This means that they will continue to bleed from any cuts they receive. The blade can only cut skin once before it disappears. The effect lasts 2 minutes.
Famine: A single touch erases the most recent meal (and all the energy garnered from it) from the opponent’s system. This causes them to tire much more quickly. The effect disappears after it is applied.
Crime: The opponent is automatically affected by this ability. No matter how strong their psychological strength, this will affect them. They will be overcome by a desire to keep everything that belongs to them close by. What that means is that an opponent prone to kido spells or launching energy in general will stop using them at range. The same holds true for zanpakuto abilities. Note that this does not mean they cannot use them. They will just be overcome with the false knowledge that their ranged attacks will be intercepted, and their energy/blade taken.
Buried Hope (the box is kept open, unleashing all of its black light along with a small amount of white light): An area 3 miles in diameter and 1 mile high is covered in blackness which absorbs all light except that produced by this ability. This is the actual release of her true form. Chains of hollow but extremely strong bone form across and extend across her body, following the contours of her skeleton. The chains also cover her head, taking the place of the hair on her head and extending out the same distance. The ends of the chain both come out of her palms, extending out 7 feet and connecting to 2 lanterns. The lanterns have white fire burning inside of them, and the fire shines light through all of the chains, lighting up her whole body even in the darkness. The light from the lanterns shines out 10 feet in all directions. Anyone caught in the light will feel their hope fade from them. The longer they are in the light, the more profound the loss. After a total of 3 minutes are spent in the light, even the most hopeful individuals will lose all hope of victory and give up. If a lantern strikes an opponent, it will shatter, and the white light will consume half of the opponent’s reiatsu, no matter how strong they are. Strikes with the lantern can be blocked by zanpakuto and kido of any level, but they will only shatter when they strike the opponent.
over a year ago Soundsword102 said…
Finally finished my third one. hope you like it!This is my 2nd character!


Name:Osutin Tappa
Age:131 (13 in apperance)
Height:5`7 Weight:145
Muscle build:small bit overweight, but muscular
Rank:Captian of 9th divison

Apperance:Messy light brown hair, Greyish blue eyes, light peach skin, very smooth and attractive features, big smile, unusually large kanine teeth, wears a loose black hakama with a hood.

Personality:very kind and social. Humorous and can get even the most non-emotional people(like toshiro and byakuya) to laugh. Adds more of a warm and whimsical aura to the room. Spiritual pressure skyrockets when angry. Very intellegent.

Bio:At first, Osutin was a shy and un-social boy, wandering around alone, Stealing food and living in small cold spaces. His first winter though, he changed to a happy, warm person and joined a group of boys his age. On his 123 year, a minos grande snuck into the soul society and attacked. Somehow, he tripped it using two buildings and a length of wire. 3 shimigami came and killed it, while captain of squad one surveyed the area and sensed osutin had a great amount of spiritual pressure. He then brought him to the academy where he passed with reletive ease, but failing with kido.

Strength:80
Shunpo:90
Kido:30
Swordsmanship:100
Hand to hand:75
Durability:80
stamina:90

Zanpakto:
Name:Tsurara no ame(Icicle rain)
Sealed:short thin serrated katana witch has 3 holes in the groove of the blade. guard is a thin star like snowflake. Tsuba is light blue with a long white ribbon criss crossing on it.

Spirit:Tsurara onna With long blue hair and a simple dark blue kimono. Long black ribbon tied around her waist.Very warm personality twords Osutin. Cold twords others.

Release: Fall and pierce

Shikai: A short tanto blade Connected to a normal size katana Tsuba.
The blade is roughly 9 inches. The blade takes in a wavy snaking shape and is translucent Like Ice. Guard and tsuba are the same.

Shikai ability: 1.Hosonagai(elongate) Uses a portion of his spiritual pressure and swipes his hand across the blade, making it grow in size to almost 30 inches. Keeps its wavy form. 2. Eikyu Toda Ishiyumi (permafrost crossbow) Creates a long single icicle on the right side if the blade, Then has the ability to fire it like an arrow up to 300 Fps(feet per second). Icicle is roughly 7 to 16 inches. 3. Sodaina Supaiku(Grand spike hail) Lifts blade up to sky, creating Icicles around the opponent. These spikes can be fired in rapid sucsession(1 per 1/4 of a second). Surrounds opponent in a 10 ft radius.

Bonkai name: Tsurara no ame, Hari No fubuki
(Icicle rain, snowstorm of needles)
Release: Rapidly stab

Bonkai Description: Large(70 inches) Scythe with White wavy blade mounted on top of a light blue pole. Blade has large hole Puched through the middle of it. Pole has two hand grips protruding from it. Back of blade has a snowflake picture on it.

Bonkai ability:1.Toripuru Ekisho Ishiyumi (triple crystal Crossbow)Slashes downward, creating 3 20 inch icicle arrows And firing them at a speed of 450 Fps. 2.Hyozan Kuriumonsun(Iceberg quill monsoon) Small Ice needles rain down from the sky while the scythe repulses them tword the opponent. 3.Hahen no Rito-dama(Frozen Sphere of splinters) Small needles surround the opponent and come together in the form of a sphere. Can only be used up in the air. Takes long time to form and regenerte.


Sry if it kinda sounds like toshiro. Just noticed that. MERRY CHRISTMAS....well kinda
over a year ago BrokenSun35 said…
Zanpakuto/Shikai Name: Kuīn (The Queen)
Release Command: Release your Extravagance!
Appearance: Sealed it is a blue curved dagger with the eyes on a peacock’s feathers printed over the blade, the dagger is a foot long and the handle of the blade is a bright gold. When released the weapons grows a foot and retains its curve but otherwise its appearance stays the same.

Shikai Abilities:

Dai ichi rōdō (The First Labor): The wielders eyes become cat like with slits for pupils, the wielders strength and speed are now doubled and the wielder’s sword disappears and is replaced by 2 bronze gauntlets with claws at the ends, this ability lasts for 2 minutes and has a 3 minute recharge time...

Dai ni rōdō (The Second Labor): 5 snake like heads appear behind the wielder (These heads can be cut off but if they are 2 more sprout from the one that got cut off) they start charging a green cero like beam all at once these heads fire the beams if hit they cause no harm but release a toxin in the opponents body that distorts their senses so they feel like up is down and left is right, right is left, down is up. This effect lasts for 1 minute but if hit by 2 ceros it’s 2 minutes 3 ceros it 3 minutes and so on and so forth.

Dai go rōdō (The Fifth Labor): The wielders clothes turn blue and water forms around the ankles of the people fighting, the sound of rushing water is heard; all of a sudden a torrent of highly pressurized water shoots out from behind the wielder towards the opponent the blast is 5 feet wide and has a cutting ability of a normal sword and this water travels at kido speed and can be blocked by zanpakuto and a kido spell 40 and above.)

Bankai Name: Hera-shin no joō (Hera the Divine Queen)
Bankai Appearance: The Bankai looks like Yumichika’s shikai but the blades are slightly wider and instead of the black and white it has the same peacock feather design as the wielder’s shikai, the wielder also gains an extravagant dress that has peacock feather “Eyes” all over it, (the dress stops at the wielder ankles)

Bankai Abilities:
Dai jū ichi rōdō (The Eleventh Labor): A golden apple appears in the wielders hand the wielder can bite out of the apple; this apple will heal the wielders wounds like cuts and broken bones but not internal damage and severed limbs. If the opponent eats the apple the opponents’ spiritual energy is leached away leaving them with defenseless.

Dai jū ni rōdō (The Twelfth Labor): A giant creature 20 feet tall that has the body of a dog but 3 heads appears in front of the wielder, this creature is facing towards the opponent, this creature acts for defensive purposes, the heads can be destroyed one head at a time, it takes a very strong attack to pierce through its skin but if a kido is shot at them one of the heads swallows the kido.

Shitto no ikari (The Jealous Wrath): Bright multicolored light surrounds the ground of the wielder these lights start to form figures, these figures then turn into 5 brilliant peacocks around the wielder, the peacocks have extravagant colors and will strut around the wielder with their tail feather extended out like a fan and wont attack until commanded to, when told to attack they go from strutting around the wielder to sprinting towards the opponent(s), once the peacocks get within 10 feet of the opponent the turn into multi colored beams of light, these beams will act as spotlight and move in a linear pattern back and forth and if the opponent is caught in the line of sight of the lights they will mark the opponent with multicolored light covering 1/4 of the opponents body (It takes 4 out of 5 beams to completely cover the opponent) when covered the wielders body is surrounded by a large light blue dome, after a few moments the dome explodes with a massive multi colored spectrum of light, with a explosive power of a 100 ton TNT bomb . This ability can only be used once per Bankai release

last edited over a year ago
over a year ago ogihci015 said…
For me, my Zanpakuto will be
Shikai= Kesshōtengokumaru (Crystal Heaven)
Shikai Command= Mugen no sora ni fureru (touch the boundless skies)
Bankai= Ryoshusora (Lord of the Skies)

A zanpakuto that utilizes rain to be its weapon. As long as the battle is under the skies, this zanpakuto always have a great advantage.

Appearance - In sealed form, it takes the shape of a normal katana with a crystal blue hilt. Its cross guard have water droplets carved in four corners.
Shikai Appearance - It retains its katana form except that its blade becomes like a running water.
Bankai Appearance - It loses its katana form and become a pair of running water swords with no details. The crystal blue swords are linked by a chain of frozen water.

Shikai abilities
Kishō seigyo (Weather Control)- Kesshōtengokumaru basic ability. When release, the sky will darken and Kesshōtengokumaru will have unlimited source of water. Much like Hitsugaya's Tensō Jūrin.
Amesenko (Rain piercer) - A surge of water blades raining from the sky.
Bankai Abilities
Enhanced Kisho seigyo
Enhanced Amesenko
Kuroi Ame Ken (Black rain swords)- A dome of black heaven that have black swords pointing inwards from its ceiling. The swords resembles the form of Ryoshusora but black in color. This is only use if the user is fighting in a enclosed area with no visible sky.
Rakurai (lightning strike) - An element of storm, a flash of lightning strikes the enemy.
Saishū-tekina sāji (Final Surge)- Ryoshusora's final attack. Running water forms a giant bird and surge into the enemy with devastating force. After using this, Kisho seigyo will be deactivated for almost all the water source of Ryoshusora has been used up. It will also return to its sealed form for it cannot create a water sword.

The bearer of this zanpakuto will be the vice captain of the 13th division. She has a blue shoulder lenght hair with a sea shell pin.
She has a green eyes and pale skin. She wears a blue ribbon around her hakama and she has water droplet tatto below her left eye.
over a year ago Takeshi_Tsurugi said…
big smile
Okae so this is my first blade in awhile, been stupidly busy, hate this time of year. Anyway give me feed back especially Whiteflame and Jstar.

Name: Fūrin (Wind chime)
Release command: Nokutān (Nocturne, musical term similar to serenade)

Bankai name: Kazenokami々 Ga chaimu (Wind Gods chimes)
Appearance: Whilst sealed Fūrin is a standard katana. The emerald green sheath is matched with an emerald green hilt, with deep blue insets. The cross guard is a simple ring of steel. After it’s been released Fūrin takes on the form of a chinese broad sword with 14 silver rings up the blunt edge. Sets of two one larger one smaller inside, each ring is locked in to the blunt edge until its name is called.
Shikai Abilities:
Ability 1: Shinki sakusei (Compose). After activating this ability I call out the name of one of the rings, which are named after each note in music (A, B, C, D, E, F, G) with the additive of minor or major depending on which sized ring is released. A major and A minor cause my speed to increase the smaller ring by 25% the larger 50%, if using the smaller ring this effect can last indefinitely, however the use of the larger ring last from anywhere from 30secs to a minute. This is the same, time limit and increase, for each ring although the effect is different. B major and B minor increase my strength, the Cs increase both my strength and speed, although for half the amount when only B or A. D increases my healing factor and allows me to heal people, although this is only when using minor. E allows me to travel as far as I can see faster than flash steps, but only once each ring. F causes a blast similar to Getsuga Tenshou to be emitted from my sword, although nowhere near as powerful and only 2 times for the major and 4 for minor; major has twice the power of a minor. G encases my body in a layer of a stone like substance that impedes my movement, however adds to my defence.
Ability 2: Idaina fukyōwaon (A great cacophony). All the rings begin to rattle causing a great amount of noise that disorientates my opponent. This has no battle use at all, it is only ever used as a way to flee an unwinnable battle.

Bankai Appearance: Upon entering Bankai the rings shift up and off of my sword until they are in a holder (similar to a bandoleer) across my chest. The sword loses much of its size until it is about half the width of a standard Chinese broad sword. My hair grows until it is about half way down my back and the tips become green coloured.
Bankai Abilities
Ability 1: Dai sakkyoku-ka (Great Composer) This ability is effectively an amped up version of compose, however the boost is now 50-75 and the time limit on the majors 1-1:30. Also any of the other powers, eg healing, are even more effective.
over a year ago candy97 said…
big smile
Wat would happen if ur zanbaktos attacked???
over a year ago candy97 said…
Zanpakto-Fukusha Yaiba (copy balde)
Release-kawarimasu(change)
Describtion-blade handle spiked blade golden spikes and crystal clear reflection.
Ability-Odori Fukusha (copy dance)-Copies the opponent's image and fighting style(including Zanbakto)
Bankai-Kamisama Fukusha (god's copy)
Discription-bright silver blade golden handle with a mirror in the middle.
Ability-Kuro Kamisama Fukusha (black god's copy)-builds up reitsu as being released and when fully charged attacks with 3 times normal power. (samething as shikai ability bit 3folds stronger.)
over a year ago Takeshi_Tsurugi said…
smile
Where you asking me candy? and what exactly is your question?
over a year ago candy97 said…
Wat would happen if our zanpakto attacks us without comand?
over a year ago candy97 said…
It's to everyone
over a year ago whiteflame55 said…
See, I'm trying to understand, and I still don't. Who is the zanpakuto attacking, the wielder, or anyone? What would happen? A whole lot of dead shinigami and a whole lot of destroyed zanpakutos. I really don't get the point of the question in general. Shinigami are reliant on their weapons being under their control. If control is lost, the system that has been created is also lost.
over a year ago candy97 said…
crying
Remember Muramasa from bleach how he made the Zanbakto attack their masters so I'm asking wat would happen if that happened again
over a year ago candy97 said…
Zanbakto/shikai-Kage Senritsu(shadow melody)
Release-Utaimasu(sing)
Ability-Kage Uta(shadow song)-allows owner to control all shadows and attack or paralyze opponents
Bankai- Doku Uta(poison song)
Ability-Ryuu Uta(dragon song)-summons the dragon god to attack opponent.
Bankai description- black handle with black dragon head on top and sword coming out of dragons mouth
over a year ago whiteflame55 said…
But I suppose what I'm not getting is the end goal of that question. Sure, something like that may happen again, and if it did, I imagine they'd be far more prepared for it.
over a year ago Takeshi_Tsurugi said…
That arc was retarded anyway. Yo Whiteflame any suggestions of my blade?
over a year ago shukun_kizuku said…
i agree
over a year ago whiteflame55 said…
Takeshi_Tsurugi - This is certainly one of the most interesting blades I've seen you make. It's got a very interesting mechanism behind it, and I think it works very nicely. The only difficulty I see is that the main ability is very complex in many ways. I can see how it works, though. I don't see it being too powerful, if anything, it seems a little on the weaker side. I think you could add a couple more abilities to make it more reasonable.
over a year ago shukun_kizuku said…
Name: Zukameku
Age: Unknown
Height: 5'7
Weight: 175
Eyes: light blue
Hair: unknown
Race: Shinigami
Likes: tea and training and follows Bushido
Unlikes: people who cause problems or speak out of place



Appearance: full white ninja outfit with shinigami robe


Abilities: able to trick anyone's eyes with small illusions

Zanpakuto

Appearance: white chain wrapped around his right arm


He dose know the name of his sword and can use the abilities


Strength: 75
Kido: 95
Spell casting: 100
Reaction time: 100
Swordsmanship: 100
Hand to hand: 100
over a year ago shukun_kizuku said…
[zanpakuto/shikai name] chain of countless souls
[release command] flow through the blood and pain
= its a pure white chain wrapped around the arm of the wielder and has a kuni at the end of the chain



[Bankai name] chain of flickering souls
remains white but instead of the kuni being white its clear[see through] and elongates to 3ft long


[Shikai abilities]-
= when blood touches the chain it causes the wielder to slightly blend in with whats behind the wielder
= Increases speed of movement and chain speed
= when the kuni enters the opponents flesh it secretes a poison that slow the opponents reaction time[dost move over to bankai when wielder reaches it]



[bankai abilities]-
=when blood touches the chain it makes a doppelganger of the wielder that lives for 10 minutes and has only the ability to self destruct and can wrap themselves around any target [and they can be killed]
=the chain allows the wielder flicker in and out of sight for 3 second intervals as long as the chain is not extended
= when the kuni enter the body of an opponent it secretes a poison that causes them to misjudge the range and movement of the wielder



ok guys let me know what ya think i need feedback
last edited over a year ago
over a year ago whiteflame55 said…
Alright shukun, here's some feedback:
Shikai:
1) Whose blood activates this? What exactly is slightly blending in (is it full on camouflage or just slight distortion)?
2) What's the increase to each? Quantify it somehow.
3) Need to quantify this one as well. What kind of slowing are we talking about? Is there any increased effect that results from more cuts or deeper cuts?
Bankai:
1) Pretty much the same thing here, who's blood activates this. What's the speed and strength of the doppelganger? How easily are they destroyed? Can multiples be created?
2) So I'm confused here. Are they flickering during that 3 second interval, or are they out of sight during that 3 second interval?
3) Same questions as before. Need you to quantify the range perception and movement changes.
over a year ago Takeshi_Tsurugi said…
More abilities? Like what? Any ideas? I mean The two its got are fairly useful, what with the first one covering just about everything ever. Oh wait just went back and readed ma post again and realised I missed out the second Bankai ability
over a year ago whiteflame55 said…
You know, this is a new idea I've been toying with (you'll see it on my most recent arrancar), might apply to yours. What your opponent does could play into how yours works. The pitch of voice that they use in calling out abilities, the volume, any aspect could factor in to modulate the power of their attacks or their vulnerability to yours. This thought just occurred to me.
over a year ago whiteflame55 said…
You know, this is a new idea I've been toying with (you'll see it on my most recent arrancar), might apply to yours. What your opponent does could play into how yours works. The pitch of voice that they use in calling out abilities, the volume, any aspect could factor in to modulate the power of their attacks or their vulnerability to yours. This thought just occurred to me.
over a year ago shukun_kizuku said…
ok here is a re edited version



[zanpakuto/shikai name] chain of countless souls
[release command] flow through the blood and pain
= its a pure white chain wrapped around the arm of the wielder and has a kuni at the end of the chain



[Bankai name] chain of flickering souls
remains white but instead of the kuni being white its clear[see through] and elongates to 3ft long


[Shikai abilities]-
= when any opponents blood touches the chain it causes the wielder to slightly blend in with whats behind the wielder
= Increases speed of movement and chain attack speed by 25%
= when the kuni enters the opponents flesh it secretes a poison that slow the opponents reaction time by 25% [dost move over to bankai when wielder reaches it] the deeper the cut the faster the poison acts



[bankai abilities]-
=when any opponents blood touches the chain it makes a doppelganger of the wielder that has the same speed but half the strength of the wielder and lives for 10 minutes and has only the ability to self destruct and can wrap themselves around any target [and they can be killed very easy]
=the chain allows the wielder to be completely invisible[cant see, smell,hear, or sense] for 3 second intervals[able to see him for 3 seconds and then he is gone for 3 seconds]as long as the chain is not extended
= when the kuni enter the body of an opponent it secretes a poison that causes them to misjudge the range and movement of the wielder by 75%
over a year ago whiteflame55 said…
Alright, follow up:
Shikai:
1) How long does this last? Again, what is "slightly"? How impossible is this person to see?
2) Alright.
3) Alright, so if a deeper cut causes the poison to act faster, how long does it take to act normally? Also, again, what about multiple cuts? Does that cause the poison to act faster as well?
Bankai:
1) Again, how can it be killed? You say very easily, but that's very limited. What does that mean? A single kido spell, a single slash, a single strike, what? I'm guessing these wont die to a feather falling on them, so what's the limitation?
2) Alright, with the modifications, this is a bit much. 3 seconds of being unable to even sense the opponent is 3 seconds where the opponent is likely to be dead. Considering the speed that people can travel at in the Bleach universe, I'd say you should limit the effect a bit more.
3) The percentiles work for the shikai because of what they're applied to, but not for this. A reaction time can be reduced by a percentage, but I'm wondering what it means to misjudge range and movement by 75%. What I'm looking for here is an idea of what they might see. Just give me some concept of how far off they tend to see them. Still have to answer the same questions from shikai #3.
over a year ago zatarra said…
okay hello i'm new to this and i read some of the zanpakuto and they are awesome so i made a character and a zanpakuto for my character.

