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Mary Sue 101: How to Spot Her and How to STAY AWAY

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Who is Mary Sue, you ask?

She is a pest, a scourge, a CURSE upon the world of fiction; a dull, cliche character who mostly invades the fan fiction universe (especially in fandoms like Lord of the Rings or Harry Potter), but can also be found in original work, TV shows, books, movies, etc. In fan fiction, she's usually the fangirl's way of inserting herself in the story and pairing herself up with the cutest/hottest character. This infamous evil can be identified by the following traits:

1: She is stunningly/unusually beautiful. Oh she may deny it, claiming to be a "plain Jane" and modestly deflecting any compliments on her looks, but everyone else in the story will be sure to drool all over her. Mary Sue is perfection incarnate - perfect hair, perfect eyes (the kind that "sparkle like jewels" or "pierce into your soul"), perfect skin, perfect figure, gorgeous gowns/snazzy leather warrior outfits, cool-looking weapons, etc...though she may bear a striking resemblance to the author of the story. And she sometimes shares the author's name (that includes middle, last, nicknames, acronyms, etc.) Mary Sue could easily be described as an "author's pet" or a self-insert.

2: She has multiple special abilities or skills (like she can somehow "wield a blade" really well without years of training and experience...unless, of course, she's been trained by the best since age four). There's nothing she can't do or excel at, everything gets handed to her on a silver platter, and her Speshulness knows no bounds. She could be a shape-shifter with Super Powerful Shiny Magic and a wow-the-crowd singing voice, or a genius computer hacker who can play the flute and violin, has a black belt in karate AND can recite encyclopedia excerpts on a dime, or a half-angel warrior princess who sends the Bad Guys buggering off just by going all "echo-y voice and holy light"...you get the idea.

3: Going hand in hand with the above, she's always being uber-heroic, rescuing random people and saving the day. The fate of Life, The Universe and Everything depends on her. Without her Speshulness to aid the Good Guys in the epic battle, the Bad Guys are sure to win and the world is utterly DOOMED.

4: She's kind and virtuous (unless she's an EVIL Mary Sue) and has no big character flaws of any kind. (And no. Clumsiness and/or a feisty temper do NOT count; they're far too generic and only serve to make her look "cute".) She's usually either a "sweet angel" type, "mysterious woman" type or the "rebellious princess" type.

5: At least one character falls immediately/insanely in love with her, and vice versa (usually the hottest guy. Go figure.)

6: All the good characters in the story just seem naturally drawn to her (especially children and fuzzy animals). She's popular where it matters. EVERYONE likes her. Except the Bad Guys, of course...as well as any unimportant characters who serve no other purpose in the story than to be annoying and/or jealous of her utter perfection.

7: Sometimes there is a prophecy or legend about her. Usually it says something about her Speshulness, an all-important destiny, Twoo Wuv written in the stars, blah blah blah...

8: She is portrayed as being cooler/more mature or more important/powerful than everyone else in the story. Though on the flip side, she could also be portrayed as the poor, defenseless, yet ever courageous damsel-in-distress. Everything's always either about her or her love-interest. She doesn't know the meaning of "teamwork" and she steals the spotlight from everyone else.

9: She often has a tragic/angsty/mysterious past and her love interest has to "heal her wounded heart" or something. If she doesn't have a tragic/angsty/mysterious past, she always finds SOMETHING to angst about...and of course, her Twoo Wuv always rushes to comfort her. Oy.

10: She is so darn perfect and 2-dimensional that it's annoying and boring. She's either so perfect, so weird or so lacking in personality that the readers can't relate to her or grow to truly care about her as her own character. Strip away the beauty, the magic powers, the all-important destiny and the love interest and what do you have underneath? Virtually nothing.

Now that we've met Mary Sue, let me introduce you to her lesser-known cousins! Yeah, that's right...she has relatives.

Meet Gary Stu, the boy version of Mary Sue! He can be all of the above, as well as being the muscular, uberly-hot guy who's always saving the damsels in distress, bravely fighting the Bad Guys, hacking into computers like an expert and diffusing the bomb that's hidden in the wedding cake with the pair of pliers he just happened to have in his pocket.

Last and definitely least, there's Marty Sam. He's closely related to Gary Stu, only he's a lot more sensitive and angsty. Usually he has a dark, super-tragic past (like his alcoholic dad beat him as a kid or something) and he's always throwing melodramatic pity parties about how miserable and wretched he is. He swoons over the beautiful girl of his dreams and goes on and on about how he's such a HORRIBLE MONSTER who's oh-so-unworthy of her. He can be every bit as hawt as Gary Stu, OR he can pull a Hunchback of Dotredame routine, i. e. so ugly that his beautiful love interest can't help but take pity on him and fall in love with him for his "beautiful, broken heart".

So how can you avoid turning your characters into Mary Sues/Gary Stus/Marty Sams?

