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Piper McLean is a the kind of character I call a Mary Sue, and I hate her for it For those of you who don't know, a Mary Sue is a poorly written character (commonly found in bad fanfiction). This character is often female (a male version is a Gary Stu), and readers find her hard to believe.
Mary Sues are typically beautiful, to the point where you forget to breathe at the sight of her, and Piper is extremely beautiful. 'But she's supposed to be beautiful!' you say. 'She's the daughter of Aphrodite!' Yes, but in the PJO canon, daughters of Aphrodite are pretty much useless in battle, but not...

This is my first time writing something like this, and i hope you enjoy it.

All rights go to Rick Riordan for creating the characters

The two characters I created are:
Trixie- daughter of Jupiter, twin to Jason
Thalassa- daughter of Poseidon, 14

Chapter One-
Trixie was hanging out with her friends Annabeth, Piper, Hazel, and Thalassa at Camp Half-Blood when she came up with the idea. She said to the group "Hey guys, i've got a good idea. Tonight after the campfire, we should play Spin the Bottle with some boys."
Annabeth looked at her "Are you sure? I don't know."
Trixie replied "Yeah, i mean, come...

Percy Jackson was waiting at a table in Starbucks quietly. The waitress who had served him watched him curiously. She had tried to flirt with him, but he didn't seem to get the message. Finally, she decided to walk over and strike up a conversation. She flipped her cocoa colored hair, and strutted across the nearly empty cafe.
"It looks like whomever you're waiting for decided to stand you up." She began in a haughty British accent.
"They'll be here." Percy replied calmly. He sipped his now cold latte and turned back to the window. The skies were blue and clear, even though it was five thirty....

Hiya!
So a person added an answer to the question about posting the Mark of Athena in written form and they even posted a link to the transcript someone wrote down!! So I'm just transferring it here because it's pretty good so here ya go!
Disclaimer: Rick Riordan wrote this, NOT me :)
Last night while on tour for The Serpent's Shadow, Rick Riordan read the first chapter of Mark of Athena out loud to the audience.  The video can be found, but here's the transcript:

The Mark of Athena

Chapter 1:
Until she met the exploding statue, Annabeth thought she was prepared for anything.  She paced the deck...

My friend and I had some theories about who Sammy Valdez, the boy from Hazel's past is, and what his relationship to Leo is. There must be one, because they look EXACTLY THE SAME! We had a few theories:

1. Sammy Valdez is actually Hephaestus.
2. Sammy Valdez is actually Poseidon.
3. Sammy Valdez is Leo’s grandfather on his mother’s side.
4. Leo is Sammy Valdez reborn from Elysium.
5. Leo is Sammy Valdez brought back from the dead by Hera.

My theories are #3-5, my friend thought of #1-2.

Evidence

1. Sammy Valdez is actually Hephaestus.

Pros: We learn from Gaea that Sammy moved to Texas, and Leo was...