I haven't come up with a name for my character yet but he is a rouge shinigami with jet black hair with white streaks through it. He has blue eyes with orange at the center.

Okay this is his zanpakuto.
Name:San tsubasa no tenshi (three winged angel)
Release command:Mōningukōru (wake)
Bankai name:Mezameta ha tenshi (Awoken bladed angel)

Shikai description
When in shikai form the sword looks like a wing and that is it.

Shikai ability's
Hebun tatsumaki (Haven tornado) a small tornado forms around the opponent only confusion them, giving the user a chance to attack
Fōringuenjeru (Falling angels) about two hundred knife like feathers fall from the sky where the opponent is standing.

Bankai description
Feathers form into wings at the users back and the sword stays the same but it shrinks.

Bankai ability's
Tenshi no hakai (Destruction of angels)A beam is shot from the wings and if it hits it cuts the opponents reiatsu in half.
Tenshi no noroi (Curse of angels)You hit your opponent with your sword they slow down but you lose some of your reiatsu.

This is my zanpakuto comment if you like it please
over a year ago Dragonbane78 said…
candy if that did happen i simply suggest (seeming as the Zanpakuto is a symbol of the wielders spiritual energy) draw the spiritual energy form your Zanpakuto and it should fall. But if you fall kind of screwed(have to agree with whiteflame with the fact that the soul society would be prepared for this).
over a year ago Dragonbane78 said…
Whiteflame the post about the arrancar is pretty cool though i've never heard of ceros like the ones you made. It's interesting never the less I suggest to EVERONE to try making arrancars of their own.
over a year ago shukun_kizuku said…
i have absolutly no ideas for zanpakuto at all after 2hrs of thinking
over a year ago Zalakhiel said…
My ideal Zanpakuto is a slightly smaller than average katana, with a white hilt and silver guard. The blade is so clear that it is possible to glimpse through the blade even when the sword is in its sealed state.

Zanpakuto Name/Shikai Name: Tsurugi no Daiamondo (Diamond Sword)

Release Phrase: Mamoru (Protect)

The Zanpakuto`s blade takes the sheen of diamond, becoming extremely durable and gaining a very sharp cutting edge. The blade is so clear that it is possible to see through the blade without any hinderance.

Shikai Powers:

1)

Benkai no Daiamondo (Diamond Defence)

The wielder creates an almost impenetrable barrier around himself, preventing all but the strongest attacks from harming him. The drawback is the concentration required to use this power, which forces the wielder to stand motionless. One note to this effect is that the wielder can shape the barrier, so it may take the form of his choice, such as a sphere, a cube, or the outline of his own body, and also, he can extend the barrier at up to 15 feet so as to protect all those near him. Finally, it is wise to mention that the barrier is impenetrable from both sides, not just from outside.

2)

Junsei no Meiryou (Perfect Clarity)

The wielder peers through the side of the crystal-like blade of the sword, and all the enchantments and illusions affecting him are automatically dispelled. Note that this ability does not prevent the wielder from being affected by such abilities in the future, it merely removes any existing ones.

Bankai Name/ Release Phrase: Daiamondo Akumu Ken (Diamond Nightmare Blade)

Bankai Effect: The wielder gains supernatural senses concerning sight, hearing, smell, taste, touch, and reiatsu sensing. These senses can be a great boon, as the wielder can predict any move made against him before they are even made. Note, however, that the wielder does not gain the reflexes that match his senses, but he can still act on his own speed (unlike the case of the super-human drug used by Mayuri on the 8th Espada).
over a year ago AllenBleachFan said…
-Zanpakuto/Shikai name:Kinzoku
-Shikai release word:Rirīsu
-Bonkai name:Yōkō otoko
-Shekai description
Zanpakuto transforms to the image the holder has in his head. To shape the zanpakuto the holder has to put his or her own spirit energy into the sword.
-Bonkai description
The zanpakuto sprays out then it absorbs itself into the holder. The holder then transforms into a humanoid metal that is made of the same metal the zanpakuto is made of. The holder is now the zanpakuto. The holder can shape his or her own body to whatever he or she wants. The holder can absorb any metal to make his or her body bigger. The metal absorbed gets transformed into the same metal as the zanpakuto.
-Comments
The metal that the zanpakuto is made of can never rust and has a melting temperature of it is about 2500 degrees Fahrenheit. The metal is harder then diamond and titanium. This metal will never break even if it is one tenth of a centimeter wide. This metal is about as heavy as five and a half pounds a square inch.
over a year ago MarricoPaveneo said…
zzz
[Ribaiasan “Leviathan”]

= A katana of average length with a black and blue hilt and no guard

[release command - “Thrash About“]

= Becomes a glaive composed of 2 swords with 32” blades connected at the hilt. They can be separated and used individually.

[Totsugkei Ribaiasan “Assault Leviathan”]

= The user holds the two separated swords in his left hands, yes plural will explain in comments. A large column of black energy shoots upward around the user. When he returns to visibility, they are now to glaives composed of 4 segmented swords, mainly segmented for decoration, with 36” blades that can extend to 3x the original length. They can be separated into 4 swords like the shikai.

[shikai abilities]

= Sukopu To Sairensa “Scope and Silencer” - Zanpakto’s ability gives the user the ability to aim attack to the nanometer at a distance of up to a mile and allows attack to be used at full strength with speaking their name as well as minimizing the sound of the attacks themselves.

= Kaosu Hakei “Chaos Wave” - A wave of condensed black energy fired at the stroke of the blade. The afterglow of the attack resembles blue fire. It is Ribaiasan’s primary attack command.

= Kaosushirudo “Chaos Shield” - A ball of dark energy that surrounds the user for a 12’ radius. Damages and knocks back all enemies in the radius, completely negates attacks that hit is, and removes the effects of Zanpakto on the user, such as removing the flowers left by Suzumebachi. They can be reapplied however. This attack can me held for a maximum of 3 seconds and cannot be used again for 2 minutes.

[bankai abilities]

= Dakuparusu “Dark Pulse” - The Zanpakto emit’s a pulse that that prevents the enemy from moving toward the user, it also however prevents the user from moving toward the enemy. It can me used on more than one target, it can be turned on and off but once turned off cannot be use for a period of time equal to the amount of time it was last used, and can be used up to a mile in distance. Can be used up to 3mins at a time. Does not prevent ranged attacks.

= Kaosudatsu “Chaos Darts” - Highly condense darts of black energy fires from the tip of the blade. They have about half the power of Kaosu Hakei but have extremely high velocity and can be fired in rapid succession.

= Kaosu Gekido “Chaos Rage” - Blades glow with dark energy. It greatly augments the power of melee attacks increasing both power and attack speed, but prevents the use of other attacks. It can be used up to 5 mins at a time.

[comments]
= is an overhaul of my 1st Zanpakto I didn’t like how it looked when I drew the first one, this one is much better

= the reason this Zanpakto has 4 blades is because the weilder, Marrico Pavoneo, was the test subject used on Mayuri’s research on the effect that having extra arms would have on a soul reaper.

= Quick overview of Marrico:
6’11”, 245lbs, athletic build, dark blue eyes, long black hair, dark toned skin.
Squad 9 Captain-I just like the number 9 lol; Visored but hides that fact from other Soul Reapers.
Quiet and reserved but has lighter side, especially when drinking. Very keen intellectually.
Deceptively fast, likes to mix close and ranged combat as well as kido.

= Stats/Battle Data
Offense: 100
Defense: 80
Mobility: 90
Intelligence: 80
Kido/Reiatsu: 70
Physical Strength: 95

= leave feedback thanks…
over a year ago Zalakhiel said…
Now that you mention it, I forgot to post my shinigami character. here we go.

Markesias Aascalon

Age: 206 (looks about 25)

Heigth: 5'10"

Weight: 72 kgr

Eyes: Brown

Hair: Long and dark (about 3 inches below shoulders)

Offence:90

Defence: 100

Intelligence: 80

Speed: 70

Kido/Reiatsu: 90

Physical Strength: 60

Appearance: Athletic body type, wears the traditional shinigami uniform. He keeps his hair in a ponytail behind his back, and also wears a light, dark grey breastplate above his uniform. He carries his Zanpakuto by its sheath with his right hand, and has a habit of engaging a battle with a sword-drawing slash attack with his left hand. Hee is almost ambidexterous, but his main hand is his right one (which he uses when it is a necessity). Last but not least, he wears black boots instead of the usual footwear of shinigamis, a habit he got after becoming a former member of the Zero Squad.

Personallity: Markesias is a very caring and independant person. He holds truth as the paramount virtue, and supports its public knowledge even if it means more harm than good. He can be stubborn at times, but is willing to admit his mistakes if adressed properly. His intellect is high, which allows him to pick the right strategy for almost any situation, and his vast knowledge of Kido has broadened his battle options. He can cast any kind of Kido spell (Hado, Bakudo, and even Healing) up to the levels of 80, 83, and 62 accordingly. He can cast any Hado and Bakudo spell of level 70 and below without an incantation.
over a year ago LOBOSdelRAYo said…
Whiteflame I love your arrancar becuase it is the ultimate opponent against Crow becuase he would want to open the box even without the first ability becuase that Crow for you and 2 the Crime ability would pretty much make crow useless because most of his abilities are long ranged attacks becuase of his preference to use guns not swords.
over a year ago zatarra said…
what is with the offence90 is this a character for a roleplaying game?

over a year ago XxDarkWolvesxX said…
i have one.
name-LevitasOokami
release command- Fulsi LevitasOokami
Bankai ability-incases the victim and user in a white world. theres no ground or sky. theres only quiet. the only sound is the bell at the end of the sword, which only rings after the victim has lost consiousness.the user on the other hand can hear everything.
shikai ability-paralisist. for about half a second at a time the user can halt all movement of the victim. just enough time to kill them.
apperance.- the blade is a pale teal color, the edges of the blade are black. the tip is curved. the hilt is a soft silver and the guard is steel curved simply. its hard to tell wether or not its beautiful or scary.
in bankai the sword looks somewhat the same but theres a silver string with a bell attached at the bottom.
my apperance. long black hair and brown eyes. 5'6" and very sarcastic.
over a year ago john17 said…
god its been awhile from the last time i was up here i need to make a new sword maybe later this week
over a year ago john17 said…
been a long time lol well no ideas for anything
over a year ago whiteflame55 said…
Alright, let's get reviewing! Here's the review of the new blade wolf:
Shikai:
1) So I believe there's some confusion here. First, I don't see how this has a time limit. Like, does the chain revert after 2 minutes, and can be brought back to the spiky form? Seems rather pointless to add a time restraint here, it's not that powerful. Second, there's a discrepancy with the amount of pain increase. If I double the damage of what is basically a paper cut, it'll hurt a lot more, but it won't feel like my finger got cut off. From the example you've provided, it seems like it's increasing the pain exponentially rather than doubling. I think you should stick to doubling on this one. Pain doubles, that's simple enough to understand.
2) "Almost" is always a bit of a dangerous term when it comes to application. What does it mean to be "almost" impossible to see? This could mean a lot of things. It could simply mean they're being obscured, but if that's the case, why doesn't it obscure the opponent? It could mean they're somehow camouflaging. It could be something similar to something I read recently, where the opponents eyes simply always want to drift away from him every time he comes into sight, and that he's almost a moving shadow. It could be a lot of things, but I don't understand it just from what's written. I'm confused on this on multiple other levels as well. What do you mean by "sounds"? Sounds can mean a lot of things, but the first thing that comes to mind is not speech. I could understand this better if it was just speech, but it's sounding like the sound of a crashing vase or tremendous stomping is supposed to somehow scare the opponent. I'm also left wondering if a person can simply escape the 20 foot area to get out of the nightmare, and what prevents them from doing so. Beyond that, I'm always a bit concerned with nightmare based blades, mainly because they are massively variable. What's going to be a terrifying illusion for one person will be completely different from another. You say the nightmare can affect them physically, but can't be affected itself. Two problems. First, what if their greatest fear is rainbows? Are rainbows going to manifest and attack them? Second, if they can't be affected, are you saying that this ability spawns physical opponents that can do harm but can't be harmed? And since this is a nightmare, wouldn't these forms have limitless potential power? Overall, I'd say just make this all psychological. Don't even touch the factor of physical involvement in the real world with these nightmares. Make it all in their head.
3) I'm a bit confused on this one. So it creates something similar to Tousen's bankai...except that it enhances hearing? So it knocks out every other sense except hearing? Am I reading this right? Can this ability be escaped? Once you're inside the orb, are you stuck there? Does the orb travel with the wielder, or does it stay in place? If it travels, is the wielder always at the center of the orb?

Bankai:
Quick note here before I start on the abilities - is the dome you've created able to be escaped? Can someone exit the dome? If so, do any of his abilities function outside the dome? If not, what effectively neutralizes the fact that the dome is limited in size? Can the wielder move the dome? If so, how?
1) Alright, so this sounds like an ability that causes quite a bit, and I'm uncertain what that means in quite a few ways. What does it mean to lose one's "sense of self"? I have an outlook on that that's probably quite different from yours, mainly because I don't see a way that it's all that harmful in battle. Same issue with "sense of awareness." What is awareness? Awareness of what's going on around you? How can you lose that, exactly? Do you just lose peripheral vision, or do you lose the ability to comprehend what's going on around you, or do you become so fearful that you stop caring what's going on around you, or what? These are both pretty loaded terms, but I'm not seeing explanation. The second ability I see here is the concealing of the wielder's spiritual pressure. This is already too many pieces to the same ability, but I'm left wondering whether it's only spiritual presence that's lost. You say he'll never be found in his bankai with this active, yet I don't see anything in your bankai description that states that they lose other senses. You do mention that the opponent loses their sense of touch (which, I'd argue, is a third ability within this one ability), but that hardly constitutes an inability to locate someone. Speaking of which, does the lost ability to touch also mean lost ability to feel pain? Can you effectively negate their ability to feel regularly without removing their capacity for pain?
2) Alright, so I was uncertain on what you meant here until I reread it a couple of times. I think you mean that the wielder summons the OPPONENT'S fears and is able to control them, is that correct? Because the first couple of times I read it, it sounded like the wielder's own fears were being summoned. I'll address it both ways, since I'm still uncertain. If it's the wielder's fears we're talking about, I don't see how this fits with Tsukiyomi. First off, Tsukiyomi wasn't about applying fear. It was about applying severe mental anguish and pain. Kakashi wasn't presented with his greatest fear while under its effects, he was put up on a cross and stabbed repeatedly by innumerable Itachis. Second, if it was about applying fear, I don't see how applying the wielder's fear to someone else is likely to be effective in causing any sort of mental anguish on the opponent's part. For both of these reasons, I'm thinking you mean the opponent's fears are under his control. I don't see how this is stronger than your second shikai ability. If anything, it sounds quite a bit weaker because it's limited to mental effect. How many fears can he control at once? Can he get them to say whatever he wants, or can he understand automatically what the best thing for them to say is? Does he mentally link with these worst fears? Can they be destroyed?
3) Alright, so this is where the illusions get physical...I think. I'm seriously not sure, since you say this adds to mental trauma...somehow. I really don't get this one at all. If it is the physical thing, a lot of the same questions apply, namely: how many can they control, how much control do they have, can they be destroyed? A lot of previous questions apply as well: what if their fears can't cause physical harm? How does this affect a person whose greatest fear is soft and fluffy pillows? Fears are rarely straightforward, we don't always fear something out of some concept of physical harm. Some things are purely psychological. That's why there's a large segment of the population that fears (and I'm not kidding about this) public speaking more than death.

I know this is a long review and a lot to go over, but a blade like this has to be very careful about the bounds it goes to. Any blade with such a high psychological effect damages where most people cannot defend, and that really changes the rules for them.
over a year ago Chazfullmetal said…
Newbie has one!
I think the Japanese is backwards or wrong in places but oh well.

Name: Ransurotto Shichi
Height: 6ft 10
Weight: 340lbs
Muscle Tone: None
Build: Broad shoulders, thin body, tall, sturdy.
Eye colour: Metallic grey
Hair colour: Jet black
Rank: none - rogue Shinigami
Age: 27
Skin tone: pale white

Appearance: He is almost skeletal, but this is because he is genetically incapable of developing visible musculature, which works to his advantage as he is easily as agile as any other Shinigami or Hollow. His thin frame hides incredible strength, as though he is in fact very strong and sturdy, it doesnt show. He usually towers over everyone around him and people are often intimidated by his steely eyes. Most people are surprised by how heavy he actually is, but that is because he has very high muscle density.

