post soon:)

Ok I will post tomorrow. And thanks _reyna_ for being the first to comment.

Chapter 1

This is just a preview of the first chapter. Tell me if it's a good start or not.

Percy


I can't beleive they were here. I quickly lead Hazel and Frank toward the exit of the Senate House. I was moments away from seeing my old friends, my family. I wasn't looking were I was heading.I bumped into someone. Or should I say into something, Octavian.I wish I could ring him by the neck right now. But I needed to get out. I tried to get outside. But he kept blocking me.
"Get out of my way. I need to get out before the warship lands." He just gave me a quick smirk and crossed his arms. As if saying your not going anywhere you filthy graecus. I looked at Hazel and Frank to see their reaction. They didn't look to happy.
"I will say it one more time. Get out of my way." I gritted my teeth.
"Sure thing buddy." he pulled out a knife and pointed it at my throat. "If they attack you are finished, you here, buddy. On the good note you can join my little animal friends. You would look great,hahahaha."
"You shut up. You don't talk about Percy like that. You hear." Hazel and I had to hold back Frank before he punched him right in the face. Though I would have loved to see that.
"Watch it Zhang. I wouldn't want there to be an acident. Poor Percy, Hazel, and Frank I tried to help them. But alas I couldn't. Oh well. Now go and run along. "

that was coooooolllllllllllllllllllllllllll
hate u octavian lol!
but just work on a little bit of grammar (keeped=kept)
POST SOOOON THAT WUZ AWESOME!

Awesome start !!!!! Great chapter I loved it or preview!!! Can't wait till u post !!!:DDDD

this is good, keep on postin'!

awsome post soon luv it:)

Thanks for reading everyone. I'll post soon. And nicecatch42 thanks for the advice.

no problemo *awesome spanish i noe*
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wierd, the times are 25 min ago, 20 min ago, 15 min ago, and 10 min ago, wierd huh?

What a coincydink (co-wee-key-de-nk)^ oh and lived the post athenagirl

Hiya im new well sort of i joined in september but didnt talk to anyone.anyway i think thats a great chapter but here some advice i read others version of when annabeth and percy are reunited and they were quite cheesy so i'd appreciate it if you you didnt do something like running into arms and stuff.

like your story, post soon!

Nice start, but Octavian and Percy seem a bit out of character. Octavian wouldn't say "buddy" and Percy wouldn't get so worked up about something so small.

i love your story!!!

this is really good

Sorry just got home and can't post today. Sorry again. And crazyperson22 I agree with you. That stuff was kinda cheesy. Also hisblueeyes they were kinda out of character. I will fix that. And I will post soon.

post soon

post soon

I promise I will post tomorrow.

Yay!! Luv your forums

Yay!! Luv your forums

post soon!

Plz post im dying here

Just got back from school and I will post soon. And yes it's the weekend!!