OK, I know my previous fanfictions pretty much suck, so... Give me some feedback, please. I think that this site is dead. :( Also, I have a new-ish OC. Let me know if I get any facts off.
I walked through Central, heading to the Command Center. I pulled my black and white coat hood tighter over my head. I held out my trademark pocketwatch to show the guards I was a State Alchemist. I went into Roy's office. A golden-haired boy sat on the couch. He turned to look at me as I walked in. I said, "Hello, Colonel Mustang. What do you have for me? And who is the boy?"
I turned as a person walked in. She looked no older than me. She had a black hood pulled over her head, a white stripe going down it. She also wore black jeans and brown boots. Her hands were covered with light gray gloves. Her hair was brown from what I could tell, and a dyed ponytail cascaded over her shoulder. Her eyes were two different colors, the right being deep blue and the left one red.. She said, "Hello, Colonel Mustang. What do you have for me? And who is the boy?" I stood up. "I'm Edward Elric, the Fullmetal Alchemist." She said in the same quiet voice, "I am Audrey Himura, Nightmare Alchemist. Anyways," she turned back to Roy. "What's the case?"
Roy sighed. "There's a grave-robber in another town. Find out who it is, the motive, and bring him back." I nodded. "Alright. What is the name of the town?" "Uh, Aslya or something." "Aslyxia, you pyromaniac." (A/N: Aslyxia is made up by me for the story.)
~Five Minutes Later~
I walked out with this Edward Elric guy. I asked, "How old are you?" He blinked and answered with a confused expression. "15..." I nod. "I am 13. Don't think because you are older and male, you can boss me around." "I wasn't planning to." I begin walking. "Let's go to the train station. I want to leave as soon as possible." He followed me.
I sit down, zipping my coat. Ed looks out the window. I pull a book out and start reading. I shiver, which Ed notices. "Are you cold?" I look at him. "No. I'm fine." I pull my legs onto the seat as I lean against the wall of the train. I turn the page, whispering as I read.
This girl seemed weird. She hadn't taken her hood off and it wasn't cold at all. I wonder why she shivered then... I sigh and look out the window at the scenery as the train rushes along. Audrey is engrossed in the book so I don't bother her.
I closed the book and put it back in my bag. "Ah... I need to call Nori-sensei..." I swing my legs off the seat and sit normally. "I hope you are a good partner, Edward. I can discard you from my life as simply a person throws away a piece of trash." He looks angered by this. He shoots back, "What do you have against me? We just met, what did I do wrong?" I scowl. "It is not merely you, Edward. It's everyone."