Personality: Actually very gentle and protective, he goes out of his way to protect people, even those he doesnt like. He treats life "in its raw form" where survival is the top priority, and he claims he is how he is because he has to, not because he wants to.

Fight Style: Despite his strength he prefers to defeat his opponents with agility and presicion rather than force and power. This can make most fights with him fatally sudden and quick.

Zanpakuto - Kurokarite (Dark Reaper)
Release Command - Seirei No Takai (Spirit of Death)
Bankai - Ketsueki Karite (Blood Reaper)

Shikai Abilities:

> Tamashii Kogemasu "Soul Burn" - The user stabs the opponent in any area of the body, and sets the spirit on fire. An intense pain courses throught the opponent's body and the flames feed off of the opponent's Rieryoku (Spirit Power), effectivly eating away at their spiritual power. The flames can be quenched by piercing one's self with their own Zanpakuto.

> Miraa Kooka "Mirror Effect" - For a short while, Kurokarite's slashes inflict wounds which mirror on the opponent's body and/or spirit form, which give the user the power to effectively kill the opponent outright. The downside is that it drains power twice as fast as normal, and is probably not the best attack to use unless you're certain of landing the hits.

> Sokudo No Karite "Speed of the Reaper" - Best used against multiple targets, Kurokarite becomes longer and thinner, until it becomes similar to a rapier, and the user gains vastly increased speed. it refines Rieryoku (Spirit power) and allows the user to keep us this ability for a very long time, and strike with deadly precision. Mostly, the user tends to dodge and parry the opponent group's attacks until the subconscious picks up an opening, where they thrust the Zanpakuto with fatal accuracy to cause significant wounds. Alternatively, the user can attack with such speed and ferocity that they overwhelm the opponents.

Bankai Abilities:

> Ketsueki Dekimono "Blood Boil" - Allows the user to damage the opponent's body form by vibrating their spiritual power at high speeds so that it heats the body and causes the blood to boil, which also eats at the stamina of a Shinigami opponent. The more spiritual power the opponent has, the more damage is done. Adversely, if the victim has no spiritual power whatsoever, the ability has no effect other than to give them severe burns at most.

> Ketsueki Ayatsuri Ningyoo "Blood Puppet" - By stabbing a human or body with Ketsueki Karite, the user can take control of the victim and use them to fight the opponent for them or with them. IT also collects spiritual signatures, allowing the user to summon 'shell copies' which are mindless minions which look exactly like the initial victim, and can be made en masse, swarming the opponent

> Kokuhyou Sutoraiku "Damnation Strike" - The user unleashes the reaper spirit inside Ketsueki Karite, which then attacks the opponent. Each hit drains the opponent's spiritual power and damages their Chain of Fate, and if not stopped with sever it completely, starting the hollowfication process. To summon Kurokarite, the user must pierce the opponent's body. Once released, it will not return until it is either defeated or until it has severed the chain of fate, or in extreme cases outright killed the target.

Kurokarite resembles a very long, straight Katana with a curved tip and a brightly polished edge, and inticate patterns in white along the main body of the blade (which is black).
Kurokarite's true form always wears a skull mask and hooded robes with long, shifting, swirling patterns on the rims of the robes. Underneath, he wears a thick suit of Medieval Knight's armour, covered in wicked blades and glowing runes. However, this does not restrict movement, and he can easily keep up with the fastest of warriors with what can only be described as unholy speed. His voice is like a loud whisper, which stings to hear. Kurokarite himself doesnt actually wield his Zanpakuto form or even a Katana, preferring a long, wicked scythe and a pair of wristblades as well as a variety of knives, spears and cutlasses, which he hides among his robes or forms out of shadows, or the iron in his opponent's blood. He can also appear as a small "chibi" ghost form similar to Kuribo from Yu-gi-oh, and interact directly with his wielder or possess inanimate objects, similar to Kon with bodies and plushies.

I myself wear a tight black mask over my face, with shifting red and white patterns similar to Rorschach from Watchmes, only more intricate and sudden. I also wear a long black coat, tough boots, modified samurai armour and alongside my Zanpakuto wield a wristblade and a Tanto. I have a prosthetic right arm made of pieces of the Samurai armour, held together by my immense excess spiritual energy. As such, when the energy is depleted, the arm falls apart until i recover, at which point i need it back, or a new one made from Nth metal (the only metal that can affect and interact with spirits - and shinigami - which is also what my wristblade and tanto are made from) if it is destroyed. Finally, i own a helmet modelled after medieval european crusader helmets that i occasionally wear for battle. I have a hollow mask as well, which forms as my crusader helmet with a skull design grafted to the faceplate, and wicked, blood red horns protruding backwards from the helmet. My ultimate hollow form transforms me into a creature of complete darkness with only a skull-like mask on my face, with long claws in place of any distinct weapon, and gives me the ability to teleport short distances to strike at my opponents from all sides rapidly.

Woot.
last edited over a year ago
over a year ago wolfmaster3000 said…
i'm scraping this Bankai
over a year ago wolfmaster3000 said…
Name : Kigen Hoshi

Age : 1400 ( looks like he's in his late 20's )
Weight : 220LBS
Height : 6'1
Body type : slender with a Athletic tone to it
Muscle build : Meduim heavily detailed
eye color : deep snow white
Hair color : Dark black with snow white streaks in it
Rank : Captain of 6th squad head of the Hoshi clan and head of Shinigami Poilce force

Apperance : Kigen is indeed known for his height but he is best known for his oddly colored hair and eye color his hair is the Legength of Byakuya's( so about to his shoulder baldes) with two braids in the front , he wears the standard squad six uniform he has a Dark red sash going across the right side of his body and wears a Blue Martial artists belt with a forest green stripe down the middle of it he also has a notice able ring on his left index finger it has a star desgin in the center of the star is Dark red with a black surounding the ring it's self is a Dark silver.


Persnailty : as head of his clan he does hold his pride to his heart and has devolped some what of an Ego though it's barely noticeable he get's along with everyone and is all around liked in soul society most of the time he's giveing the orders and is oftein telling other captains on how to run there squads in a good way he himself runs his squad with an Iron fist and won't let anyone tell him other wise in his divsion what he sais goes or else they are oftein servely punished. he does give advice to the other captains when needed if he notice's the captain is stressed or haveing a tuff time with a squad member he won't demand that captain does exactly what he sais but he will say "this is what I do sometime's with my divsion ". he is modest honorable and above dependable. he also thinks anyone who disobey's the laws of soul soceity should be punished.

HIstorey : this is the historey more about his clan after the Kuchiki's sperated them selves from soul society the Hoshi a distant branch of the Kuchiki's slowly took over and became one of the new 4 great clans and the richest lead by there orginal leader Hiten Hoshi who founded and took there new home's by froce from the remaining Kuchiki Trained and is the Grand father of Kigen. how they tell who there leader is , is by the ring of the fallen star ( if you read apperance you'll know ) and a Dark red sash how they wear it or where they wear the ring is up to them. Hoshi himself grew up when the clan still wasn't qutie trusted so had a bit of a ruff child hood he was also picked on at the shinigami acdeamy however once he graduated and was put into squad six the 13 court gaurds instantly reconized him as a nice new youth who will make soul soceity Bolossom.



Stats :

Kido : 100

Shunpo : 100

Endurance : 74

Agility : 73

Strength : 80

Swordsman ship : 100



Zanpakuto


Shikai name : : Kisshite Musubi Akumu ( never ending nightmare )

Bankai name : Raikou Sono Kisshite Musubi Kuro Akumu ( Enter the never ending black nightmare )

Release phrase : loose yourself in the nightmare

Sealed state description : in it's sealed state Kisshite looks like a normal Katana with a midnight balck line running down the center of the blade the sheath is a Dark grey with the Kanji symbol of dream on it , the blade also had Dark Ocean Blue wraping's around it the hilt and Gaurd are normal.

Shikai description : Midnght black reietsu with red outlineing leaks off the blade in witch is eventually consumed once this happens the reietsu disappears revealing a pure midnight black blade with Dark silver line up the middle of the blade. the sash around the blade seems to turn into chains that go up Kigen's right to the shoulder. the chains are conected to the hilt of the blade , the blade doesn't change in length nor widith.



Shikai abilties :


Sono Setsu Hi Itami ( the theroy of pain ) - when this abilty occrus the Chains wraped around Kigen's arm become spikey and detach with two ends that spilt on the one end it's shaped like a spear tip fo a very fine point the other end has a normal spike ball atached at the end the chain links are seraded are also seraded . the point of this is to repersent the pain you feel in a nightmare what happens is when the chains ethier hit some one the pain that they would feel is doubbled,this is a good battle tatic is because the brain will quickly over load and meltdown because of to much pain at once hence why the chains are seraded. the chains can extend up to 20 feet and travel at kido speed ( they are controled like Renji's shikai ) they do not have a set path.

Tabi Akumu ( Traveling Nightmare ) this abilty represents the mental affect a reocuring nightmare has. with this abilty the chaint disingerate into a black mist that take's up a 20 foot Circular and Linair raiduis and path the mist is thick alomost makeing the weilder impossable to see what happens is the user can now is the weilder slowly fade's away and after about 30 seconds sounds that the enemey is scared of most inlife followed by Illusions of what the person most fears in life the area than transforms into the place where they most fear in life the user can make all these illsuion's harm the victum while the illusion's them selves can't be harmed the weilder can ( Obviously ) this abilty cannot be prevented ( once the Illusion has taken affect ) you can stop it ( while it's matureing ) with light type attacks or have a strong will and not give into your fear. Another way is to find your way out of the mist also grabing the weilder will end it for as along as you hold onto him. this abilty lasts for 2 minutes and has a 30 second cool down time.

Sono Akumu Hi Shingai ( the Nightmare of Terror ) -this abilty represents the Incereased time of a nightmare what happens when this abilty occurs is Dark black rose petals made of Reietsu gillter off of the blade the petals take up a 5 foot Raiduis the petal redouce the speed of the enemey by 5% and incerease the weilder's speed by 5% Also Kigen's site is incereased by 30% there by allowing him to see every movement in slow motion ( think like watching a hole movie in slow motion ) this abilty is ineffective because even with the speed boost Kigen cannot nesscarily dodge fast enough. yes you can leave the area of this abilty the petals cannot be blocked by Kido but can be dodged and if Kigen leaves the Raiduis the abilty doesn't follow him but stops instantly


Bankai Abilty :

Now for this Zanpakuto the bankai is a single abilty but i'm explaining what it does in three phase's so keep in mind it is one actual abilty not three seperate abiltyies.


Bankai description : How Kigen enter's his Bankai is like Tosen only instead a bunch of rings the chains on the blade Extend and Span all around the wilder and enemey forming a perferct Dome shape than the chains give off a Darkblack Reietsu lined with a dark red that spread filling in the Chains and space's in between engulfing the weilder and Kigen into a Black Dome that is 50 feet high and take's up the spcae of 40 feet Kigen can hold up 3 people within his massive and impressive Bankai. the sword loose's it's Chains that were attached the stripe in the middle of the blade turns Dark blood red the blade it's self remains a mid night black the Katana also re-gains a grey wraping around the blade ( simlair to Rukia's ).


Phase 1 : Sou Sono Akumu ( start the Nightmare ) - In this phase the Enemey loose's and loose's his sense of awreness because of the massive Bankai looking like a Endless Void it also starts to conseal Kigen's Spirtual pressure so he will never be found with in his Bankai the enemey also loose's the sense of touch.

Phase 2 : Sono Akumu Zecchou ( the Nightmare's Cilmax ) -now in a Nightmare you start to see nothing but Darkness but hear the voice of the person you love most trying to pull you out of this Darkness in this phase the Enemey loose's the sense eye sight but starts to hear the person they loved most in life trying encourge them to find a way out of the massive Bankai the voice eventually starts to sound Mean and Begins to cause a Pyschological effect on the mind. Also the sense of hearing is incereased x 50% as is the sense of smell allowing you to sniff and hear Kigen.


Phase 3: Sono Kouki Akumu ( the final Nightmare ) -In a nightmare you feel fear and a sense of fear cause's Painic and Fatigue in this final phase with each blade strike the body starts to get extermely Tired redouceing the persons over all stamina and redouceing Muscel mass causeing the enemey to feel weaker and more tired ( one strike take's away 2% of the person's overall Stamina the muscel mass depends if it's well built Tissue ( so a body builder or a wrestler or some one in shape like Zane or Miroku it take's away 2% of muscel mass some one who has a weak build example my own captain Nabimaru they loose 5% of there muscel mass ) the reason why this is stressful is the less Stamina and muscle the Brain will start to mulfunction and make you work almost Triple compacity witch means inscereaseing Faituge.
over a year ago whiteflame55 said…
OK, so I'll just post responses to the bankai, since those are mostly new:
1) I think you basically didn't see my response to this one, because it's pretty much the same as the one you posted before. The only thing you removed is the sense of self. I still don't understand what a sense of awareness is. I also still see 3 abilities here: removed sense of self, concealed spiritual presence, and lost sense of touch. It's too much for one ability, especially since all three of these are not linked up in any way that I can see.
2) So what prevents a person's ability to simply run out of the bankai? I still don't see any response to that. If they're moving in a straight line, they'll eventually leave, wont they? I'm still not sure what's preventing this. I'm also left wondering exactly what the harm is. You say that they start off prompting them to exit the bankai. Why? Why not have these people, instead, call out to them, telling them to come to where they are? This could be a great response to the first problem. These people wont leave because they're constantly being coaxed in different directions within the dome. If you do that, go ahead and remove the "eventual" voice, since I'm not entirely sure what psychological effect someone being mean has on the mind. Seems overly variable. Oh, and make sure you say that a person is able to fight this effect, but that the voice will become so REAL to them when they approach the edge of the dome that they will be forced to follow it.
3) I'm really trying to understand the last part of it, since the rest seems reasonable. How does this make the brain malfunction? Someone whose stamina is flagging will feel fatigue as a result of that lost stamina. Their muscles will ache more easily, they will feel unable to move. That seems disconnected from the brain, unless the stimulus from this ability literally removes the brain's ability to recognize a percentage of its stamina. I don't get this triple capacity thing at all. Seems like this is entirely physical, but somehow you're connecting it to the brain. I think you need to either pick one or the other, or make the link far more tangible.
over a year ago wolfmaster3000 said…
well it's like Tosen's it seals you in nor he or anyone can run in or enter it's a massive Dome
over a year ago wolfmaster3000 said…
Bankai version 2

Phase 1 : Sou Sono Akumu ( start the Nightmare ) - In this phase the Enemey loose's the the sense of touch.

Phase 2 : Sono Akumu Zecchou ( the Nightmare's Cilmax ) -now in a Nightmare you start to see nothing but Darkness but hear the voice of the person you love most trying to pull you out of this Darkness in this phase the Enemey loose's the sense eye sight but starts to hear the person they loved most in life trying encourge them to find a way out of the massive Bankai the voice will become more and more encourageing makeing you believe it more causeing the enemey to wonder in diffrent directions though this voice can be resisted by a strong a will the voice starts out as though it's miles away but after a while it seems like the person is almost right in front of the person almost makeing the person walk in a circle or keep following a set path for a strong mind it take's 5-10 minutes for a weak mind it take's 1-5 minutes to start walking in that set path . Also the sense of hearing is incereased x 50% as is the sense of smell allowing you to sniff and hear Kigen.


Phase 3: Sono Kouki Akumu ( the final Nightmare ) -In a nightmare you feel fear and a sense of fear cause's Painic and Fatigue in this final phase with each blade strike the body starts to get extermely Tired redouceing the persons over all stamina and redouceing Muscel mass causeing the enemey to feel weaker and more tired ( one strike take's away 2% of the person's overall Stamina the muscel mass depends if it's well built Tissue ( so a body builder or a wrestler or some one in shape like Zane or Miroku it take's away 2% of muscel mass some one who has a weak build example my own captain Nabimaru they loose 5% of there muscel mass ).the reason why the oppent doesn't feel this is because the first phase is also applying to the Nervous system meaning the weilder doesn't feel there muscle's become tired makeing them push forward until the person eventually walks them selves to death if not worse.
last edited over a year ago
over a year ago XtReMe_BoY said…

Shinigami name – Supīdo (Speedo) unknown
Bio:
Born in a shinigami family, never knew his father and mother even his own name, the young Supīdo as he named himself after learning his abilities, was seeking for more power (increasing his speed,in his situation) in order to get more information about his family. After finishing the shinigami academy he was invited to take part of Gotei 13 but he refused the invitation telling that it’s a big responsibility that will just divert from the searching his family. Thought he could easily be a captain…

Then he met Urahara when he was just starting his researching, and asked him if he could possibly know a way to increase his speed. And Urahara said there is a theory that hollow reiatsu is reacting and responding more faster than shinigami’s . So if Supīdo could posibly fuse with a hollow to make his reiatsu more like hollowficated but still to be a shinigami reiatsu (cause anyway it’s more powerfull then hollow reiatsu) there could be an even more increased speed. But there is a very high risk that you could transform into a hollow. So after thinking about this operation, he finally made up his mind and did this. He needed a hollow body in order to make this operation, so he went all the way in the Hueco Mundo with Urahara’s help, of course….tought that was the first time when Urahara did the portal to Hueco Mundo. He was seeking for a arrancar and finally found a tough one. He managed to bring the arrancar’s body back and the operation started. In the operation process Urahara asked Supīdo how many % hollow reiatsu he could surpass (for a normal shinigami if the reiatsu extends 50% he is starting to transform into a hollow) but Supīdo managed to suprass 60%. So he achieved an immense speed that was never seen before. Even so he was some kind of hollow looking, but most of his body was like a human.With that operation,he could use and Hollow skills and shinigami like Getsuga Tenshou or Cero...
Not much knew in the Soul Society about him, but in the real time he is somewhere in the world of the living, searching for his family cause he taught that they might be from a normal human family…




Zanpakuto's name - Mugen no sokudo (infinite speed)
release command – Aruku (walk))


Bankai's name - Kyūkyoku no supīdo no heishi (ultimate speed soldier)



Shikai abilities:
May take any sword form, according to that can defend the wielder from attacks like a shield (tought it’s not transforming into a shield, only swords) and can appear all over the body not only wielded by hands making it more defending.And it's like more fair to fight with diferent oponents. It’s original an electric type sword because of it’s speed, and the wielder primary attribute it’s speed which means that all of his stats are based on speed.(a very fast wound and reiatsu regenerating,fast atacking...)

