ScottishChic

10 months ago: Oh God no! Daniel is supposed to be quite driven and hopelessly in love- ok, that sounds hokey but you know what I mean, he's obsessed with Luce (in a good way) and I can't see him playing that kind of character after seeing him in I Am Number Four. Plus, he's nothing like what I imagined Daniel as and I just think there might be someone better out there to play this character.

over a year ago: For God's sake. You know what, people are seriously DIGGING for something to diss, aren't they? Seriously, if you don't like the show, FINE. Whatever. No one cares. Just stop watching the effing show and go find something else to do!

There is nothing wrong with the actors, if there were, they would not have been chosen to play characters!

I always knew people would expect a kind of Buffy sequel, since that's what Sarah is best known for, but seriously, the actors are not the characters they play, and clearly, level-headed Buffy is not the same as slightly troubled Bridget (I don't mean that in the way it sounds, I just want to highlight some of the differences).

Lastly, I say, if you think that the script writers and all that are trash, here's something for you: YOU TRY IT. I mean seriously, they get paid for this, so obviously they're good at what they do.

Urgh.

over a year ago: Oh my gosh ALL of these bug me.

And how can Stefan and Elena be an imitation/carbon copy of Edward and Bella? The Vampire Diaries was made BEFORE Twilight? SOME people are thick.

All I know is, each of these statements are false, Stefan only seems "dull" because he thinks, then acts, unlike Damon and that is more exciting but they're both good and right for each other (STELENA<3333)

over a year ago: I don't think she's bitchy, I just think she's shallow-minded and a little bit sluty with the whole "what's more important than boys? They were a mark of how popular and beautifl you were".
And not to sound... anything, but why have you got these people as Stefan, Damon and Matt? They aren't the one's who play them... but I'm not complaining! I LOVE Drew Fuller, I never thought of him as Stefan before but now I think about it.. sorry, I ramble!!

over a year ago: Oh my god, Nina looks gorgeous! I LOVE that dress!!!

over a year ago: I actually hope not.

Don't get me wrong, I love the vampire diaries, both show and book, but I personally find Meredith a little boring. I don't like her and Alaric in the books, they don't seem to have any chemistry.

If the writers do a real good job (if they bring her in) and cause real sparks, then maybe...

But I don't think she'll come in because 1) I heard she was supposed to come in Season 2, and she hasn't and 2) I don't think she would really bring anything to the show. In the books, she wasn't a witch or anything, so for the show she wouldn't really fit in unless the writers made her something else, like a shape-shifter (first thing I could think of) then she'd be a boring character.

over a year ago: Actually, I love both Eric and Damon!!!

Though, I couldn't choose both, and I've read and seen more of the vampire diaries, so I choose to pick Damon.

They're both very sexy, very bad and very over-the-top!!!! I love 'em!!!

over a year ago: You're so SWEET!!! xxx

over a year ago: No, I'm not saying you tell us his name. I'm saying don't call him "guy", you're saying he's mysterious, so try calling him stranger or something. Or, he could give HIMSELF a name until he figured out who he really is, or you could call him "John Doe", like what you call someone when you don't know their name. But just "the guy" is not effective at all.

And although he IS trying to be calm and sane, really think about it, put yourself in his shoes:

you just woke up in the middle of the desert, with no idea how you got there, no idea why you're there, no idea who you are...
you don't think you would be freaking out?
Even if you weren't trying to show it, underneath, you would be freaking out, through a small voice in the back of your head or your consciousness, would you not?
Honestly, I think anyone would be freaking out in that situation.

over a year ago: Again, I say, the idea is great but it could be developed.

Like, once again, I find it very jumpy, you could add in other things, like his struggle to remember who he was, the pounding of his brain against the inside of his skull giving him a painful headache. Something like that.

Please, proof read your work. I know you probably don't want to after writing it, I know I never ever do, but it's necessary to be a good author, even the famous ones have to proof read their work (or maybe they have people do that for them? Huh.)

Also, work on proper punctuation. Like remember CAPS after a full stop. And try using a lists, and ":" and ";" for explanations. Only use ... (elipsis) when completely necessary, like when "the guy" is struggling to remember something, or is pausing but not through every sentence. Remember, sometimes you need long and short sentences.

I'm a little confused about the layout or context, I should say.
"you've already met our guy, right?" It sounds like you're narrating (telling the story to us) AS the story is going on ... did that make sense?
I personally, don't think you should do that but instead pick one; either, you tell us the story like you were reading to a child from a book, or you write it as though your guy is living through this right now.

I don't know why, but you repeat "hole" a lot, and it sounds a little childish, maybe it's because it's like blah, blah, hole, blah, hole, blah, blah, blah, blah, hole. Like, you need to spread it out a little more, or instead, say something like, "he climbed out of his safebed, hideout," something other than just a hole.

Sorry, please do not be offended. These are just my personal thoughts. But I really do like the idea behind the story. Good luck with edits and chapter 3!!! :)