Writing Article: Sorrows BTW THIS IS 6 YRS OLD,

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posted by CullensFinest13

You hurt me I hope you die I cant belive I trusted you I cant belive I loved you I cant belive I stayed up and worried that you wouldnt call. I cant belive that i loved you i trusted you and cared for you. im tired of you its time i let you go but your always there you wont leave me alone...its time for you to leave so never come back walk out of my life i am going to lock my door and never let you back in stay out so i can be happy you need you need to die let me live my own life you shouldnt be controlling me anymore im not property im a human and i dont belong to the likes of you, you were a waist of my life. and apart of my heart im locking you out never letting you back in you should never say anything to me afain i cant belive you said that about me i cant understand why i let you in the firdt place makes me sick to my stomach i hate life i hate everything about you i cant ever talk to you normally anymore you live far away but i couldnt take it anymore...i used you and i got hurt in the process but i dont understand who you are anymore ive let you go so im going to lock you out never come back again...I want to be alone and so i am and im very happy...

im dying inside cause i miss the way you spoke in my ear...

Bibelot, rockzsanders and 3 others like this

Dearheart You should have listened better in English class. Your spelling and grammar are atrocious! Tsk tsk tsk... And the content itself is a bit...melodramatic? Splashy? Cliche? Repetitive? Redundant? Whatever the adjective is, it lacks power and true emotion (for the reader at least. I'm sure it felt real to you, but it's just not working for me as a reader. I'm not feeling it). But keep your chin up and keep working on it. Everyone has room to improve, both you and me. And the more we practice, the best we'll get. :-) Good luck!

r-pattz i guess dearheart didnt like it, but i think it was awesome. 5 out of 5. dearheart, i think it being repetitive was part of the point.

CullensFinest13 dearheart. btw this is about 6 yrs old. thanks asshole =]

Dearheart Thanks for telling me it was 6 years old in the first place, lol. You're welcome! (Ooh, never been called that one before...I kinda like it, actually. It's spicy.) =D How about we stop the name-calling and over-critical comments, cease fire and go sign a peace treaty? What do you say? *offers a chocolate chip cookie? And a handshake? And a cute smiley face?*

Wolf Blood Chapter One

posted by StarWarrior

CHAPTER ONE
    “I’ve got it!” Shade squeaked.
    “Hurry!” Emerald barked, trying to keep up with him.
    “Corner it there, quick!” Kitmira barked.
    Shade turned the rabbit toward the thick thorn bushes. It was getting tired. Shade pounced; he landed perfectly on its back.
    “Bite it!” Neko commanded.
    Emerald lunged forward and sunk her teeth into its neck.
    “Good catch!” Mamma called.
    “Did we hunt...

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The Beauty of Tragedy

posted by LaDispute

She was obsessed with the idea that tragedy is beauty and death is immortality.

He would watch her when she opened her mouth in class, watch the way she flashed smiles when she spoke. He swore to commit the crinkles at the corners of her eyes to memory, the freckled valleys lit up by her eyes.

He soon found that he could be the cause of those valleys, a Creator building up his own world from the base of her narrow satisfaction. She soon found that his convictions in tandem with hers had the power to endlessly pursue the edge of the universe in its expansion.

And when they first kissed that cold...

Character Idea: Darcel

posted by darkling_menace

(I have thought of a bunch of characters over the years, but since I suck at making stories for them to be in, I can only make the character itself with a bit of back story. Today is going to be the first day that I'll be posting these characters on here, since this is the writing club, and I don't want my mind to be cluttered with character ideas. This character came to me when I was rethinking an idea for an old character.)

Darcel was once the leader of a tribe of ancient humans in what is now known as modern England, he was a sorcerer who used his magic as an advantage over everyone else,...

Chapter 1 of Blaze.

posted by terra_rocker

Chapter one –
Unlike the last few months the last three days had broken out of the tedious routine my days had grown tired and used to. My day took the same route as every other one that was until I had to show the new girl… Briara, where her locker was. Briara was cheerful and happy, dressed in an array of exotic bright colours that not only made me want to vomit but shield my eyes, her outfit an extreme contrast to my alternate altered clothing. My plain black vest top, freshly ripped into a V-neck with added buttons and a tie, matched only with skinny jeans in a dark grey. My dress style...

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100 singers nominated to perform in the opening of Olympic London 2012!!!!

posted by ZekiYuro

Thế vận hội Olympic năm 2012 sẽ tổ chức tại London nước Anh từ ngày 27/7 đến ngày 12/8
Theo danh sách yêu cầu nghệ sĩ sẽ biểu diễn phần khai mạc được tổ chức trên mạng gồm có
1.Hurts
2.Jin Akanishi
3.Within Temptation
4.Alfie Boe
5.Alex Sparrow
6.Blue
7.Morning Musume
8.Anastacia
9.X Japan
10.Jang Geun Suk
11.Coldplay
12.Rain
13.U-KISS
14.Il Volo
15.Jane Zhang
16.Paul McCartney
17.Beyonce
18.L'Arc-en-Ciel
19.Lena Katina
20.Megurine Luka
21.f(x)
22.Infinite
23.Jedward
24.Ho-kago Tea Time
25.Jolin Tsai
26.Sonohra
27.T-ara
28.Thalia
29.Nelly Furtado
30.Tiziano Ferro
31.Rihanna...