1)De~yuaru-tai (dual body)
It's most Supīdo abilitie but I tought it could fit here also xD...
His speed is so fast that he can be at two diferent spots at the same time...making one of his body invulnerable to any normal atacks...so only reiatsu atacks can touch him.

I did't find any abilities.Just the normal types like getsuga tenshou and Kidou xD

Bankai Abilities:
Transfors into a speed shape soldier, in order to make Supīdo move even faster.But in this form the sword can't transform in any form,Just a long sword,something like Suigetsu's sword (naruto xD)
link

1)Bijon hankei (vision radius)| a pasive abilitie
In a radius of 100 meters he can anticipate any atacks from opponents with his amazing speed.

2)Hyaku man-en burēdo (million blades)
As the name says he atacks with a very high speed as if there would be million blades

3)Chō bakuhatsu (hyper blast)
A very powerfull reiatsu atack...it cost allmost all of his spiritual preasure...it's a combination of last form getsuga tenshou & gran rey cero,fused in one blast.

4)Sokudo fōmu o tonde (flying speed form)
Transforms into a flying bird that can fly around the world in just a hour...

I forgot to say his appearance xD.He's like all most the same age as Urahara...He is thin,something like Stark,but the hair style it's like Ulquiora's.



That's all for now,thx a lot for the guy's who have read all my imagination about my char)) feel free to coment on this dude called Supīdo.I'v been working on it like 2-3 hours xD so I would be glad to hear your opinions...
over a year ago CutiexD3a7h said…
My zanpakuto's name would be:Kirahime
and it's abilitie's are:able to turn the moon red,shattring into millions of crystals butterflies.
Release call: Naitomea-Hime!!!
Second call: Ama,Naitomea-Ageha!!!!
over a year ago cuben_shinigami said…
cool
Zanpakuto's name: dragon worrior of the wind/(Kaze no ryū senshi)

descripton: normal katana about 5 1/2 in long blade with a 2 ft gray an red hilt the is two gold dragon wings opposite of each other, it hangs off my right sholder.(like captain toushirou hitsugaya but instad of a cloth holding the sword its a chain an the circle in the middle is replace by a dragons head

abilities: normal shinigami abilities

shikai's name: gingetsu
release command: raise your fist and direct the winds


discription: two katanas appear one in each hand left hands blade is 4 ft long with theeth like points runnin from the gurad 2 ft up the sword the other 2 ft is the end of a standerd katana with a 12 degree curve the hilt is 1 ft long with a all gray design with a chain attach at the end of the hilt that leads to my rist(like scorpion from mbk)the gurad is 1/2 of the previous gurad. the right hands blade is the same as the left but the other 1/2 the gurad


abilities:

1. i can extand 14 out in any direction and contract at will

2. wind slash/(Surasshu-fū) my zanpakuto takes my spirtual pruessure an fuse it with the air around my blade this allows me to create a thin bladed shaped cresnt 14 ft wide which i can luanch at a high rate of speed in any direction at any time that can slice threw all objects an most opponets.(if my opponet has equal or greater spirtual puressure then my own my attack will not cut but pushes that opponet with hurriacn force winds)

3. dragond punch/(Ryū ga panchi) i relese a consintrated blast of wind from the end of my fist( this tec can only be done 1 in of my opponet


bankai's name: haven't reach bankai yet

over a year ago bleachfan12 said…
hmmm
hey cuben_shinigami what do you mean in your first ability, what can you extend 14 of exactaly?.

this is for whiteflame55 if you read this. if you remember my first zanpakuto (oni tsume) you told me that the ability to attack the mind was too powerful and with the shadow abillity bla, bla, bla. anyway i thought of a major weakness, since it is in the oponents mind they can fight back, say i make a monster attack them then they can make a warrior to kill it. then the only way someone would surcumb to that abillity is if they thought it was a hypnotic abillity (it kind of is as i can maipulate their suroundings but as i said its in their head). tell me if you think that evens the score or not. if anyone else has an opinion or qustion regarding the zanpakuto i would be happy to give a better decription if needed.
over a year ago kuroneko-hime said…
mine wld defnitly b

Name: kuroneko supaaku (Black Spark Cat)
Release: kogemasu tsume (burn and claw)
Bankai: kuroneko moeagarimasu (flaming black cat)

shikai: similar to cat claws except about 4 inches long 5 claws on each hand each claw pure black

abilities - 1:doku tsume (poison claw) - scratch opponent and put a burning poison in their system (only affects around 3 inches around the scratch and only lasts an hour)
2:supaaku tsume (spark claw) - project flames that shoot out around 200 feet
3: tsume hime (clawed princess)-progect the after shock of the claw about 200m in all directions.

bankai:a extremly large black cat ( about the size of half a house) mostly covered in blackish violetish flames i can ride on it, my apperance changes to long black blue straight layerd hair that goes down past my waist and one orange and one red eye and a mini kimono! oh and i have cat ears!! and yes i still have a sword its about 4 feet long black theres a long black chain that hangs off then end with a cat claw attached to the end

(link)

[thats the pic if u want it]

Abilites- 1: moeagarimasu (flame)self explanable either they burst in to flame or my cat does
2: tsume (claw) my cat bursts turning in to sparks which swirl around enemy creating a cage that compresses the enemy cutting them where evr the sparks touch
3: hakkiri shite inai (vague) i pierce the enemy with my sword which poisons them and makes them burn and the pain is soooooo much that they forget everything

oh and normaly i have red brown hair that goes down to my waist in big ringletts i have violet cat eyes and i have tan skin (lyk yoruichi)i m easyly told apart from the rest cuz im about 6' 7 and i wear a dark purple chocker with an onyx in the middle.
last edited over a year ago
over a year ago bleachfan12 said…
LinkKinuzuma13-i like the most powerfull lightning based zanpakuto for its like yamamotos (you know most powerfull in a cirtain catigory).

for the raining swords teknike instead of staping the ground, you point the blade at the sky and your sword lets out bursts of lightning and when you slash you sword the lightning strikes were you want it to (at a reasonable speed)

i also have a qustion about the "lightning from hell" sence its from hell it should have some effects.

other then that i can't think of anything and it is a cool zanpakuto.

as for your character, maybe put the dates father apart, i mean he meets rukia when hes four and meets ichigo when hes three should it be the other way around. plus he learns bankai but is so young and meets ichigo again when hes 12 just a few ajustments are needed for it to make sense.
over a year ago dwayne2mad said…
...
Zanpakuto (Twin Swords): KazeNenshou (Burning Wind) and Tyfuamadri Fugouri(Inconsistent Hurricane)

Release Command: Mokusatsu and Moeru (Ignore and Burn)

Shikai: ..in development...

Bankai: Tempestual Arrogante Kaze (Tempestual Arrogant Wind)
over a year ago dwayne2mad said…
cool
Good luck dude....
over a year ago bleachfan12 said…
laugh
good luck LinkKinuzuma13 hope you do better then i did
over a year ago wolfmaster3000 said…
LMAO i'll take a lighting blade challenge I'm in the process of makeing one and a Posion type ...I bet my Lighting type Zanpakuto is gonna be better than yours ;) just kidding
over a year ago shukun_kizuku said…
[Shikai name]Shinbutsu shūgō
[shikai description] the sheath is solid white with brown engravings and a yellow handle the blade is white the hand guard is brown its an average size katana
[release command] hear me Shinbutsu shūgō give me your strength and lift me to the heavens
[bankai name] Kami no ko no ken
[bankai description] the sheath turns a dark red and the handguard turns light blue the blade is a dark red and light blue mix the handle is the same color as the blade

[shikai abilities]
1 Shina-Tsu-Hiko strike- sends a wave of wind that can cut through buildings its speed is twice as fast and its power is equal to half the power of a getsuga tensho and it can be used with each swing
2 Nai-No-Kami strike- each swing sends a wave of earth thats as sharp as a blade it moves at half the speed as a getsuga tensho and is as twice strong
3 Take-Mikazuchi strike- each swing sends a bolt of lighting from the sky thats twice as fast as a cero and twice the power

[bankai abilities]
1 Bishamon aura- gives all allies in a 1 mile radius gain 100% increase for power levels 3rd seat or below, 50% for captains and second seat level, 10% for top level characters of all there power and ablitites to them lasts as long as the wielder is in this aura when sperated from the sword this abilty cesses to be in effect
2 Tsuki-Yomi aura- all foes within a 1 mile radius has 100% increased gravity that increases at a rate of 5% every 15 seconds this lasts as long as the wielder is in this aura when sperated from the sword this abilty cesses to be in effect
3 Gesshoku aura- combines Bishamon aura and Tsuki-Yomi aura this aura can only be used for 5 minutes after 5 minutes the weilder cant use bankai for 10 minutes

last edited over a year ago
over a year ago shukun_kizuku said…
and here is the blades wielder

gender:male

name:Kami kara no sentō-ki [most just call him kami]

age:looks to be 26 is really 600

hight:5'9

weight:197lb

body type: mussculer

discrption: he has tar black hair thats tied into a top knot he has blueish red eyes he wear a pure white hitatare with his captain number on the back

personality: it changes with the activation of bankai while not in bankai he is a strait forward person who lets his voice be heard but while in bankai he is a quick and smart thinker allowing actions to be made split second and is always calm even if deeply hurt

stats

shunpo:95
kido:99
swordsmenship:100
hand to hand:97
intelligence:100
endurince/stamina:98
strength:95
over a year ago mariokid44 said…
shikai name: kagami kara mita mochi
Meaning: rice cake seen through a mirror
Appearance: a longer- than-necessary katana with a guard looking like a piece of rice
Bankai name: Kumori-kyō wotōshite mita amai mochi
Meaning: sweet rice cake seen through a fogged mirror
Bankai appearance: a hammer used to make mochi, with a point on one end and spikes on the other

Shikai abilities:
1. Similar to ririn’s ability, it can cause a state of illusion in which anything (except death) can happen
2. It can force the opponent to fight a mirror image of him/herself
3. Can create an infinite number of doppelgangers
Bankai abilities
1. Gensō no arashi ( illusion storm)- after the hammer is swung, the spikes on the end appear to shoot out and multiply, but only one is real and they all shoot at the opponent
2. Yume no hasai-ki( crusher of dreams) all the reishi from around the area is drained into the tip of the hammer and then the hammer is swung, causing a shockwave, crushing everything in its path.
3. Ten kara no ken(sword from heaven)-the moment the hammer is swung, a HUGE sword pierces the sky and then shoots at the opponent
User: Utsukushii Hana
Story: The way Hana died is a mystery to all but Hana. However, after she died, her story is well known. She appeared in rukon 87 and immediately realized she was special, her power awakened almost 4 days after she arrived in the soul society. She, despite common society rules, walked straight up to a soul reaper as he was walking through town and told him she wanted to be a soul reaper. He brought her to the soul society and she begun training. After her short time training she became the captain of squad nine. She is an outgoing girl looking about 18 but really about 500years old. She considers herself a rival to Byakuya and often challenges him to duels, and gets pissed off when he declines (which is most of the time). Sometimes she randomly attacks him without warning with her bankai. Her win-loss record with him is terrible, 7-720. She is good friends with Rangiku and often goes drinking with her. Her figure is a bit better than that of Yoruichi, making her well- loved with the male constituency. However, almost all are afraid to approach her due to her power. She, on the other hand, secretly loves her lieutenant, Hisagi Shouhei. She loves mochi.
over a year ago mariokid44 said…
oh and btw: her zanpakuto's release is
unveil kagami kara mita mochi
over a year ago shukun_kizuku said…
Name: Tien Shinhan
Age: 23
Height: 6'2
weight:196
Eyes: pure white
Hair: bald
Race: Shinigami
Family: all but him are dead
Likes: traiing under Jigoku and drinking tea
Unlikes: people who talk bad about Jigoku and people who dont follow orders

Apperances: wears green clothing under his lieutenant outfit and has a closed 3rd eye in the center of his forhead

Abilities: is able to shunpo anywere even id held or contained

Zanpakuto: Reveling eye
Apperance: its a silver broad sword has an eye and a guard with the blade going out of it

he knows the name of his sword and can use his abilities

Strength:90
Kido:90
Spellcasting:100
Reaction time:100
Swordsman ship: 95
Hand to hand: 95
over a year ago shukun_kizuku said…
[zapakuto/shikai name] Reveling eye
[release command] open and show me the truth parietal eye
=its a silver broad sword has an eye and a guard with the blade going out of it


[bankai name] inner blade of the mind
=the blade is turned into a small blade of a chain that extends to 10ft its all silver


[shikai abilities]-
= can see attacks 3 seconds befor they happen
= increases reaction time of the weilder by 2x without problems and that this only functions in response to another person's attack
= is able to send foe into there inner relm(based of there fear) to fight there inner demonds(like scared of hieghts or something of the sort) can be used only one time on one person the person dissapears and is not able to be harmed outside of there inner relm and they are able to leave when there fear is overcome or they find a glowing green door and they can be killed by there fear in the relm


[bankai abilities]-
=when the oppenent is cut 2 times by this blade on a body part there movements are slowed by 1/2 there speed (ex the arm is cut 2 times the arm is slowed down but the rest of the body isnt) only happens once per body part
=when the oppenent is cut 4 times by this blade on a body part there movements are reversed
=when the oppenent is cut 10 times by this blade the weilder is in control of that same body part until the weilder or foe is dead (ex. the right arm is cuts 10 times he has complete controll of it)
last edited over a year ago
over a year ago Ichigosuke said…
zzz
Well, just and idea i thought about after not writing a long time.
Didnt really put much effort into it but still please comment



Shikai: Kuusouka Sakasama (Inverted/opposite Dreamer)
Release: Be lost in your favorite Dream but your worst nightmare, Yet keep on dreaming till the sun freezes!
Abilities:
While in shikai, the blade and the user become a blury haze,
like looking through moving water, for anybody who looks at them.
The user can control the amount of hazyish blur, making him sometimes clear to see but sometimes hard to see,
like looking through a frozen lake...
This means that he can make it seem as though his sword is moving and wobbling, even though it doesnt.

Bankai: Kanmuri Kuusouka Sakasama (Crown Inverted/opposite Dreamer)
When entering bankai, the blurry haze grows to envelop the whole area, and stays like that, as a about 500 meters
dome of bluury haze, which moves aroung with him at the center.
In this area, every thing gets the opposite effect, meaning: Water becomes solid, air becomes liquid, the moon emits
sunlight, etc etc etc. He can freely control these changes, although when he changes something, it effects him as well.

The basic strength behing this Zanpakuto is, for example, the turning of the solid sword into gas, and back into liquid, and so on.
over a year ago wolfmaster3000 said…
@Ichigosuke your Zanpakuto needs to be more spefic if your talking about being able to bend reailty in this hazy dome in the bankai you should be more spafic about that and changeing the sun and moon in general ? abiltyies like these are ineffective depending on how you use them, so is your shikai it's not combat effectiv infact you may just irritate your oppent a bit. also if you can change your blade or make thing's look hazy how does this prove to be that your not really there sounds like you added in a doppel ganger effect.

over a year ago Ichigosuke said…
wolfmaster, first of all, thanx for the comment. Secondly, I know, this isnt 1 of my best ideas.
Now to clarify the meaning of my zanpakuto. When i say it changes every thing to the opposite, i mean only in the dome, meaning, for instance, that in the middle of the day, it will be dark for those in the dome, and the sun will look like the moon, but only from wiithin the dome. Now, tAKE for example an opponent using flames, when suddenly, his wave of flames becomes a tide of water?
You may think of this as overpowered, but, actually, the attacks dont lose thier power, and the control on them doesnt change.
Also, My shingami has to know exactly what is the power and its opposite in order for this to happen.
Meaning, he can only turn a poisen into a medicen when he knows excactly what htat poisen is, etc etc etc
over a year ago Ichigosuke said…
O, forgot to say. Its kinda hard o fight something that looks like a big haze attacking you. I clearly didnt explain myself properly. My bad. His shikai just makes him look like a colorful haze, maybe heat haze...

Now, for something irrelevent:
I ask you all, please try come up with original ideas. yes, i know my last one wasnt so original(maybe, i dont know).
Im just looking for sword that dont repeat the same thing over and over. For example, Getsuga Tenshou. I hate it when people make simply other verses of the same attack. Be original. That goes for ceros to.
over a year ago whiteflame55 said…
Ichigosuke:
I'll give you some feedback on your blade, but first I'm just going to respond to this "original idea" thing. I'd say it's rather difficult to distinguish what is original from what isn't. I agree that people who merely rehash Getsuga Tensho with a fire edge or something of the like probably aren't putting a lot of external thought into it, but plenty of people use the idea of Getsuga Tensho to explain how their attacks would look, and that can be original. Same holds true for ceros. I agree that a lot of people follow the lines a little too closely, but I disagree that there aren't original ideas in here. I know I've worked hard to post blades that are as original as possible, and I know plenty of people on here work hard to make their blades original. I'd be happy to point out examples. If you're looking for cool new zanpakutos, there are plenty in the works.

