Writer's Club Article: Amulets (Tentative Title)

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posted by Takuya

This is the basic idea for my story i hope you like it

Its a fantasy story that takes place on the fictional island Nascondere in the city Nascosto and the main Charater is named Cody and he is 12 years old at the beginning of the Story.

The story begins when Cody find the mermaid amulet that transforms him into a merman if he wears it in the water.

Five years later when he is Seventeen years old he meets the ninteen year old tomboy Alyssa and she owns the Harpie amulet that transforms her into a Harpie.

Thats how far i have decided exept for the ending but idont think you want to know that.

The villain is a person that fears and hates anything thats magical and he wants to destroy the amulets.

The amulets are oval in shape about the size of a flat pool ball(if that makes any sense) and they all have a different mark depending on what creature it transforms you into.

The amulets include these Creatures,conditions and powers.

Merman - Water - high speed swimming, rain activated healing factor and limited water control.

Harpie - Strong wind or high fall - Flight, claws and superhuman strenght.

Werewolf - Fullmoon - Superhuman strenght, fangs, claws, enhanced senses and kan sense magic.

Vampire - Blood on the amulet - Multiple powers

Gorgon - See your own reflection - Snake manipulation and turning opposite sex to stone.

Minotaur - Anger- Extreme superhuman strenght and stamina.

Angel - Sunlight - Change sunlight into higly dangerus beams and flight.

Sphinx - Riddle - Claws, flight, and high intelligence.

So what do you think about the idea? If you have suggestions, questions or critism please tell me.

Cherry9090, ScottishChic and 1 other like this

VMars4ever I think this is a very interesting concept, I especially like the fact that there are all these amulets. But, I think it would be even better if there were only one amulet of each type, or even a pair - one works for females, and one works for males. And I'd limit the world, at least in the first book, to maybe only like five or six of these creatures, unless some of them are villains and some of them are the heroes. Anyways, the only issue I'd see with this would be that there might be issues working with a merman, since it would have to keep this story in or near the water for good chunks of it, unless that is your intention. I'd also like to suggest that maybe this island is the only island able to have these mythical beings, and that maybe they're not aware of this. As a side not, I saw a few spelling errors. It's strength, not strenght; character, not charater;except, not exept;don't, not dont; highly, not higly; dangerous, not dangerus; criticism, not critism; and can, not kan. Alright, that's all for now, until (or if) you decide to post the prologue.

Takuya Ok thanks i will think about it when i write and you have been very helpful ^^ and i hope you have more to say later. And thanks for pointing out the spelling mistakes =P I will try and get the prolouge posted as soon as i can

pumpkinqueen Cool :)

ScottishChic Ooh. This sounds really good, actually. I love the whole idea of the different creatures having different amulets which activates different powers. But perhaps it may become a little confusing? I'm not saying take away some or all of the amulets, I'm really saying, unless one specific species has real significance in the book, then maybe keep them for the second edition (if you're doing one). Or, if they do, then maybe limit the NUMBER of the species, so you're not introducing too many characters at once with all these amulets and making the story jumpy and all over the place because you'll lose your audience and even you might become a little confused. As for the whole issue about the story being close to the water all the time that someone above said, don't worry about it because you said the amulets only work when the guy is in water, right? That can include being in the bath or whatever. So, don't worry about that, I'm sure you can figure out a way to keep the story out of the deep. Not meaning to be disrespectful AT ALL, I'm just pointing out that there is a way to avoid that. Obviously, just keep an eye out for spelling errors and grammer errors obviously. And all the usual stuff that goes with writing: narrative, tense, punctuation, etc. But I really do love the sounds of this!

Takuya Thanks iam really grateful for all of your advice and i hope that you have more in the future ^^ And don´t worry i am asking for Critique so if you have more please tell me ^^

Cherry9090 i like this...i know a few things about amulets..i own a few myself

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