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Escaped chapter 1

posted by fiestagirl12345

Kaylie's P.O.V

i was running in the woods hoping they wouldnt catch me. the scientist who were trying to test me. cause i was super natural. i didnt know i was. until they had me tied down. i dont know what happened i lit it on fire then drowned the guys. i was shocked my self. i was runnig trying to climb the trees. i found the perfect one. i ran and climbed it to the top. they were shooting lazers i was doging them. they were supposed to numb you then knock you out. they finnally gave up and walked off. they droped some weapons. i smile and get them all. i keep runnig ti'll i heard the most...

Chosen One Chapter 1

posted by stellamusa101

Caitlin is a 17-year old girl who likes socialising. She is very fun but doesn't know her family secret, her family was servants to the king of the Fire Kingdom,Hudson, 17 years ago. But Caitlin has her very own secret she doesn't know..

Caitlin is turning on her phone to chat with Nina. Just as her phone turned on, an incoming call from Nina appeared. Caitlin press green button. "Caitlin! Caitlin! Here this, Dean, your crush, has a crush on you!!" shouted Nina as Caitlin turned on dial. "Now I know why people call you the joke master," sighs Caitlin.

"I am serious talk! He told me not to...

Damage Ch. 1

posted by para-scence

"Ready, Jack?" Cat asked again. I sighed impatiently and nodded.

"Yeah! Just do it already!" She'd never done this before. Normally I would've done this myself, but I was too high right now, and despite that, I was still smart enough to know I shouldn't do this to myself right now.

"Okay..." Cat spoke warily. She got ready.

"Don't close your eyes!" I warned. She whined for a bit, then took a deep breath.

"Okay. Ready? One... Two... Three---" Cat shoved the needle through the side of my right nostril. I winced a bit. Cat freaked out more than I did. "Oh my gosh! Are you okay?!" I took the needle...

Conscience: Ch 1

posted by Albina21

Tell me if you like it! If people do, I'll post more of it here. If not, I'll leave it on Quotev. Or, tell me if you want the link to the Quotev chapters.

Iggy stood in front of her bathroom mirror and checked her hair roots. Good, she didn't have to do any last minute touch-ups. She shrugged on her tote bag and ran outside, flying to the bus stop. Derek was standing at the stop, waiting for his friend. "Hey Ignis, how'd you sleep?"

Iggy sneered at Derek, "Ha ha, your hilarious. You know exactly how I slept! And stop calling my Ignis, it's been Iggy since the third grade." She folded her arms...

World of Shadows Prologue

posted by alicia386

Prologue

It was your typical sunny day in Los Angelus. 6 year old Sophie and Zoe Mallory were having a tea party with their best friends Emma and Erica. Even though Emma and Erica were unnaturally pale and wore very ancient types of clothing, Sophie and Zoe didn't notice. They were just thrilled to have friends. Emma was as pale as her sister Erica and their clothes looked like something from the seventeenth century. If Sophie and Zoe were any older, they might have thought this was puzzling or strange but they looked at it as if it was something everyone wears.
Their mom peeped...

My Heart Breaks Everyday Without You

posted by blossomyumyum

Your heart is sore, crippled up like paper.
Your voice is weak, barely passing by you.
Your body is tired, let it lay for tonight.
You are but you- a stranger to much.
No one cares to know you.
They do not wish to after all.
And all those times you told everything-

It was a lie, I love you became a lie. A horrible lie not one can ever take back to you. How could they, breaking your very soul to the apple's wrinkled core? It shook and broke, just like that. Lonesome and ever so exhausted of even thinking it would be different this time around.

You're so hopeless. You probably cannot move away from the pain, the desecration left in the path at the end. Then again, in the end it probably doesn't even matter, does it?

Once a joy, now a misery forever scared, alone.

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About my novel

posted by TheKingsWard12

(Please do not take my story I have been writing it for years! PLEASE!!!!!)

Ariana York who is the daughter of Richard the third has been taught at a very young age that she is in line to the throne. Her love for her father turns to hate when he kills her mother. One thing crosses her mind one thing she wishes to do more than anything......Kill her father. Everything changes when a serving boy called Tristan Barter (The enemy) and his father are captured. The pair hate each others guts but can they look past it? Her youngest brother Will sends a Calick after his sister to try and kill her. Ariana,...