Anyway, onto the blade. The shikai, honestly, seems fine. I'd say you should specify that this is entirely illusory, that the form is still entirely physical and will attack as such, but beyond that it seems fine. Opponents who are vision-centric are likely going to have troubles with it.
The second seems a bit odd to me for a few reasons. First, that's a large area. You're basically saying that the wielder turns himself and the area around him into a haze. Here's what I'm seeing: a person moving around in a giant (500 meters is HUGE, even if we're just talking about area, which I'm not sure we are considering that could just be the radius of the dome), dome-shaped haze that constantly moves with him (you say the big haze seems to attack opponents, so I'm guessing it moves with him). Honestly, that's a confusing visual. How high up does the dome go? If the wielder jumps, does the area underneath them also get covered in this haze? How low does it go? Does this haze prevent all vision, or is it like a fog?
The opposite effect leads to some difficult questions. What happens if an opponent attacks from outside the dome? Does it convert everything that comes into its range, or does it convert only what is activated inside of it? I suppose I'm mainly confused, however, by what happens inside the dome in general. If air becomes liquid, why doesn't all the air inside the dome become liquid? Why does just an attack from the opponent that involves air become liquid? If that's not the case, why is the sun and moon affected within the dome? That's much further away, seems rather odd that that would be affected and nothing else that's naturally occurring. What's more, I'm confused as to what this will do with normal attacks and ones that don't follow this elemental trend. What happens if the opponent attacks with, say, shadows? How about if they attack with psychic energy? What would that convert into? What would a cero convert into? These are things that really don't have "opposites" that would make sense to convert into. Hell, what if they just enter the dome with their blade and slash you? Does it convert that to something as well? If that remains the same, would this do anything to an ability like Byakuya's?
Don't get me wrong, I actually think this is an interesting idea, but as with all abilities that depend entirely on what the opponent does, there should be a clear line of thought as to what would occur if the opponent does something different. Much like with blades that focus on the opponent's psyche (I had a reasonably long talk with Shukun about his third shikai ability above), if the blade depends on something that is going to be dramatically different from person to person, it has to be clear what will happen in at least the vast majority of situations.
over a year ago shukun_kizuku said…
yea i sit for hrs maybe days trying to come up with something original im not a fan of copying other peoples zanpakuto's
over a year ago wolfmaster3000 said…
yeah my new blade is a Orginal Idea and a odd combination, i'm really excited about this blade :D
over a year ago Hadez17 said…
SO here is a new character and blade i just developed...hope its as good as i have made in the past...plz leave feedback but not any out right negative comments

Name: Tenchi
Age of appearance: Early 20s
Height: 5 foot 11 inches
Weight: 195lbs
Appearence: Tenchi looks to be relatively young. The only reason people think he looks to be in his 20s is because of his build and personality. He is athletically built. His muscles are not too large but not too small. He has a slight tan to his skin but not dark enough for anybody to think he spends most of his time out side. His hair is brown, medium length and uncombed but not too messy. His eyes are Dark blue and almost always relaxed. Generally he has a smooth and flowing way of movement as he does tasks and walks.
Personality: Tenchi seems to hop between different demeanor. Generally he is relaxed and likes to go with the flow, Also he is very wise which surprises people he is around because of his young appearance. When alone he is completely relaxed and calm. When in groups he adopts a personality opposite of the group. (he is sad when everyone is happy or calm when everyone is angry). He does this unconsciously to help balance the group. Though how he acts may change he never changes his values.

Zanpakuto Shikai Name:Harmony
Release command: In the darkness there will be the light to call forward Harmony
Bankai Name: True Harmony

Appearance: Sealed the blade looks like a regular katana only has a pure black sheath with a pure white handle and a circular cross-guard that looks like a yin yang symbol. In shikai his blade splits into two short swords. One is completely black from tip of blade to base of handle and one is Completely white. Both swords have a yin yang symbol on their cross guards. The black blade starts in the Right hand and the white blade starts in the left. In bankai the blades become scimitars and the handles of the blades get a wrapping around the handles of the opposite color and a tassel of the opposite color and the cross guards become gold with a gold circle around the yin yang symbols.

Shikai Abilities.

Ability one: This is a passive effect to Tenchi. If he stays in a offensive posture or attacking the opponet then he gets faster. As the fight continues he gets up to double his base speed. This will take about a minute or two of straight attacking for him to get into his max speed boost. Also if he stays in a defensive posture or defends against an opponet his strenght and duriability increase over two minutes. The maximum strengh he will get is 4 times his base and his max durability increase is 3 times. (meaning if he is hit with the same attack at start of fight and again after defending for two minutes the later attack will do 1/3 as much damage as the first)Tenchi must be in the attacking or defending state for at least 20 seconds before his blade reckoning the change and starts adjusting his speed or strength and durability

Ability two: Tenchi is able to absorb any incoming attack other than a physical swing of a weapon or body part (pretty much any energy attack) into his white blade then fire something of the opposite type out of his black blade. (For example he absorbs a level 22 Hado spell into the white blade. He then can fire or cast a level 22 equivalent barrier or healing spell out of his black blade) He can also change the properties of the energy to the opposite type (Like turns fire to ice). He can absorb up to two attacks at once which is shown by the glowing of the yin yang symbols on the blades. Also he can retain the absorbed attacks for 1 minute before the energy dissipates.

Ability Three: Tenchi enters a completely Defenceive state. He is able to controll anything in the radius of his blades. (he cant lift things with his mind or stop time or any other meaning of word controll) He is able to defend against any incoming physical attack but is unable to do any form of counter attack. ALso he must stay rooted in one place and in a calm state of mind. If he wishes to attack he must drop his defence then shift to an attacking state of mind and attack.

Bankai: His bankai first ability has two sides to it so though its written like two abilities its rly just two halves to the same ability. Also his second and third ability are two different phases of one ability instead of two abilities them selves. These phases are also formatted with two sides to it.

Bankai Ability one:
Yin side: By reading the attack patterns of his opponent and thus getting a feeling for their flow of attacks. This combines by reading the opponents positioning to predict their next attack and thus be able to dodge it easier.

Yang side: Tenchi enters a rage and berserk like state of mind. He starts attacking his opponent with out using any form of attack pattern. Because he doesn't use attack patterns he seems to move faster and hit harder. This is only a perception change and really Tenchi isn't any faster or stronger. While in this state he has an invisible extension on his blades that cut up to 1 foot away from his blade.

Tenchi can change from one to the other stance by stooping his current stance then 10 seconds later he can start the next stance

Ability two Phase one:
Yin: When Tenchi hits with his white blade it does not cut the opponent at all just passes through like it had cut. The enemy takes no damage or pain from these strikes. Instead Tenchi heals for the amount of damage his strike would have done if it cut the opponent (example He hits with white blade and would have made a cut that was 4 inches long 1 inch deep and one inch wide. His opponent doesn't get cut at all and Tenchi Heals 4 cubic inches of cuts across his body.) This healing starts with the most deadly injuries first.

Yang: His black blade does not do damage when it strikes the opponent. Instead it only does damage when they dodge block or parry it. This damage is usually applied to where ever Tenchi was targeting and is only half as bad as a real strike would have been.

Phase Two:
When phase two activates Tenchi gets 1.5x faster 2x as strong and 2x as durable. Also behind him a large Yin yang symbol centered behind Tenchi's head that is about 4 feet in diameter is translucently visible. Ar round this large yin yang symbol are 9 smaller 6 inch wide yin yang symbols that are also translucent.

Yin Side: As he attacks with the white blade the opponent still does not take any damage but instead for each hit he lands The white side of one of the smaller yin yang symbols becomes solid. At any point during the fight after activating phase two Tenchi can release the energy stored in the solid yin side of the symbols to heal him self. He will heal just like in phase one which is to say for an amount equivalent to the amount of damage he had done to the opponent with how ever many seals he released. If he gets up to 10 attacks and releases He heals completely. (though he does not regain energy.)

Yang side: Like yin side his black blade does not do damage when it hits and makes the yang side of the symbols solid as he lands hits with his blade. Though when he releases the seals the opponent instantly takes all the injuries that the black blade would have done when it hit. (For example Tenchi charges 3 symbols by cutting his opponet three times on the back. His opponent doesn't take damage when initially hit but then Tenchi releases the seals and his opponent is suddenly sliced three times across the back.) The only way to defend against this is to not get hit by the black blade in the first place. If Tenchi charges up to 10 hits all the cuts the opponent received from blocking to phase one are doubled in depth and length.

Also when Tenchi strikes with one blade he loses a charge from the opposite blade. (example he has 3 yin charges and then hits with his yang or black blade. he will then have 2 yin charges and 1 yang charge)
last edited over a year ago
over a year ago PrimordialFire said…
smile
Zanpakuto name: Noukon Hinote
Bankai: Hebun Naien
Shikai abilities: kaienhoushaki (throw flame)
Bankai abilities: increases speed massively, flames are brighter and white, can always provide strength when needed during battle. However, bankai can only be performed if user's willpower and determination are at its best.

Appearance of zanpakuto in shikai and bankai I'll figure out later..
over a year ago PrimordialFire said…
Hadez..nice.
over a year ago shukun_kizuku said…
anyone got any zanpakuto ideas that seem difficult to use? hopefuly original
over a year ago yungnine said…
Zanpakuto: Shinoame (Death Rain)
Release Command: Fall
Bankai: Jōkū kara no aki Shinoame (Fall From Above Death Rain)

Hidden Form: Standard Katana
Shikai Form: Katana Blade takes on the color of the ability in use.
Bankai Form: Soul Reaper wears a hooded robe, and the Zanpakuto takes on the form of the Reaper's Sickle.

Shikai Abilities:
Tengoku no ame (Heaven's Rain): A golden rain that falls over the Soul Reaper's target and heals the individual. (Blade Golden)

Ame fureimingu (Flaming Rain): Flame's fall from above burning the target. (Blade Orange)

Reitō-u (Frozen Rain): Sharpened Icicles fall from above piercing and cutting the target. (Blade Light Blue)


Bankai Abilities:
The Bankai form only has one move, but it does increase the spirit energy of the user, and allow for quicker movement speed, and a more precise swing for melee combat.

Burakkurein (Black Rain): The sky becomes pitch black and thunder clouds roll in. Black water falls from the sky poisoning everything in it's path, save the Soul Reaper.

Comments: This Zanpakuto is wielded by Uiriamu Pāmeru a Soul Reaper I am currently designing. One defining characteristic of him is that he forgoes the traditional robes of the Soul reapers, and wears something more akin to the punishment squads uniform.

The Difficulty with this Zanpakuto is that the Abilities and forms must be used carefully as to not heal your enemy or poison, burn, or impale your allies.
last edited over a year ago
over a year ago bleachfan12 said…
wolfmaster3000 i just read about the nightmare zanpakuto and it is indead sinister. the last part of the second were the person walks to death, increadable i can imain seeing that happen. by the way is this ability blockable if a zanpakuto is able to prevent the mind from being attacked.
i had a zanpakuto that i made that was desined to comabat aizens hypnosis, dose your bypass messures like that?
over a year ago ninger117 said…
i think that everybody here is making their zanpakuto WAY too powerful. i mean, even for Bleach, it's going too far. being 'invincible' and stuff? come on! lol. you've gotta balance it out so that everything works together
over a year ago whiteflame55 said…
You know, I hear a lot of these generalized concerns about blades on here, and believe me, when it comes to a large portion of the ones posted here, there is often some overpowered feature. Nonetheless, that doesn't justify such a blanket statement. A lot of people on here put a lot of work into their zanpakuto to ensure that they are balanced, and many post their blades on here looking for feedback just to make sure that their blade is reasonable. Yet your statement ignores such work. If you want to see examples of blades that people have worked hard on, check out Bleach: Fallout Characters forum, we all work hard on ours, but if you want to stick it out here, there are dozens of examples of people who put more than a little time and effort into their designs. Don't treat them all like crap.
over a year ago shukun_kizuku said…
well said
over a year ago ninger117 said…
haha, okay. i understand you. :) but still, i've got some point. and i'm new to this website. the fallout characters forum? where is that?
over a year ago ninger117 said…
Zanpakuto-Tenjintenshi Hiashi Heavenly Angel of Catching Fire

Description
Roughly 3’ 4” long black straight sword with a razor-like tapering instead of the traditional ‘V’ tapering. The golden blade glows white-hot on the edge and is constantly in flames. ‘Gansho jihibiki’ is the name of one attack, translated to Magma Earth Tremor. Gansho Jihibiki is an attack of two parts: Tenjintenshi is thrust into the ground in a stabbing motion holding the blade upside-down, causing a shockwave of the earth as it melts that reaches about 7 yards out and throws anybody unlucky enough to be within that perimeter to be thrown back; the second part of the attack is the sword continues to melt the ground until withdrawn, essentially creating an area in which the owner of the sword cannot be touched from an ordinary attack. It’s second ability is ‘Hiashi’ meaning literally ‘the spreading of fire.’ Tenjintenshi actually seeps a liquid from itself that burns at extreme temperatures but for a very short time. This liquid is transferred to whatever it strikes and causes it to burn, but rarely causes it to catch fire in it’s entirety due to the speed at which it burns, though it hurts tremendously. Tenjintenshi also recognizes it’s user and doesn’t burn him. The guard is a fist-weapon-looking thing that is spiked and has a curved dagger-like protrusion going the opposite direction of the blade that is useful for close-combat. It’s hilt is colored gold and ruby-red, the same color as it’s flames. From the bottom of the hilt is a small ruby cross dangling from a golden chain.
Because Tenjintenshi doesn’t have an unreleased form and is always on fire, the Research and Development Bureau have created a way for it to be concealed in a ring because of the property damage that occured. It is summoned at the command “With all Thy Heart.”

is that pretty good?

over a year ago shukun_kizuku said…
imma help you out on this one bud
over a year ago whiteflame55 said…
If you want to access that forum, go to the top of the page, look for the links separated by the ">" symbol, and click on the link "forums" (it should be right after the "bleach anime* link). It should give you a list of recently modified forums, this one near the top. There's a character forum and a story forum, in case you get confused. Btw, I'm happy to review what you posted if you want, just say so (some say I'm a bit harsh, hence I'm not automatically reviewing it).
over a year ago ninger117 said…
then could you please review it for me?
over a year ago ninger117 said…
oh, and btw? my pic is the Zanpakuto's materialization
over a year ago shukun_kizuku said…
did you get my message?
over a year ago whiteflame55 said…
Alright, let's see:
So, overall, this blade looks pretty good. There are a couple of issues I can see. The first refers to this shockwave. I'm not sure what's producing the shockwave. Is the melting of the earth causing it, or is the force of the thrust? Beyond that, what force does this shockwave emit? Throwing someone back is a pretty general way of describing it. What kind of force would it hit someone with? How much damage would it be likely to cause? How does this ability function when you're not on land (say you're on the water, or fighting in mid-air, or even on terrain that's already melted)?
For the second part of that attack, what radius can be melted in this fashion? If the blade were left there indefinitely, would it continue to melt the ground further and further away from it? How long does it take the ground to solidify when it is removed? You say this essentially creates an area in which it cannot be attacked. Is that just the result of them not being able to step in that area? Why can't they step there? Is the melted terrain boiling hot as long as the sword is there? Does it do something else that makes it difficult for opponents to fight on it? Does it disrupt opponents in any way who are attacking from the air?
As for the second ability, what kind of damage would one expect to see from the burning this causes? I'm guessing something on the order of third degree burns, but it should be stated as such. What exactly is a "very short time"? A second? 10 seconds? Should be well defined. You say the liquid will automatically transfer when striking something. Since the blade is constantly dripping this stuff as long as it's active, can it not be sprayed at the opponent? What happens when this stuff touches a zanpakuto? Does it dramatically heat up the zanpakuto?

The blade does look good, I don't see aspects of this that are or are likely to be overpowered if taken a certain way, there's just a lot of undefined aspects.
over a year ago ninger117 said…
hmm, i gotcha.. the shockwave is formed by a longer-burning liquid flowing into the ground, creating an outward wave of force from the tip. if in the air, the same thing happens, except it super-heats the air. and water? it super-heats the water. when i said "very short time," it was about two seconds. the type of damage one would see would be the kind of scars you get from a 2nd degree burn. because it is extremely hot it both burns the person, causing tissue damage, and melts the skin back together, leaving the person with a thin scar. and the reason people wouldn't be able to touch the wielder when he's using the first attack would be because the ground would be essentially magma. however, the wielder cannot control the magma, and the rate of how much liquid Tenjintenshi puts out and the rate at which it burns creates a maximum field of roughly 7-8 meters. and as i said, no NORMAL attack can hit him, but any ranged attack or an attack that wouldn't create the necessity to touch the ground would be able to get through. and also, the ground only burns while the sword is in it and being held by the owner, meaning that the wielder cannot attack while in this state. the ground will solidify after about 10 seconds of being released of the sword. and in the air and water, it creates a burning/boiling area around the user about 7-8 meters. when it touches another zanpakuto, the slash-line where Tenjintenshi hit it will burn, but nowhere else. however, if the other sword is hit enough times, it will become unbearably hot for its user, though that is unlikely because of the high-speed of the burning.and it doesn't drip it, it's like sweat seeping from your pores and evaporating. i guess it could be able to fling some of it, but i think that that would be a smaller side-effect of merely swinging the blade. it is, obviously, weaker to water/ice-based zanpakuto, because they could cool the ground or render Tenjintenshi's burning-abilities almost harmless depending on the abilities of the other zanpakuto. the same with wind/air-based zanpakuto that could blow the liquid away. i really don't want to have a super-powered sword for my story, but i want something that i can work with and not have every part seem copied, you know what i mean?
last edited over a year ago
over a year ago whiteflame55 said…
Yeah, I get what you mean. Makes a lot more sense now, I'd add some of those details to the finished version when you want to make it.
over a year ago ninger117 said…
thanks. :)
over a year ago wolfmaster3000 said…
@ bleachfan- yes you can counter my blade like that to an extent it would have to be like one of flame's charcter's Briggete on of her abilties is to get into the person's head so she can better understand how to counter it you'd still be affected but not as bad ..or if you have a very strong will you can completely Resist with the side affects to the bankai being minimal so you may here broken phrase's so rather than "come here now" you'd hear " come .me ..now" make sense ?
over a year ago bleachfan12 said…
wolfmaster3000- cool just wondered if it was a possibility thanks for letting me know, still would be difficlt to fight. like i said in the last post mine helped prevent the distortion of the sences and/or the mind.

