Beyond birthday bb

Kayuki always thought there was something missing in her life, and she was determind to find what, or who, it was. She herself didn't even know what it was, she just had a feeling, and it was eating at her. But there's very little a five-year-old adopted child could do, so she decided to wait until she was older.
When she turned 8 her adoptive parents decided she was old enough to walk to and from the bustop alone, and she did. But something didn't feel right, she felt watched, followed. Soon she didn't like walking alone. She tried to tell her mom while she braided her long, midnight black,...

The blood stained the wall as Beyond Birthday slashed the poor man's throat, spraying the walls and his clothes. He felt the damp stickyness soak through his shirt and smile evilly. She'll love this, he wonder what she's doing now. Perhaps waiting for him to come back, to taste the blood on his skin, or she's out killing her own victim, having blood spashed on her own body. The thought made him shiver from pleasure.
He was so lost in his own thoughts he didn't notice the man crawling away from him at first, when he did he frowned slightly, then grabbed the man by his hair pulling him up,
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I first read link in 2009, and I’m rereading it again. The first time I read it I was like, “cool! Almost a perfect crime!” and came to the point of comparing it to Dostoyevsky’s works.

But yesterday, when I reread it, I realized, yes, it's good, but it's not the best detective story in the world. My reasons? Keep on reading , I'll let you know.


1. The victims have [overly] ridiculous names. Okay, we know Mr. Ishin (Another Note's author) is a japanese, and that japanese names have meanings, like Yagami as "night" and "god" that can be taken literally. But Backyard Bottomslash? Quarter...