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The wedding

Opinion by Eclipse posted 1 year ago
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This is just an idea I would like onest feedback please! Breaking Dawn
The Wedding
    I was walking down the aisle to marry my beloved Edward. It was now time. But was I ready? I stared at Edward making sure that I didn’t let my eyes stray where Jacob, my best friend, and my favorite mechanic should be sitting. I exhaled and kept my eyes on Edward. Trying not to let my eyes stray to where Seth was sitting either knowing that he would look at me with eyes that say Bella, he’s not coming back sorry. Instead I just kept my eyes on Edward.
    Then I was there the priest did the normal stuff I wasn’t really paying attention honestly I was to busy concentrating on Edward and breathing. When out of no where Edward said
    “I do.” Oh crap I had to pay attention now. Here comes my part. I think. Yep.
    “I do.” Edward smiled at me . I smiled back then his expression turned worried he was looking at Alice behind me now. All I could think was what did Alice see. Then he just shook his head. That’s when I had to look at Seth knowing that he would of saw it. He just turned away and left. Then it hit me Alice saw nothing. I wouldn’t let myself believe he was here.
     No! No! Then Alice shook her head agin. Agin nothing. Then Seth came in shaking his head and nodding at Alice and Edward. He was coming. I was excited but disappointed.
    Would he just leave agin? Would he stay? Could I take it? What about Charlie? That’s when I realized that it was done I was married Edward was leaning in to kiss me. When he did everyone clapped and cheered even Charlie did. I was walking back down the isle now with Edward in my arms.
    “Bella, he is outside are you ready? Do you want to see him?”
    “Yes, I’m ready I think I can handle it.”
    “You think?”
    “Edward please I can do it.”
    “Okay.” We walked outside and there he was.
    “Jacob!” I sounded a bit surprised.
    “Hey Bells. How was the wedding?” I was trying to think of somthing that wouldn’t hurt Edward’s feelings but was true.
    “Interesting.”
    “Yeah sorry ‘bout that.”
    “Don’t worry about that you’re here and that is great.”
    “I’m not staying but I thought I should give you blessing I guess that’s the word. And here is your wedding present. It’s more for you than for Edward.”
    “Wait Jacob your leaving?” I was holding back the tears and Edward kissed me on top of my head.. Not saying anything knowing that it would hurt me.
    “I’m sorry Bells.” I chuckled to myself.
    “Nice promise!” Regretting that I said anything as I said it.
    “What promise?!”
    “The one where you would never leave me!”
    “You’re the one leaving me!” That was when Edward spoke up.
    “Jacob Black! Do you even care about her!? Look at her she had to concentrate on me the whole time just to not look at where you were going to be! He shouted at him and I was tearing up.
    “You know I care!”
    “Then why are you leaving!” I shouted
    “I don’t have a choice!” I couldn’t believe what I was hearing.
    “Says who! You because I sure as hell didn’t say that!” Jacob just looked down and before I knew it turned away and ran. All I did was turn into Edwards chest and cry. He lead me into the limo and helped me get cleaned up for the reception.

    



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ok, not trying to be rude at all!! or anything like thast but seriously it's just not that great, in fact Iwt siudcgkas ( read in between the letters.)
posted 1 year ago.
 
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I thought that was really good, I even ''awwwwed'' Yay! Jake came back =]

I really don't get ''lwt siudcgkas'' means =/
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Are you on the fence about Edward vs Jacob? I am a little confused:) I think that is takes too much away from the love that Edward a Bella share together. There love is a great love that comes only once in a life time and for her to be thinking of jacob during her pledge of her life to Edward is insulting. Edward and Bella are soulmates in everyway. sorry
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ooh! i liked it :D i liked how you said, 'then it hit me; Alice saw nothing.' i think thts how sm would say it. nice, relly nice. ONLY 13 MORE DAY PPL!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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hmmm well the " ''lwt siudcgkas'' means it sucks... lol but i thought it was entertaining but not realistic to the story. i liked that jacob came but for bella to think about jacob while walking?! ahhh no way. lolbut good enteraining read while satisfy anything relating to twilight... but its ok kido :D
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I thought it was pretty awesome... I'm definitley saving this, and I'm giving it a "5"... are you going to finish the story? You better... I gota know what the gift was.
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Eclipse said:
I'll think about it cullencult
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please!!
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Eclipse said:
I'm working on it now because u begged. =)
posted 1 year ago.
 
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shade18 said:
heyyy
that was uummm... AWESOME!!!! VERY close to what actually happens in the book; how did you know?
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Eclipse said:
It didn't know I just stared writing
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It was Ok but I guessed i am biased because I have read the real wedding and I can't imagine anything better than that! But it was really...imaginative!but yeah Iwt siudcgkas
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Eclipse said:
ohh gee thx
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yay!!! My begging worked ;)
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Eclipse said:
Yes it did.
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haha
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Eclipse said:
lol
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