Hadez17- this is an amazing zanpakuto, i wanted to do a yin yang type but couldn't think of how to put it, by the way what dose your zanpakuto spirit look like? also most zanpakuto don't have the name of the sword in the realease command. Just a segustion you could make it "call forth" then the zanpakuto's name.
over a year ago wolfmaster3000 said…
@bleachfan - Zanpakuto's yes they do

Renji-Roar Zabimaru

Tousen-cry suzumushi

Azein-shatter Kagesuigetsu

Yamamotto-Redouce everything to ash Ryujinn Jakka

Momo- Smack Tobiyumi

Toshiro-sit up the frosted heavan Hyrouinmaru

Byakuya-scatter senban sakura

Gin-shoot em dead shinso
over a year ago Hadez17 said…
@bleachfan- yeah i understand most blades dont fallow the exazct trend of my blades release command but well not all blades are the same and the general outline isnt set in stone. If u look at Ukitake's Zanpakutō's release command its a simular phrase that does not necessarly have the name at the end of it but i believe in the show and manga he sais the name at the end...either way i did it that way to make the blade more unique and stand out. This blade took me forever to figure out (ask Whiteflame how many times i asked him about how to work it out). Also i never even thought of a name for the blade untill after i made every single ability for it and i just threw the name and discription togeather as i was posting it lol. Too be honest i havent thought of the spirit of the blade too much but just for you i will make one here and now. His inner world is a as far as the eye can see looks simular to the surface of still water. On one side everything is white or light colors with clouds and a black sun in the sky. on the white side everything is calm and quiet and reletivly slow. On the other side (in the reflection through the clear water) everything is black or dark colors. The clouds are also black and there is a white sun. Everything on the black side is wild like there is a storm raging all the time. His spirit takes the form of a female in a long white robe with pale skin and long white hair and holding a white blade on the black side. On the white side there is a man with short spiky black hair and black eyes with a dark skin tone. He is wearing a long black scarf that covers everything from the bridge of the nose to his coller bone and extends about 4 feet behind him in two tails (both ends of the scarf) he has black bandages wrapped around his hand and up his fore arm and a long black trench coat without sleeves. Also he wears black pants and boots and carries a black blade. (the blades are the same as Tench's shikai blade). The girl talks in a calm and round about mannor and the boy is fast and direct to the point. Both respond to the name Harmony. When talking to either one he is on the side of the world that the one that is speaking is on. The sudden enviroment changes doesnt seem to bother Tenchi at all any more. When in bankai the world seems to be a normal colored ocean with mild waves. His spirit looks to be a young or feminine man with white skin and long black hair. The cornias of his eyes are black while the iris is white. It is wearing the same trench coat and hand wrappings as the first form but has a long white scarf that is not covering the face and instead is tucked under the collar of the coat and draped down the front recahing to the bottem of the coat. it is also wearing a white shirt and white pants and white boots. Also in bankai the spirit is holding the bankai blades or they are hanging from its belt with only the handles visiable sticking out of the coat.

ps sry for all spelling errors. it is 430 am and i am to lazy to fix it...hopefuly i am close enough to the words that you can guess
over a year ago wolfmaster3000 said…
okay well i'm podting up an espada because of well no one posts on the Make your own Arrancar form so.. , he's also for bleach the fallout


Name : Slifer Grandz

Age : 19000 ( looks like he's in his early 20's )

Height : 6'2

Weight : 200LBS

Muscel Build : Meduim heavily Detailed.

Rank : Former number 4th espada , Head of the stealth Orginization for the Arrancar.

Persnaility : Slifer is a very unemotional person he also dislike's Violence but will fight when he has to or when he feels it fit he is one who talks to his enemey rather than fight he is indeed very intellegent and has no motivation to do almost anything. also because of his emotionless act he is calm all the time he has never lost his temper in any situation, he also doesn't like "confronting" oppents.Slifer at time's can be talktive but you have to edge him on unless he know's you well he is oftein quite. he see's all forms of fighting as unnesscary blood shed regardless of what you fight for.


Apperance : slifer wears the normal espada Atier with Dark green outlineing along the bottom of his coat his Zanpakuto is located on the left side of his waist. his hair is like Uqliorra's long and a bit messy it's coloration seems to be a Dark black. his eye's are a lifeless Dark grey he is a very light skin tan. his hollow hole is located in the center of his chest it isn't very big ethier it's 2 feet all together, no one has ever seen slifer's bone fragment.



stats :

Strength : 100

Soindo : 100

Durability : 95

Endurance : 84

Stamina : 90

Hand to hand : 75


Swordsman ship : 99


Arrancar powers ( he has achived them all but is most renown for ) :


advanced Soindo-being in charge of the stealth force he is indeed skilled in the art of soindo to the point where he can make 5 copyies of himself.


Cero-his cero color is a Very dark green ( like Uqliorra's ) with a Dark shade of red outlineing

shuukou cero-this cero is a small little one inch by one inch sephere Slifer has made to fit his likeing the sphere travel's as fast as a normal one but has the power & descrutive force of two cero's combined. this cero generally only puts holes in other espada ( depending ) adn oftein reasults in death for fraccion and weaker enemyies.

Gran rey cero

Rippa senro cero-this is a another cero Slifer created for himself he hold out his finger and launches out a nearly inviseable cero it looks like green fish lineing when you see it ,it's ment for fast kills and percise aiming it too travel's at normal cero speed makeing it nearly impossable to dodge.


Advacned Herrior -his Herrior has proven to be one of the hardest to break certain captains have even proved to not be able to slice through his Herrior.




finally


Resercution :


Release phrase : Reap away my sorrow

Name : Kouin Nushi ( Time god )

Sealed form : in it's sealed state Kouin Nushi is a Katana. it is a normal blade with a Dark Blue wrapping around the hilt the Gaurd on the blade looks lik a Hour glass and the sheath has a clock with Roman numerols engraved into it the blade it's self is a normal looking blade.


Released form : once Slifer enter's resercution he gain two scythe's each one 5 feet long with a 5 foot long blade, both scythe shafts look extermely thick ratehr than a normal sycthere looking like a stick with a blade, the blade's are a dull grey.he gains a skull like mask over his face and two horns each horn being 1 foot long extending from the forehead. he also gains to black Angel wing's


Ressercution ability : once slifer is in resercution , within a 5 foot raiduis of his Reietsu it seems both in and out of resercution Slifer can slow down time ( much like Berragan ) also while in resercution he can deylay time ( if you fall and break your leg he is able to deylay the pain and your leg doesn't break ) he can deylay time for up to 10 minutes before you feel what you have done .


Segunda Etapa :

Once slifer enter's this stage his mask come's off and he is engulfed in a Dark Green Reitsu with Dark red outlineing once he emerage's the wing's on his back are bigger than before he is now in a robe with a hood cover most of his face but his two horns are seen extending out war they are now 4 feet long the robe compltely cover's his hands and body , his two scythe's are no longer there but once he lift's up his hand a Huge scythe that looks like it's made of bone's appears in his hand the scythe is Zewihander size and has a 5 foot spear tip just above the blade it looks as though the scythe blade extend from the spear tip it's size is now 10 feet long.


Segunda Etapa powers :


it seems now as though anything Slifer touches or his Reietsu come's in contact with will rot over a slow peroid of time ( structure's and rocks and stuff rot instantly ) for weaker oppent's this is a problem but for stronger enemyies it take's a while for them to fully rot , anything the sycthe blade touches or cut's rot's as wel ( so if he cut's your hand ONLY your hand & finger will rot and a bit of your wrist ) he still carryies the ability of a delayed slash effect. Slifer can also Cerate small Javelens ( like Ulqiorra ) could and throw them at people or use them as weapons as well. he can also shift blade's so the scythe blade fold into the top of the sycthe and than it's a spear.


hope you all Like him



over a year ago Hadez17 said…
Interesting idea WOlf but still...whiteflame will have more details about why but time blades are just never good to make. Either u run into the wall of they are over powered or balancing them becomes too much or u end up with a long list of minor things u can do...The concept of this arrancar seems solid and tbh the abilities dont seem to be over powered but u need to specifi a little like How long can he delay time and how slow can he make it. What is the fastest and slowest speed that things or people will rot at? Can he increase his energy out put to make things rot faster? Can he delay the rotting? The idea of thins rotting away isnt that bad of one. My bigger concern is the abity to modify time. that is one that can easly cross the line of cool ability into over powered unfair ability. For example say he can delay pain and the effects of an attack for 10 seconds and he can slow time arorund him to half speed. That means any opponet fighting him has the option of moving twice as fast to keep up with their normal speed or get killed by the arrancars attacks. and even if they do move fast enough and are able to land a critical blow (cutting off a limb) in the 10 seconds after the cut hits it seems ur arrancar can counter strike several times before the arm falls off. I could be understanding this wrong but the last question i have that pops in my head is does the slowing of time effect the user?

Not trying to bash the blade just pointing out my concerns
over a year ago whiteflame55 said…
Heh, Hadez seems to have covered a good bit of ground, but I'll see if I can't add to his review. I've already stated a lot on this forum about the types of abilities I feel are overpowered, so for those that don't know, here's the list: time manipulation, matter manipulation (I'm speaking in the broad sense here), any ability that can kill and can't be blocked, dodged or parried, and any ability that provides invulnerability. So if I ever review a blade/arrancar following these lines, I tend to be a bit harsher because of the propensity for being overpowered. They can be made in such a way that they're not overpowered, but that inevitably makes your character underpowered (at least, based on every blade I've ever seen or attempted to make, I could be proven wrong).
Now, in terms of this arrancar, there's a lot going on here. In all honesty, Barragan was simply extremely overpowered. He could basically manipulate time to the point that he could kill opponents with his breath. Hence, Tite Kubo introduced him in battle, and killed him off very quickly (and, in my opinion, rather annoyingly, really not the fight I wanted to see). So I'm also a bit skeptical of comparisons. It's much like saying that an ability is fine because Aizen used it.
So what I'm getting from the first ability is 2 things: the ability to slow down attacks, and the ability to slow down damage. I can understand the benefits of both, though I'd say the latter has more perceptual value than anything in regards to use on opponents (the idea, I think, being that every injury suddenly shows after 10 minutes). If this is to be used on allies or himself, then it's overpowered. Depending on how much it slows down the progress of damage (and pain), it could provide invulnerability for varying periods of time, and from what I'm seeing, perhaps even 10 minutes. I don't think you're doing that, just wanted to mention it's a problem.
The other part of this ability, where you slow down attacks, ranges from helpful to insane depending on the parameters. How much are attacks slowed down? Is it just melee attacks, or does this apply to every attack? Depending on your answer to that second one, there can be a lot more questions, but we'll get to those when you get to it.
Alright, onto the Segunda Etapa. This sounds...extremely reminiscent of the former "Greed" in the espada, but since the person who made him has long since left, I suppose that's not a problem.
The abilities themselves seem rather eclectic. Why include the spear aspect? Just seems kinda thrown in there. Beyond that, are these just normal spears he launches, or are they similar to Lanze del Relampago, which explodes in a massive blast upon contact? And why does changing the shape of the weapon matter in this regard? But onto the ability itself. Right now, I'm not sure if the rot is symbolic or if it has some effect. When I think "rot," I think infection, because what you're doing is causing the tissue to decay. By it's very nature, that means it affects beyond the site of the rot itself. If that's not the case, what exactly is it doing? When you cut through the tissue, you kill cells normally anyway. So how does rot hurt them? As Hadez mentions, you should provide actual times here. Touching someone vs. cutting someone, powerful person vs. weak person, we should have a good idea of how long this takes. This ability just needs a lot of explanation.
over a year ago FadeX said…
Zanpakutou Name: Jigoku no Tsubasa (Hell Blade)
Release Command: Jigoku no Buredo o Fedo (Fade! Hell Blade!) or Jigoku no ha o Mezame Saseru (Awaken! Hell Blade!)
Shikai: Jigaku no Tamashi (Inferno Soul)
Bankai: Nensho Ten (Burning Heavens)
Shikai Moves: Satsugai no Kaze (Slaying Winds) - To touch the hilt of the sword and the opponent is quickly cut to pieces.
Tsuki no Nemuri (Moon Slumber) - To unsheathe the sword and make it shine against the moon so the opponent can see, they will instantly fall into a deep slumber and never awaken.
Kori no Shi (Icy Death) - To stab the sword deep into the ground and the ice will travel under, into the person's feet and gather into the heart, afterwards, it will implode the body with numerous spikes. A slow but effective and instant kill technique.
Bankai Moves: Ketsueki Dansu (Blood Dance) -
Genjitsu Tekina (Earthbound) - To insert the users blood onto the sword and stab it to a tree, vines will come out of nowhere and strangle or break the opponent's body.
Seishin Kyacha (Spirit Catcher) or Tamashi Gakari/Tamashi no Kyuban (Soul Taker/Soul Sucker) -
Element/Affinity: Ice, Fire, Earth, Wind, Death, Soul, Fear, Rage and Blood
Normal Appearance: A black hilt with pure white and black on the blade. It is a long, but thin sword.
Shikai Appearance: A golden hilt and is almost transparent, a ghostly white or black color with a dim golden aura usually, but the aura will change depending on the Zanpakutou's mood.
Bankai Appearance: Crimson hilt with a black long chain attached onto the end with a long blade shaped like a scythe that is pure white. The long blade above the hilt is chrome, a dark gray color with a red aura.
Zanpakutou Spirit Appearance: A wolf-dragon-man with six wings, four arms, wolf's face, dragon's tail, can stand on two legs and has regular arms. All of his features are bone, metal and transparent, this Zanpakutou also has a very showy Hollow looking appearance.
Shikai Ability: 1-Can spray out a mist or fog to literally confuse opponents and have them fight one another while you watch a show from up above a high tree.
2-It can suck souls out or it can simply insert a soul into a dead body and make them alive.
3-Controls many elements.
Bankai Ability: 1-Anyone who dares to look at the blade with fear, will be turned to ashes.
2-Can destroy almost anybody's minds to enslave them and control them.
3-Controls many elements.
Other: This Zanpakutou has an amazing reiatsu (Spiritual Pressure) and is almost way too hard to control except for me. The Zanpakutou can also turn into a Hollow Mask, which is mine, it is almost close to Ichigo's Hollow Mask. Except when I turn into full form, I go into an immediate rampage, I have a very long tongue that is ten times as sharp as a sword and can reach 15 feet. There are Cero abilities that come through my hands, eyes, two tails and horns. The two tails, one is extremely long and very pointy, to keep enemies at bay or slice their heads clean off, the other tail is blunt and not as sharp, but sharp enough to make deep cuts, mostly used for brutal attacks for external bodies, like breaking bones or exploding internal organs. I can also use Flash Step and Sonido and amazing super strength. If people look deep into my hollow black eyes, they will find an entrance to my heart and see all the people I've killed, my past, memories etc. The bad part is that the power of the Hollow is too much and will soon consume me and my heart and turn me into a Full Hollow Form forever.
over a year ago whiteflame55 said…
So...um...most times, I don't tend to give people feedback on blades unless they ask, but in cases of extreme overpowered factors, I do post something. This'll be one of those times.
FadeX:
This blade is...obscene. Your first ability functions by touching the hilt, and automatically cuts your opponent to pieces. That's just the first shikai, and automatically, the only opponent who will survive would be an opponent made of gelatin. The second ability puts someone who looks at the blade while the moon is out into a neverending slumber, so now the blade can't even be looked at at night. The third ability kills anyone that's even touched by the ice coming off the blade into the ground (I don't see anything here that says that the ice stops spreading if the opponent leaves the ground after being touched by it), spreading to their heart no matter where the ice touches them.
What's alarming is that the bankai is far weaker. The first ability literally just allows you to control vines. Admittedly, the other bankai is only listed in name, but still, I'm just struck by the fact that no one would ever use this bankai if they had that shikai.
But that's just the first blade posted. I see two here, sort of merged into the same post. The first ability seems like little more than a mist. The second, however, can remove souls...not entirely sure what that does, but I'm guessing death. The third is rather broad, but I'm guessing since you want it to control many elements, and since you list them all above (ice, fire, earth and wind) it sounds like you're basically invincible.
This bankai is more powerful than the shikai, but not in a good way. The first ability will kill anyone who feels fear when they look at it. The second will destroy other people's minds...not exactly reasonable. And the third gives you the same control as earlier over elements. Now you're not just invincible, you can make your opponent a puppet or turn them to ashes without touching them.
Both of these are examples of blades that are way too powerful. Your character seems to gain 3 extra swords when they become a hollow (totally unreasonable), has amazing strength and speed, and the only problem is that he might be consumed by it...maybe. Yeah, that's not much of a drawback.
over a year ago wolfmaster3000 said…
okay I get what you and Hadez are saying about my Resercution and i'm the espada of greed :P, so you have concerns about my slowing ability and my Rotting ability i'll provide Raito's


rotting :

one weaker oppents rather than just where he cut ( so if I cut you on the hand) instead of just the hand rotting away the hole arm will rot weaker enemies to Slifer would be other the weaker oppent's would be Arrancar of the Fraccion level soul reapers asstaint captain and lower,

Asstaint captain & Fraccion Rotting rate : it take's 30 seconds for anything slifer slices to rott away completely

as for higher ups it's just as I stated in my post, only where he cut will rott away for captan level & espada level it take's 1 full minute for thing's to completely rot away.


slow down time raito :

Kido & Cero-there speed is redouced by 5% ( so if you launch a level 60 Hado it would slow down within 10 feet of slifer, it move's slow enough for him to dodge or block but he can still be hit )

Psychail attack- this all depends on how close you are, if you get exteremely close your over all psychail attacks are redouced by Captain level and espada level sword strike's are redouced by 5% and asstaint captain and fraccion level sword strikes are redouced by 50% again if you to be right in front of him for that to happen


Resercution ability : no he CANNOT deylay his own pain if he is hurt that would so OP and I am not a fan of making OP blade's, however IDK if you guy's have troubble with the whole ability or it's Duration, but HE can speed up the process in witch you your self feel pain so I guess lack of better word would be he deylay's time and can speed it up AS long as the injury was inflected by him and it has to be with his scythe's so yes he can decerease the time your wound shows up as long as it's within that 10 minute time peroid once the 10 minutes are up say the wound appears by it's self.