Well, one thing I've found that leads to a Mary-Sue is getting too attached to your heroine. You might have a brilliant back story for your girl, but does the audience really need to know every detail? You might have designed every ounce of her clothing and styled her hair just right, but is it integral to the plot? Probably not. A lot of the time what makes a Mary-Sue so awful is that so much of the focus is on this character that no one reading the story really cares all that much about her.

Another thing to keep in mind is to avoid having the character be too flawed. If you have a character that has a terminal illness, a bad back, is blind, can't hear, and is wielding a sword in battle and totally kicking butt and saving the day, you've got a problem. It's fine to have a character with one of those "flaws" or traits, but not all of them, and make them act accordingly. Make sure the flaws have something to do with the story and aren't just things you stick in to make her appear less perfect. Too flawed is just as bad as too perfect.

AFTERTHOUGHT: It should be noted that there IS such a thing as a "good" Mary Sue, and that there are a few exceptions where characters can have a lot of the symptoms above and NOT be a Mary Sue (like the elves in Lord of the Rings, for instance). There are many examples of "good" Mary Sues out there, such as Nancy Drew, Sarah Crew from A Little Princess, Buffy the Vampire Slayer and other characters. What makes them different from other Mary Sues is that they are all believable, vibrant, well-rounded, likable characters that people can root for.

Having said that, DON'T get cocky. These kinds of exceptions are rare. Most likely, if you have written a main character into one of your stories who possesses many or all of these qualities, you have created a Mary Sue (or one of her cousins). So get someone to look over your work, lest this infamous pest overtake you!

If you would like to test your character for Mary Sue symptoms, I highly suggest visiting these sites:

The Universal Mary Sue Litmus Test
http://www.springhole.net/quizzes/marysue.htm

The Writer's Mary Sue Test:
http://www.katfeete.net/writing/marysue.html
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So many Mary-Sue's out there. And in television they're also quite common.
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Oh so well written and oh so true. Kudos kudos kudos to you. Enjoyed this quite a bit and shared with my friend saying things along the lines of "Hey that one fits Bella! And that one does too! Gosh darn almost all of these do!"
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Very true. Awesome soapbox. I can think of several characters who fit the description.
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astroasis said:
Very nice article! Great job!
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So true, Mary Sue! lol, Well done. :)
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marissa said:
I'm glad someone's put there warning us of the dangers of Mary Sue!

and lol!: and of course, her Twoo Wuv always rushes to comfort her. Oy.
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BELLA SWAN IN TWILIGHT EXACTLY! Ugh! Aren't you guys tired of her pitiful perfectness?!
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khfan12 said:
so true. i know a couple of girls in a few stories that are like that.
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loveygal said:
BELLA SWAN definitly.
excellent soapbox. good job
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So true! Although I'm a fan of Twilight, I can totaly see Bella as a Mary Sue and Edward as a Gary Stu!
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lori521 said:
Ya, this helped alot! thanks!
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Hhaha thankyou (: this si good for my story :D x
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hmmm
I really don't see the Bella Swan qualities in this, but whatever.
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moviegirl said:
Great job!Very good article.Ginny's character from Harry Potter fits the description perfectly.
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When I read this, my mind totally went to Twilight! :( I see I am not the only one who thought of Bella Swan.

Very well written.
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My mind went to Bella too... Wonder why????????
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I do really agree with this stay away from mary sue but i also think that sometimes its just kinda fun to have her. Oh and I really don't see the bella.
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Great article! I will make sure not to EVER write any of these. And I thought of Bella too... weird.
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Whooo! My character isn't a mary sue after all :D I'll refer to this article everytime I start a new story ^-^ awesome work!
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Shepard14 said:
I am writing a story and THANX TO this article...I now know that my character was NEVER A MARY SUE...she is not perfect looking, she has several flaw's that she has to deal with in the story and she never instantly falls in love...she just kinda realizes she is in love, right when she is in the midst of it
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when i first read this, Bella swan kept on coming to mind
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miafox said:
OMG!!!!! Bella Swan annoys the heck out of me...she's needy, yet seemingly perfet, woahh so what she's clumsy you are allowed to be clumsy if there's a freaking vampire and a shapeshifter (not warewolf) at your disposal
gahhh the angst in new moon annoys me....no one gets like that
***but sadly I am still a Stephenie Meyer fan (if only for Jacob's sake)
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Holy ****! While I was reading this, there was just ONE character in my mind- Bella Swan. =|
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My character is a little bit like me, it said, but she isn't so much like me that she's a Mary Sue, and nothing else about her is Mary Sue-ish, so that's good :) Yay!