Tears

posted by Potter-rulez

I could feel the rejection from halfway across the room, hear the laughter, and just knew they were talking about me. I tried to ignore it, but the tears threatened, exusing myself to go to the toilet I desperately fought for control. The tears overflowed, it was like a tap was turned on. I had absolutely no control over them, they just ran down, racing each other to my chin, when I was finished I walked off to my next class.

On my way over, Mr Mofti saw me, said hi and asked how I was. I replied, saying I was fine, he almost looked like he was going to walk away, but, then he asked if I really...

360* Asia Showbiz this week(Read this if you care about music!!!!!!!!)

posted by ZekiYuro

NEW Music Videos(MV):
1.MV Flashback-After School Girlband
2.MV MAMA-GangKiz Girlband
3.I'm Da One-Jo Kwon(member of 2AM bobyand)
4.Day By Day-T-Ara girlband.

NEW NEWS:
1.Utada Hikaru comes back with a song relating to...Japanese vegetables.
2.Hee Chul(Super Junior Boyband) won the prize:The Idol who has the most beautiful face.
3.Beast BoyBand gave gifts,CD and encouragement to a 13-year-old girl who has a serious disease and is very pessimistic.
4.S.H.E girlband's member will perform together after being absent for 2 years at Goldent Melozy Award.
5.In Yoo Hee Yeol's Sketchbook show,Juniel said she...

Perserverance (Chapter One)

posted by fetchgirl2366

Someday...I will move away from this place and settle somewhere where the past won't come back to haunt me. Someday...I will help my family get whatever they need. Someday...I will make myself a better me and make a difference in where I live now...

The name's Jane Moseby. Fifteen years old. It looks pretty bad around where I live. Everything seemed to have happened in one second at the least. There's darkness where the light's supposed to be. I can't even fully recover from the fact that the town of Cambodia has turned into a trash land after the war planes dropped their bombs on us. I'm glad...

I have nothing to write(short story and not MINE)

posted by ZekiYuro

During state testing week, I had only one day where I saw all of my students. I had my students write a story and several of them said they didn’t know what to write. This student found a solution to her problem. I keep telling students if they can't think of anything then they just need to write whatever pops into their heads The following is printed with Chey’s permission. She did write a proper story after this.

I can’t find anything to write sitting in my mom’s car, where my bag was. I’m trying to figure out something to write and maybe after my little sister and older sister...

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The Fields of Sorrow

posted by hgfan5602

I walk into
The Fields of Sorrow
Once again.
Why do I walk there
Almost everyday?

I stroll along the grasses
Thinking
Bearing a horrible pain.
I think of the world around me
And how much they have inspired me.

I start to cry once again.
All my teachers
All my friends,
They have always stood by me,
When things went wrong.

I want a chance to repay them,
To show them that...
Their work was useful.
To show them that
I am truly thankful.

Why do I have to leave them then
Now?
No, now's not a good time.
But I know it was not intended
That I leave them now.

I want to show all those people
That they have been
The change of my life,
That they have made my life so much
Better,
That they were the flames
In the darkness.

My Brain Turns to Mush

posted by hgfan5602

Hey, you know what? I love cake, just like any other ordinary kid in the universe. Well, that is, up until one particular day, when this strange incident occurred. I was sleeping in, like usual. Guess what. I was late today. But when I woke up, I saw a clam closing its mouth on my eyelids, forcing me to fall back asleep. I couldn't believe my eyes. I must be hallucinating. It was a strange-looking clam, all right. It had two googly eyes, a short tail, a large and sausage-like mouth, and a tiny little nose. Now, out of all the crazy things you could think of, I'll bet you anything that you never...

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The Runaways

posted by PFEIFFER11

Run. It was the only thing going threw Leven,Evie, Matthew and Cameron's mind right now as the dogs and people chased them into the forest.They went as fast as they could as the dogs got closer and closer.

They weren't suppose to be running from the dogs right now. Then again they weren't suppose to be convicted of a crime they didn't do but it had happened.

"Hurry they're gettin' away!" A loud and gruff voice said behind them. The barking got louder. A sharp pain was in Leven's side as she ran. She had taken track at school so she was use to it but it was terrible. She could barely breath as she ran.

Matthew turned his head to look back at the others for a split second and had came in contact with something hard. The thing fell back and Matthew staggered. They all stopped then as the body picked herself up. They looked I to the eyes of a criminal. The most wanted person alive in america. Brig.

Home Alone chapter 1

posted by ZekiYuro

8AM - November 3
The naughty sunlights went through the small window and make that sleepy angel wake up.Yurin closed her eyes tight,groped around the bed.
-Kai,why don't you close the window
But there were no hands to close it,and no one was lying besides Yurin too.She got up tiredly,opened closing eyes and put her foot into the cotton sandals.She went to the restroom.
"They are just the sunlights,I don't need him.Anyhow I must get up"
After brushing teeth and washing face,Yurin went downstairs,decided to eat breakfast.Opening the refrigerator-it was empty,opening the other cupboards-empty too......