I really hope this helps you Flame & Hadez if you have anymore questions about slifer message me or leave a comment here :P
last edited over a year ago
over a year ago nick274 said…
cool
this ones mine
Name: Jitsugetsu tsuin (sun moon twin)
Sealed: a katana with a crescent moon shaped hilt and sun shaped base on the handle
Release: Come on out and play! Jitsugetsu tsuin!
• Shikai: a monk spade with a flame colored half circle with ribbons and a creasnt moon with smaller moons on two chains
Abilities
• Nichi tsuin (sun twin)
The ribbons on the sun part wave very volatile and the shoat out a beam of fire and light.
They can also make the beams in a cone shape to blind your foe.
• Mangetsu tsuin (moon twin)
Lowers foes eyesight to that of a night with a new moon and blocks your spiritual pressure.
• Futago o saisei suru (playing twins)
Spinning the zanpakto at the center facing the foe and fires off a purple and orange wave of spiritual energy which explodes knocking them upward


Bankai: Okotte iru jitsugetsu tsuin (angry sun moon twin)
How to activate: toss jitsugetsu tsuin in to the air and yell Bankai
Shape: two spheres in the sky. (Or ceiling, but there smaller) One on the right shines brightly with a bright red aura and the one on the left is dark as night which has a dark black aura. I also have my sealed zanpakuto. (I can also move them at will.)
Abilities
• “Mōretsuna teiden”(furious blackout)
The left sphere blasts a dark purple ray as wide as a soccer field. It sucks the will out of a foe to the point he can’t move. (it may deactivate a bankai).
• “Sanbāsuto okotta”(raging sunburst)A countless number of blasts are spread across an area that can be aimed by me
• “Murasakiiro tasogare arashi” (violet twilight storm) the spheres combined and it becomes a bright light with a dark aura. Then it fires off twenty four thousand( the hours in a day) cero like rays that can be randomly shot (wont affect any one but foes) or combined for devastating affect

i realy think it can be used and not godmoded. give me some feadback cuz i do this all the time

shikai below (made by me)
this ones mine
Name: Jitsugetsu tsuin (sun moon twin)
Sealed: a katana with a crescent moon shaped
over a year ago whiteflame55 said…
Alright, wolf, there's still some concerns that I can see:
Rotting -
You've made it more specific, and I appreciate that. I would, however, like to know what "rotting away" means. If the tissue just rots, it will still be there, just as dead tissue. If the tissue falls apart afterward, I can see it being a rot away kind of thing, but that might be too powerful since that can't really be healed and a tiny scratch can activate this ability.

slow down time -
So I'm noticing that your explanation doesn't include ranged physical strikes. Do they follow the same theme as the melee strikes? The ability to slow down and speed up wounds is still confusing to me. I'm not sure how this is anything but helpful to the opponent. If an injury occurs, I should hope they'd want it not to hurt for a longer period of time. Slowing down the wound seems only to benefit them, even if you hit them with all of the pain at the same time later by speeding them up again. It's fine if you want to keep this ability, but I'm just not at all sure what it actually does.
over a year ago bleachfan12 said…
Hadez17- thats cool it was only my suggestion on what i've see of the show. i like your zanpakutos spirit.

wolfmaster3000- i like your espada, sounds like a combination of barrkugan and nyitora, (the 2nd and 5th espada) and a hint of the 7th espada.
over a year ago Hadez17 said…
@Wolf Only other thing i see that whiteflame didnt say is can your speeding up of the opponets injuries be use at same time as them rotting and thus make them rot faster
over a year ago Hadez17 said…
@Bleachfan12- It wasn't a bad suggestion its just if we all went with the exact formant of the show then it'd be hard to have really awesome unique blades
over a year ago whiteflame55 said…
nick274:
There's a lot of logistics not included in here, but in general, the shikai looks fine. You should give the size, speed and power of the beams that are fired off from the first ability. The second needs to be a bit better explained, what does it mean to have vision reduced to the point that it looks like night? How dark is that? How hard is it to see? How far ahead of you can you see with this ability active? For the third, what's the size, shape, power, and speed of this wave? Does it only explode on contact? Why does the opponent only get blown upward?
As for the bankai, there's more concerns. A soccer field is pretty huge, and this sounds like it instantly affects the entire area. You should specify the dimensions of the ray (we know the length and breadth, but not the height), but since this ability literally stops their ability to fight and covers such a large area, it might be a bit overpowered. You might say that since it can deactivate the bankai, it's reasonably balanced, but that's not the case. An ability you only have to use once that's going to incapacitate pretty much any opponent isn't balanced just by the fact that it could only be used once. The second ability is just very broad. What is the size and power of each of these blasts? How fast can they be moved? How many can he create? How large of an area can they be spread across? Can you control them all individually at the same time? For the third, how much power do these have, how fast are they, what size? 24,000 is a lot...if you're combining all those into a single blast, that's pretty insanely powerful. Same questions for that as well.
over a year ago nick274 said…
thx for the feed back.
ill mod it soon (maby full on change) but its good for a first
it hurts but itil help
over a year ago Kenaniken said…
This is mine:

Zanpakuto/Shikai: Denkomaru (Lightning)
Release command: "Hakai suru" (Destroy)

Description: Denkomaru is a lightning (electricity) based Zanpakuto. When in Shikai, it takes the shape of a weird looking sword: In the middle of the sword, there is a hole, which in it there is a high reiatsu electricity core. From that the wielder can launch his attacks.Also, the sword itself is chained to the wielder's belt, and makes a slight change in weather: It get's dark from clouds and you start hearing thunders. Might even rain.

BanKai name: Kiyoshi Denkomaru.
Instead of the Shikai/Normal katana, there is a strange looking pike-thingy: From one side, there is a sharp blade, which is seems constantly electrocuted from blue lightnings. On the other side, there is some sort of a cannon. All of it is surrounded by Chains. And the wielder has Silver Wings, tail and feet. Much more like a Dragon.



Shikai Abilities:

Shizen Taihō (Natural Cannon): Shoots a VERY high reiatsu lightning bolt, which is very fast and can inflict heavy damage.

Enkei Tsubasa (Circular Wing): The wielder spins the sword (using the chain), making the core to glow, and so making a very big shield. It can serve to defensive purposes, or can initiate an attack by releasing the power contained within it.

Chūjitsuna Jihi Ryūkōgeki (Loyal Merciful Dragon Strike): The wielder aim the sword towards the foe, says the chant, and the a materialized partial Black Electrocuted Dragon spews out of the core, and hitting the enemy with unspeakable force.

Bankai Abilities:

Dokuritsu Kaibutsu (Independent Monstrosity): Instead of the wielder's Dragon like appearance, a HUGE materialized Lightning Black Dragon comes out with both the abilities of Shikai and Bankai

Hangeki (Return Fire): The wielder can use the Cannon-like side of the BanKai zanpakuto to consume any ranged attacks coming from foes. The attack merely releases them against them.

Īarawasenai Hodo Kyōkigasen Jikiarashi (Thousand Storms of Unspeakable Madness): The wielder calls upon and huge lightning/thunder storm. It keeps shooting lightnings on the ground randomly, and also increases the wielder's speed, power and reiatsu. The attack also enables the wielder to control the direction of the lightnings, and could convert all the lightnings into one big lightning, and vaporize the enemy instantly.


Comments:

Yes yes I know: "THAT'S OVERPOWER! NANANANANAN!". Well, the big disadvantage of Denkomaru, is that he is very vulnerable at some times: When in Shikai, the core can be easily destroyed, it can blow up anything/everyone in the radius of 10 miles if being hit with a very powerful attack. That's why the wielder must maintain distance (Also the reason why most of the attacks are ranged). Besides that, Denkomaru IS powerful.
over a year ago whiteflame55 said…
Kenaniken - It's an interesting blade, but, sorry dude, it's overpowered. Now you might be saying "but it has a weakness." Two things about the "weakness": 1) The weakness requires a very powerful attack to hit it (we don't know the power of that attack, or the size of the vulnerability, since you don't specify, but I'm guessing it takes a lot to exploit this) is pretty much the same as any weakness: hit it with enough power, and it'll be destroyed, and 2) IT'S NOT A WEAKNESS IF IT DESTROYS EVERYTHING IN A 10 MILE RADIUS. A 10 mile radius is rather large, which ensures that the only way someone will survive this and destroy the blade is if they hit it from extreme range. But since it has to be extremely powerful, that severely limits the number of attacks that work. This is less of a weakness and more of an ability. Calling it a weakness defies what it actually is: a massive strength. Even when it's destroyed, it kills everything! And the only one who would know ahead of time about what's coming is him, which ensures that he's the only one who knows to move away when that kind of damage is inflicted. That's a much smaller risk to him than to anyone else.
But let's get down to the blade itself, because many parts of this, I feel, are more reasonable.
Shikai:
1) So this seems like it can be reasonable, there's just a real lack of specificity. What does "VERY high reiatsu" mean? How much is that? What does "very fast" mean? What does "heavy damage" mean? Each of these individually could make your blade overpowered, but if you can specify them as being reasonable, it's fine.
2) What's the defensive potential of this shield? Like, what kind of damage can it take before it's destroyed? What kind of damage does the release of power do? Does it just release its own power, or does it also release the power of attacks that have hit it.
3) This one probably has the most potential to be too powerful of the shikai abilities. How large is the dragon? How fast does it move? Can it be destroyed before it hits the opponent? Can it change directions? What's "unspeakable force"? How much damage would this do when it hits? Does it only do physical damage, or does it hit with black lightning?

Bankai:
1) Severely overpowered. You just made a tremendous clone of yourself that can use all of your abilities (probably at the same power level) and is even less likely to be destroyed. I can imagine that its physical strikes are intensely powerful as well. This needs a huge change to be reasonable.
2) This one's fine. Seems like it's reasonable across the board.
3) This one is both overpowered and lacks specificity. Let's start with the latter. How wide of an area does this affect? How many lightning bolts come down at a time? How much damage can each do? How fast are they? Can this hurt the wielder? What speed increase do you get? What power increase? What reiatsu increase?
Now for the problems of being overpowered. Why did you say this ability causes lightning to hit the ground randomly? I wouldn't be confused, except that later, within the same ability, you state that the wielder can control the direction of the lightning bolts. If the wielder can do this, then they're not really random. Even if I ignore the fact that you've combined what are likely tremendous increases to the wielder's fighting potential with the ability to direct at least a few lightning bolts from the sky in any direction he wishes (that's a lot for one ability), you say at the end that he can gather up all the lightning bolts in the sky and bring them down at one spot. This wouldn't be a problem if it didn't automatically "vaporize the enemy instantly" on contact. If I assume that these would move at the speed of lightning (so, the speed of light basically), and that it reacts instantly to your movements, and that more lightning will be produced after each use, this basically gives you the ability to kill your opponent almost instantly...multiple times in the same fight.

So yeah. I get that you're trying to be reasonable here, but it's really not. I'd be happy to discuss options for making this blade evenly powered.
last edited over a year ago
over a year ago wolfmaster3000 said…

okay here's hopeing I clear this all up

@Hadez-no the rotting ability is A WHOLE other ablity here the rotting concept only ever happens when he enter's second state resecution.


@whiteglame-well for ranged psychail attacks such as Bows and Arrow's it would follow along the line's of the Cero the speed is redouced 5%, as for the rotting ability I know that how I answer this needs to be spefic or else it leads to more questions so and yes a scratch activate's it but on captain lever and up just the finger would "rot away" okay here's a better word instead of rott it decay's with each strike he "make's the flesh rot to the point where it can't be used" so it looks like it's decaying hope that's a better way of putting it. as for my First resercution abilities i'm haveing trouble re-wording what I mean i'm open to sugesstions and ideas :P


@bleachfan12-actually I based Slifer off of Ulqiorra & Barragan ^.^ :P
over a year ago kazakit said…
watch out for my
Zanpakuto/Shikai: (名) 破壊者; 駆逐艦 (destroyer)
Release Command: (動) 消える, 消滅する, なくなる (vanish)

info...coming soon....
Note: his mission is to destroy all you're zanpakuto...


over a year ago whiteflame55 said…
zzz
Oh no, someone, please, think of the children...
over a year ago Hadez17 said…
Zanpaktou Name: Heart Piercer
Shikai Release command: Pierce The light
Bankai Name: Heart Striking Fang


Appearance: In sealed form it appears as a regular katana with a redish pink wrapping on the handle and a heart shaped cross guard.
In shikai The blade becomes a rapier. The handle is the same color as in sealed form and the Hilt is a heart shape with the large end connecting with the blade and sorta bubbling out around the hand and connecting with he narrow end on the bottom of the handle. In bankai the blade looks the same but the user is wearing a long white clean cut trench coat with a inner lining the same color of the handle of his blade. Also he is wearing white pants like the shinigami uniform but just below the knees they are wrapped with a reddish pink wrapping down to his ankle and he is wearing the standard sandles.
Ability one: Cannon: The user thrusts forward their blade and a concussive force is launched from the tip of the blade. The size of the force is 1foot in diameter and can travel up to 100 yards. It travels at kido speed and has the force of a cannon ball. The thrust for the ability is a slow and forceful thrust that looks as if the user is putting all their strength into it. Opponent may be knocked back and pushed to the end of its range but stronger ones can endure the impact.

Ability two: Bullet" The user does a lighting fast jab an a small piece of force in the shape of that last inch and a half of the blade flies at the speed of a bullet. The bullet will pierce through anything that the tip of the blade is able to pierce through. This ability can be used in rapid succession making about 10 shots per min

Ability three: True strike" The user attacks 9 different points at once. The spots are the head chess groin left and right shoulder left and right arm and left and right legs. All 9 strikes are stabbing strikes. The entire attack hits at the same time and takes the same time it would take to do only one thrust. The nature of the attack leave only the options to strike first with a really fast strike or to move away completely since dodging or blocking will not be able to get all 9 at once (also putting up a strong enough shield or barrier is an option). If the opponent blocs or parries any number of the blades( not all but some can still b blocked or parried) then the user is hit with a recoil after the ability strikes sending their blade in the opposite direction of the block or parry. The recoil is worse for each strike parried. Also there is a 30 second cool down on the ability. The user may use it before the 30 seconds are up but if they do then the strikes are 25% slower and the cool down rests...if they insist on using it to the point of a 100% slow on the ability then he just cant use it for 30 seconds from last use

Bankai

Ability one: Thunder" The user thrusts his blade forward with sonic force. From the beginning of the thrust to the end the tip of the blade carries a sonic boom. The sonic boom is slightly dome shaped and centered on the tip of the blade. The radius of the dome is 5 feet. The blade does not hit the opponent and instead the force from the sonic boom does. It will push forward up to 5 feet from where it hits. It hits with the impact comparable to a cero. Though the term sonic boom is used in describing the ability the attack its self is not moving faster than the speed of sound. The trust used for the attack is a slow and forceful one. There is a loud boom or thunder clap when this attack is used that can do any damage that would come from being next to such sounds but nothing serious and the sound doesn't effect the user,

Ability two: Lightning: The user take a stance similar to when Luffy is using his Jet bullet ability. (For those who don't know he places his left hand palm out towards his target and uses it to aim and has this right hand holding the blade ready to thrust the moment he is locked on target and has his legs spread out and bent a bit) The stance is not necessary to using the ability but he does need to use one arm for aiming and other for thrusting the blade. He thrusts his blade forward at such a speed that it is hard for most people to see him move. The thrust fires a bullet similar to in shikai. The bullet travels 100 yards and will pierce anything in its path. It travels at a speed just below the speed of sound (i do not know the speed but the idea is its like gin's bankai) Due to having to aim and the precision of the attack it cannot be used in rapid sucession. Also the speed of the bullet causes a bright white trail along the path it travels to appear for about a second

ability three Storm: The user does a series of thrusts that launch a combination of cannon and bullets (from shikai) The storm can be sustained for up to 1 minute straight before the user must stop. While using storm the user is unable to move by their own means. (falling from gravity or being shot through air via any means that came before the attack or if he starts storm and someone makes him fly through air some how is allowed) Area of ability is 1oo foot long 50 foot wide and 5 foot tall cone. The amount of time the user spends in Storm they must wait after using it before using it again.
over a year ago wolfmaster3000 said…
@Kazakit man I love people like you , you honestly know nothing about Zanpakuto a Zanpakuto cannot be destoryed it re-builds it's self over time, please if your gonna post a Zanpakuto make it more interesting <.< and not so Over powerd not trying piss on your idea but unless your charcter is like Azein than your not gonna be able to "destorey" shit all
over a year ago bleachman234 said…
my zanpakutos name- yugana kuren

my shikai relese word- slash

my bankai relese phrase- come forth and see death by pierce

normal apperence - a long, thin blade that has a yellow and white gaurd. the handle is pure white.

(master shunpo user)- my shunpo is so fast that it can leave a afterimege. it is almost like im teleporting.



shikia - it splits in to 2 big blades, perfectly identecal

(Surasshu gekkō)- moonlight slash -the 2 blade rotate together. making a moon. while the enemy is ditracted, i attack with razor fast speed.

(Tsukiakari no shi)- moonlight death- while the enemy is fighting me, i trow one of my blades to the moon, then i hit it, and it becomes like an arrow from the moon.



bankai's name -(Ten no chimei-tekina burēdo)- the deadly blades of of the heavens

bankai- my blade turns in to a thousand mini blades and i can control what they do like oh and they are all made of spirt energy so i really never run out

(Sen burēdoshawā)- one thousand blade shower- i make all my blades follow the enemy and once close enough i can turn it to any thing i want like a biiiggg blade ,an ax , or rotate around the enemy and attack him or her

(Sen ha no yoroi)- one thousand blade armor- all blades come together and make a armor that can deflect all wepons and attacks for me

(Saishū hyaku man burēdosurasshu)- the final one million blade slash- i use 90% of my max spirit energy and attack the enemy with one million mini blade. that attack tottaly drains me out so i am really weak after that. so it is mostly an attack of last resort



that is my soul reaper powers
last edited over a year ago
over a year ago wolfmaster3000 said…
okay I have another Arrancar i'm gonna post up :P



Name : Rosen Kyoubou

Height : 11'2

Weight : 2000 LBS

Age : 2000 ( looks like he's in his mid 30's-early 40's )

Muscel Build : Exterme Heavily Detailed and Toned

body type : Wrestler

Rank/postion : Slifer's Main fraccion, second in command of arrancar stealth and punishment unit.

Apperance : Rosen is a Arrancar of Goretusk size and muscel mass he has long Black messy hair that some what curls it extends down to his shoulders, his skin color has a some what Greenish tinge to it his eye's are a Reptlian yellow and his Iris is shaped like that of a Reptile's, his finger nail look like claws from a crocdile. he also has extermely pointed teeth, he wears a Vest ( like yammy) and his pants are shaped like baggy jeans he wears nothing under his vest his hollow hole is in the center of his forehead but it's barely noticeable he is a weid Arrancar because he has two bone fragment both witch are going across his jaw line and are shaped like a Crocdile's jaw.


Persnaility : even though he is such a huge Arrancar he dis-like's fighting hugely this is partly because he is good friends and loyal fraccion of slifer Grandz , he feels as though when he fight's he loose's him self to his "inner beast" and wishes to fight his enemies with a calm state of mind and reasoning he is also highly Intellectual when it come's to most subjects, unlike his master Rosen is always strikeing up conversations with people he even trys to get his master to engage in conversation.



Stats :

Strength : 100

Endurance : 100

Durability : 99

Soindo : 95 ( rember he's a stealth force member)

Cero : 65

Hand to hand : 88

Swordsmanship : 90


Hollow Abilities :

Cero-his cero is the color of a deep Ocean Blue

Advanced Herrio : because of his massive size he has devolped a Very hard Cero

Soindo-though he isn't as good as his master he indeed has proven on several missions to be fast.

Cero Kyodan-this is a cero Launched from Rosen's mouth

Bala


Resercution :


Name : Crcodilus

Release phrase : Throw yourself into a feeding Frenzy Crocdilus


sealed state description : when Crocdilus is in it's sealed state it take's the form of a massive Battle Axe the hilt and shaft of the axe are a very deep green color with a scale like pattern swirling down the blade. the Axe blade in the center has a picture of a Crocodile crawling straight down with it's tail swirling upward ( like how Barragan's axe had an eye ).