My mind went strait to Bella from Twilight as I was reading this as well. Surprise, surprise *sarcasm*
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lol ure describing bella from twilight i agree with u i never liked her anyway
but lol everyone exaggerates !!
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Timian said:
Bella and Ginny xD It's so obvious it hurts!
But I'll definitely have this article in mind when I write my next story - both fan fiction and fiction ^^
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It's so so so true! XD thanks for sharing this with us. Lol there are lots of Mary Sue's out there. This whole description describes - you've guessed it - Bella. Everyone is stunned by her and going OMG BELLA BELLA! It's so stupid. My character may have one of these (the prophesy one) but its not like true love. it's kinda depressing :/ (kill her dad - there's a reason) but other than that not really. XD
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Well put! Edward and Bella in Twilight come to mind...I like those books for Jake alone.
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Mary Sue = Bella Swan. GREAT article! Brilliant! 5 Stars! ;)
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palkki said:
Nicely written, well done! Got the Mary Sue thing clear for me too. And the test links are really useful too.
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YES! My character has none of these qualities! Although I should work some more on flaws...
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Grazer said:
LOL! i have made a HORRIBLE MARY SUE!
ugh if i even began to tell u about half her traits u'd be pissed lets just put it this way if Buffy and Serena Van Der Woodsen(blake lively in gossip girl..y i watch gossip girl is a different issue which will deal wit later) had a baby and that child's grandomther was Bella swan and its Aunt was Ginny Weasley and for some unknown reason her "uncle" was Paris Hilton (:D)..then this spawn from hell would be my character..and i even had the balls to call her taylor
Gosh i feel awful
thank u from saving me from utter humiliation and i was so proud of her cuz i thought she was "unique" and unlike all the other gay characters that kept recurring in all of the meg cabot books that i detest so much.
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Thank you very much! This has given my a lot of help on what to avoid in writing!
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LOL isn't this offensive to anyone called Mary Sue?!?!?!?! XD
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emmett said:
Yeah as soon as i saw this article i thought bella swan :P
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CRAP! I think my character might be a Mary-Sue. You say if you strip away the apearance abilities etc you have nothing. What if they have all those things, but you've put alot of thought into the personality? (Also, tho Bella is appalingly clique, she's not perfect or awesome.)
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Also...Thanx :)
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haha, the story i read Road To Recover: Criminal Minds... the OC Tamesis was everything BUT a Mary Sue, or Gary Stu, you might say... lol... nasty addiction, lives on street, sells drugs, lives in an abandoned apartment, all that.
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Bella Swan is a Mary Sue.
Once in a while, I'll have a Mary Sue, but she usually ends up having something bad happen to her in the end.
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Reading this is like reading all the traits of Bella Swan.
Awesome article.
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awesome and for the tests

my character isn't a mary sue :D
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I applaud your epicness and this amazing Mary-Su article. Thank you much for posting this. Thanks also for the website. It helps a lot.
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emilyroxx said:
I was laughting soooooo hard. You just nailed my character. I'll take your advice and try to make her less Mary-Sue-ish.
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2dolphn97 said:
yah mines kinda a mary sue and yah i thought of bella 2 lol. but like no1 really likes her until she moves to this aweful school and hes a guy she has no other friends but she has a great personality shes sarcastic, funny, she like freaks out sumtimes in a situation. she has powers so in her blood fighting comes easy but shse took like 3 classes anyway but she graduated after that and she is betta than most of them @ alot of stuff that has 2 do with fighting (her friend is betta than her @ sword fighting) and her best is arcery (shes betta cause of her dad it traveled into her jeans)um only 1 person asks her and that wen she meets her best friend. she has anger problems and her powers would get out of control shes been expelled 15/25 schools and she goes 2 a school just 4 her her best friend does become her boyfriend and sumtimes she acts without thinking that gets her into trouble could u tell me if shes a mary sue? cause idk if she is or not
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2dolphn97 said:
i think she is though
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2dolphn97 said:
ugh i hated the teen angst thing innew moon 2 she over reacted soooooooo... muc she thought about killin herself thats a big no no
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Ms_Mea said:
Very good article :D I congratulate you :)
Also, thank you for saving one of my stories! One of my characters was sort of Mary-Sue-ish, and I never realized! So thanks for making me see the light :)
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Great job, awesome article!

It instantly made me remember Anne Lamott's words:
Remember that each character must sound different from the others. And they should not all sound like you.
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Spinner13 said:
Woot! I took the Mary Sue Test for Writer's and Hadebeck's not one!
I got a 'You care about her, but you don't cut her any slack' result. It made meh happy, because that's what I've been trying to do.
Hadebeck Slaughter is the story I'm working on right now... I might be posting some on here soon.
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2dolphn97 said:
YEY! SKYLARS NOT A MARY SUE!!!!!!!!
Skylar is nothing like you. She isn't really very cool: she blends into crowds, she hangs out on the fringes at parties, and wearing shades after dark makes her run into things. She always knew she was special, destined for great things - and probably made sure everyone else knew it too. She's come in for her share of hurt, but gotten off with minor damage. And she's gotten no slack from you.

In general, you care deeply about Skylar, but you're smart enough to let her stand on her own, without burdening her with your personal fantasies or propping her up with idealization and over-dramatization. Skylar is a healthy character with a promising career ahead of her.
i luv this thing!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

yey im the first 1 2 say this on the 2 pg i feel special
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