Release state : Once Rosen enter's his releasesed state he turns into a massive were Crocodile and his axe Turns into a Zewihander axe , his Crocdile apperance is green with Large 5 inch spike's Crawling down his back ( picture Godzilla ) his snout is extending 30 inches from his face with Huge 4 inch teeth showing he also gains the tail of a Crocodile it is 10 feet long.


Ability(s): of course with all resercutions everything incerease's for Rosen his Herrio become's as hard as Diamonds also his spike's are constantly Generating Lighting on his back this allows Rosen to use the lighting as he please's the lighting is equal to 30,000 Volts when Launched, he has about one powerline full of lighting on his spike's once he run's out he has to charge ( like in dragon ball z ) this take's up 2 minutes to recharge fully.


hope you like him :)
over a year ago bleachfan12 said…
smile
sence everyone is making arancars i'll put my old one up again, tell me what you think (whiteflame55, you all ready comented on this one and it hasn't changed much)

name: my name (any character but zanpakuto name i use mine)

age: over 8000 years old looks like hes 24 years old (is one of the oldest arancar)

height: 7'5

weight: 500 lbs

build: very musclar (this is why he weighs so much)

formar rank: cero espada (before and after resecutions)

appearence: he has black hair that falls to his lower back, and has a messy look to it. he wears the standard arancar clothing but the legs, arms and chest areas are ripped from him moving around. his mask is on his forehead, and right half of his face. the piece on his forehead has mediam sised hornes and is able to be lifted off; only to were his mask is stil complete, to show his rank (the tatto is posisioned on the center of his forhead. when in the wold of the living or the soul sociaty he changes his clothing so to not scare people, he dose this afften for he likes protecting souls and taking care of them. for these occations he wraps his head (only on his mask)and chest so to not cause a panic.

personality: he is laid back and care free, so much so that he sleeps almost all the time (even in a fight). when he wakes up fully his attacks become more brutal and stronger, this is if he is interested in an opponent or if someone is about to kill his fraccion who he cares deaply for. he also has no personal gruge agenst soul reapers and usally won't attack unless provoked and has been known to come to soul reapers aid if they need it. he is different from most hollows for he never attacked the living, he only devoured hollows. he even took care of souls and protected them, this is how he met his future fraccions. on a side note he never liked aizen for his disregard for others and didn't see his shikai for he was asleep. when asleep it is almost impossible to wake him up, his strongest fraccion has to wake him up for he would smak the others and send them through a wall if they tried (it didn't hurt them) or he would grab them thinking they wanted to sleep with him (not in a perverted way!) ussally earning him a punch to the face or kick to the groin which didn't affect him unless it was his female fraccion (shes the strongest). she wakes him up in a manor simaler to how stark is woken up.

history: very long history but on more then one ocation he has helped caption yamamoto, ussally by eating the hollows attacking. another side note is that he saved ichigo when his mother was killed by grand fisher, he intervened (ichigo was unconscous at the time) before ichigo or his mother were devoured. he took ichigos mother away and convinced her to leave to the soul sociaty (this was helped by several hollow attacks) when she agreed he pretended to attack her to drawl the soul reapers to their location, he then left her in their care and watched them depart. he found his future fraccion when they were little, they were being attacked by hollows and he came and ate the hollows, he tried to make them go to the soul sociaty but they instisted on staying with him, so after they died (all were from different times and attacks) he caried them on his back and they played while they waited to become hollows after that they roamed together eating other hollows.

fraccion: there are ten of them each is as strong as one of the espada but they remain loyal only to him. one of the females is the strongest and is as strong as stark, and so on and so forth.

stats

strength: 100

endurence: 100

speed: 70 - gets quicker when needed or if he is wake. is fast enough to avoid attacks while asleep and laying down.

duribility: 98- can take point ceros and mild attacks without blocking.

swordmanship- 100

cero: ussally fired from one finger or his mouth, the ceros get stronger if he uses more fingers.

abillities: he can eat ceros to reagin energy and strength or he can fire it back but stronger.
-gen ray cero- unlike other espadas he dosen't have to mix his blood to make it.
-ultimate cero- this is when he dose mix his blood in the cero, it is a blue/red/black color and very devistating but takes time to charge, he has to use his full hand for this attack.
-bala- again depends how much of his body to attack, using his full fist, most enemyies are dead lets leave it at that.

Resercution:

name: el diablo

release comand: slauther

appearence: he now has his full mask back and the horns on his forehead are much biger. he looks like a human/ bat hybrid, however his appearence changes.

abilities: he can change his body to be more suited for battle, for example if he is fighting a heavy armered enemy he can change his body to be stronger, so his appearence is always changing.
over a year ago rocket5278 said…
Zanpakuto: Maebure
Realease command: Bring Forth the Apocalypse
Bankai: Shi no Sakibure

Zanpakuto Ability 1: Black fire engulfs the blade.
Zanpakuto Ability 2: Shoots a black fiery blast that engulfs the enemy.

Bankai Ability 1: I can summon a black demonic dragon (Similar to Hyounimaru)
Bankai Ability 2: Frightening Speed faster than that of Yoruichi
Bankai Ability 3: Instantaneous Hollow mask summoning
Bankai Ability 4: Black and red Cero equivalent to Espada 3
Bankai Blade: Black and red demonic style great sword.

My Appearance: Medium length black hair with red eyes. Captain in the 13 Gotei Squads. Talkative unless in a fight. I am the most feared and respected Shinigami. An unknown virus caused hollowfication but was stopped Urahara Kisuke. My hollow mask resembles a dragon with demonic horns. I am dating another captain who is a little weaker than I, she is a member of one of the noble famlies. My mentor was Captain Commander Yammamoto.

Bankai appearance: Black trench coat like robes with Black kimono robes underneath. Black Fiery demonic wings stem from my back allowing me to fly at tremendous speeds.
over a year ago bleachfan12 said…
hey rocket5278 you put your hollow powers as your zanpakuto abillities, they should be seprate. also your zanpakuto has many problems with dicriptions, im just leting you know for whiteflame55 will go into better dicription then i will ever be able to do (if he reads this) so just a heads up.
over a year ago tribro3 said…
Nonoshiri (Insult)
It is a triangle shaped weapon with 3 blades and a ruby handle, it is really big and would have to be wield by a large shinigami (Kenpachi or bigger should do) it is used in combat by either throwing it or by attacking with one blade, spinning the weapon to push their blade out of the way and killing with the next blade.
Oosawagi (Uproar)
the 3 blades becomes 8 and the blade radiates purple gas from the handle which, if inhaled, can cause depression
Hanashite (Story Teller)
When in Bankai the 8 blades of the shikai mode all melt together and form a cannon on the users right shoulder and a spiked metal glove around the users left hand
shikai abilities;
Gives off purple depressant gas
Can be thrown like a boomerang and it will come back
Blades can be detached and manipulated with use of triangular hilt

bankai abilities;
If spiked glove causes wound victim becomes extremely depressed
Cannon Fires Purple explosives, the time of explosion for which can be manipulated by the user
users can triple the weapons power by allowing the cannon t drain their life force


link
last edited over a year ago
over a year ago whiteflame55 said…
My new and bestest blade/character ever! Enjoy!

Name: Jessie
Gender: Male/Female
Age: 10 - infinity
Height: Undefined
Eyes: X-Ray
Hair: Maybe

Appearance: He/she is hot/cute/handsome/ugly/moderate. He/she wears clothing and skin. He/she is human in appearance, and is fine with that. [Insert random characteristic]
Personality: He/she has one. He/she hates/loves random thing #1, #2, #3, and is unsure about thing #4. He/she has a history that was easy/hard, and has benefitted highly from it in some unknown way. He/she feels all of the feelings…maybe.

Shikai Name: Random Japanese Blade Name (spelled or arranged incorrectly)
Release Command: A random command that has something to do with the theme of the blade…
Bankai Name: Random Upgrade of Japanese Blade Name (spelled or arranged incorrectly)

Shikai Appearance: The blade looks like a blade. It releases to another weapon of a different size and shape. It also tastes, feels, smells and sounds like a weapon. It may have colors, and could possibly be large or small. Cower in fear of it.

Shikai Ability 1: (Ranged Attack) Fires something at the opponent. Hits for indeterminate damage. Looks cool, maybe.

Shikai Ability 2: (Enhancement Ability) Heals or augments self for unknown amount. Helps or hurts a lot or a little.
Shikai Ability 3: (Random Other Attack) Does stuff with things. Makes opponent angry, perhaps.

Bankai Appearance: Appearance changes from shikai. Things happen in the background. Awe is had by all.

Bankai Ability 1: (Improved Ranged Attack) Ranged attack, improved. Hits for indeterminate damage, but better. Looks cool, more likely.
Bankai Ability 2: (Improved Enhancement Ability) Heals or augments self for greater unknown amount. Helps or hurts a lot or a little, but more than shikai.
Bankai Ability 3: (Super Awesome Ultimate Attack) Large or small attack that ends the fight. May end fight for wielder, no one knows. Not overpowered. At all. In any way, shape or form. Don’t even think about it. Not for a second. Stop. Stop thinking about it.

Hollow mask: A mask made of bone that goes on the face. He/she doesn't have one.
last edited over a year ago
over a year ago Hadez17 said…
Man whiteflame that is the most bad ass blade i have ever saw...I was worried it was oped till that last line that said it wasn't so its a balanced blade
over a year ago LinkKinuzuma13 said…
laugh
Random blade name huh? More like the LOL Blade!!! You just made my day!! ^_^
over a year ago LinkKinuzuma13 said…
Alright!!! Here it is.

Name: Kuraiho-kiba- "Dark Flame Fang"
Release command: Tia Hanatare- "Tear apart"
Bankai name: Jigokuno hi nohen- "Hell's Fire Teeth"

Shikai Discription: The blade is blood red and has a dragon down the middle of it. The crossgaurd is engraved with a wolf's teeth and eyes. The eyes are ruby, and they glow when the wielder gets angry. The handle is wrapped in violet cloth, with ruby underlay. The pommel is in the shape of a small wolf head.

Bankai Discription: In this state, the sword has a twin. Everything that was red on the first blade, is now black, and everything that was black, is now red. Speed, strength, and stamina have all been increased by 2x and the wielder has menacing red eyes. Their reiatsu color, is black with a silver outline.

Shikai abilities:
1. This alows the user to shift elements for 5 seconds. They can use Wind, Water, Earth or Lightning during the shift.(Must wait 1 min before using again.)

2. Shakunestu no ha- "Searing Blade": This engulfs both blades in fire. The red blade in black fire, and the black blade in red fire. They can use this ability for two minuets tops, once they reach full potential.

3. Reyusei-Kurasshudaun- "Meteor Crashdown": The user summons a meteor(with a flame surrounding of 2ft)To crash down onto, or near the enemy.

Bankai Abilities:
1. Rampaging Flames: This requires the usres total concentratioin for 5 seconds. The two swords are engulfed in black and red energy/fire, and once the user is completley focused, they can release the flames at will.

2. Jigoken-saiga- "Hell's Flaming Sword": Both swords become engulfed in silvery-black fire and the wielder goes on a rampage for a few short seconds, which is how long this ability lasts.

3. Shumatsu e no senka- Fires of Doomsday": The user will point both blades at the gorund, and black flames from you know where sprout up at the precise moment the wielder wants them to. However, the user has no defenses at this time, so if the opponent wants to land an attack, they'll have to be fast.


Done!!!(And it's about time too.)
last edited over a year ago
over a year ago whiteflame55 said…
Heh, appreciate your comments guys, crafted that blade in about 15 minutes, but loved doing it =P.

But onto the reviews. Rocket5278 and Tribro3 - I'd be happy to review either of yours, but I'm going to start going only by requests to do so, mainly because the volume of blades will just be immense if I don't. Just let me know by email or a post on my wall.

LinkKinuzuma13 -
I know you said you wanted me to review yours, so all too happy to oblige:
The main problems I see here are just with specification, but I'll get to that as I go through the abilities.
Shikai 1: You say "shift elements," but I'm not sure what that means. Does that mean he gets to use all 5, but only in 5 second intervals over a period of 20 seconds (one for each element), or does that mean that it takes 5 seconds to shift, or what? Also, I'm not certain what it means to use the elements. Can he create them, or just control them? How much control does he have? This can be overpowered due to the wide range of uses available, but there's a lot of uncertainty here.
Shikai 2: What do the 2 different types of fire do? I can see the aesthetic appeal, but that's all I'm seeing. Do both just act as normal fire? Do they spread to whatever they touch? Do they heat up whatever they hit? Does the black fire work differently from the red?
Shikai 3: You've defined the dimensions in an odd way here. You say it has a "20ft diameter and 60ft radius." The problem is that that's impossible. A radius cannot be larger than a diameter. What's more, it should always be half the diameter (a radius is basically the distance from the center of a circle to the edge, while the diameter is the distance from one edge of the circle to the next going through the center). I get that a flame extends out from it by 2 feet, but right now, that's the only dimension that makes sense. Even if the circle's dimensions were correct, this is a 3D object. How much depth does it have? How heavy is it? How fast is it going? Give an estimate of the damage if it hit ground.
Bankai 1: Again, not certain what the black and red flames do. Look back to Shikai 2 for the same questions there. What does it mean to "release the flames"? What happens to those flames? Do they get launched at the opponent? Are they fully under your control, even off the blade? Do they disperse into the air? What does this do? And why the need for concentrating?
Bankai 2: Can this ability work in tandem with the first bankai, or must the two fires be active separately? What does silvery-black fire do differently from the other fires? What does going "on a rampage" do? Does it increase your speed? Your strength? Your energy? Does it just mean that the wielder becomes extremely offensive in his fighting style? Does he go into some kind of berserker mode? I don't know what this does.
Bankai 3: I'm guessing "you know where" is hell, but I'm uncertain. Are these black flames different from the ones previously used? How much black flame is he able to control in this way? Can he just light up all the ground around him? Can the black flame hurt him? How quickly does it come up after pointing the swords at the ground? What range is this limited to? How long can this be active?
over a year ago bleachfan12 said…
whiteflame55- funny zanpakuto and character when i saw the words he/she i was thinking "how is this possible" then as i read on i realized what you were doing.
by the way did you ever make an arancar and i remember asking you to make a zanpakuto for kenpachi (if he ever achieved shikai or bankai) you said you would but you never got around to doing it.
just wondering if you put some thought in to it (the zanpakuto part)
over a year ago whiteflame55 said…
Yes, I did make an arrancar (made 3 total so far, though only one recently named Pandora, she's a few pages back). As for Kenpachi, I actually did formulate a blade for him. That's a ways back, but I can always repost it if you want.
over a year ago LinkKinuzuma13 said…
I see what you mean, Whiteflame55.
First off,i'll just get rid of the dimensions, since they kind of confuse me too, and then about the red, black, and silvery-black flames, they are meant to make the opponent shy away from using their zanpakuto, for fear that if they do, it will melt, break, ect. And yes, the two fires are active seprately. Just to recap, the purpose of the three fires are the same, and they don't have any abilites.

When i say shift elements, i mean he can use other elements other than fire, for a period of 5 seconds.

I'll get back to you later Whiteflame55.
over a year ago LinkKinuzuma13 said…
cool
Ok, i'm back.
Whiteflame55, Yes he can control the elements during this time period, but only to a certain extent.
The hell flames in the last bankai ability, are use for attack and defense. he has complete control over them(and the other three flames i mentioned as well)and they can only be used within a 30ft raidius of the person. The 3rd ability can be active for 3 min AT MOST. And no the black flame cannot hurt him, since he is the one controlling it.
For bankai 2, It can't be used in tandem with the first one, and the silvery-black fire is capable of heating the zanpakuto up enough to make them drop it, but not melt it. Going on a rampage, means that he gets three times as offensive as he was, and his strength and speed are increased as well, but not enough to make him the fastest/strongest thing alive.
For bankai 1, The need for concentrating is relevant, only i agree that i might not have explained it well enough. This is a focused attack, and therfore, takes charge time, but the opponent will be confused as to what the hell they are doing.
For shikai 3, It's weight is 4 tons, and it would make a 1/4 mile crater, about 150ft deep.

Hope that cleared it all up for u, Whiteflame55.
over a year ago bleachfan12 said…
yes if you could id appreatiate it.
over a year ago whiteflame55 said…
Alright, here's that blade. It's how I'd imagine the shikai and bankai would look or Zaraki Kenpachi, since, let's face it, we'll probably never truly see either.

Zaraki Kenpachi’s Blade
Shikai Name: Intonēshon (Intonation)
Release Command: Kakikesu… (Deafen…)
Bankai Name: Intonēshon o Surudoi (Piercing Intonation)
Shikai Appearance: Given in the show. I like to think that the point of the blade is to bring an opponent to their knees, that Kenpachi would not so much as look at a blade that improved on his already prodigious strength. He would be far more pleased with a blade that cripples the opponent, allowing him to make full use of his own speed and strength. He would also want a blade that focuses only on offense, so I worked along those lines.
Shikai Ability 1: Kurai no Kurushimi (Cry of Agony) – When the blade cuts the opponent, a cry appears to eddy from the blade into the target, causing multiple other small wounds internal to the opponent. It will either dissipate after a few seconds or leave the body by creating small wounds in the skin.
Shikai Ability 2: Osoroshii Sakebi (Dreaded Scream) – Dramatically increases the spiritual pressure of the wielder. This does not increase strength, speed, or power, but, much the same as Ichigo was affected by just feeling the pressure coming from Kenpachi, it instills tremendous fear in the opponent, making them feel “heavier,” and paralyzing weaker opponents. This takes a huge psychological toll.
Bankai Description: Kenpachi’s bankai could be many things, and personally I think his blade is extremely antithetical to his point of view. I like to think that this functions as a massive barrier between himself and his blade, and the reason he has not been able to synergize with it. The blade grows to two times its length and thickness, maintaining its shape. Teeth appear to extend down from the blade in curves, each a meter long.
Bankai Ability 1: Kanashimi no Uta (Song of Grief) – Kenpachi sweeps the blade across his field of vision in any direction, drawing black lines in the air with the teeth of the blade. These lines are then launched at the opponent, and any that touch appear to meld with the skin. Each one causes them to forget something important to them. This could be a fighting ability, a person, or a treasured memory. In all cases, this would have a devastating effect on their ability to fight.
Bankai Ability 2: Nekkyō-Teki na Sasayaki (Frenzied Shriek) – The blade appears to let out a shriek, and the air 1/2 of a meter around it appears to vibrate continuously. This pocket of air can be launched at range, passing through anything. The vibrations cause intense internal damage to anything they touch, shattering blood vessels. This can also remain attached to the blade and be swung with it, inflicting similar damage to anyone that comes within its range.
over a year ago rorovipz said…
nice thanx
nice thanx