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Using correct grammar and sentence structure is vital if you want to convey your thoughts accurately. You also want your writing to hold the reader's attention. Nothing is more annoying than reading a manuscript littered with grammatical errors. The error of writing sentence fragments is a common error. Sentence fragments are incomplete sentences that don't express a complete thought.

tips:
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Have a subject for every verb. The subject is the actor in the sentence. The verb is the action taken in a sentence.

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Make sure all of your dependent clauses have a completing thought. An independent clause contains a subject and verb and expresses a complete thought. A dependent clause may have a subject and verb, but it does not express a complete thought. Thus, dependent clauses need to be joined with an independent clause. Sentences that begin with after, when, because, before, since, etc., need a completing thought.


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Proofread your writing. All writers benefit from proofreading. Make sure that each sentence makes sense when you read it back to yourself.

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Read great literature. When you read great literature, you learn how master's of the craft write. Reading great literature also teaches you proper sentence structure and style. By knowing what good writing is, you will recognize the bad.
"Jaslene's Dream"
"Jaslene's Dream"
"I don't feel like going anywhere at the moment Juaney."
The day after everything had happened with Joel was when the fact that he really was gone set in.I began my grieving I guess you could say.I was now really hungry for anything I could find and very moody.I could tell my mood swings were definitely getting on Juan's nerves;but Juan wouldn't leave.Juan thought I was going to do something crazy as soon as he left my side so no matter what I did or what I said,Juan wasn't leaving.
I enjoyed having his company but at the same time,I just wanted to cry and be heart broken just for today,but with...
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posted by viju
I'm talking to my friend,
She is my BFF,
And boy, are we having some fun.
We IM back and forth,
We sit on the front porch.
We talk about things on our minds.
We both hate the principal,
The staff and the admin.
At are very sucky school.
We talk about boys,
All our pets and our toys,
And what we wanna do in life.

(Chorus)
She's my BFF,
Well we hold some bets.
We smile while playing sports,
Our favorite things are cool shorts.
We talk back and forth
We talk on that porch.
We are bestest friends,
And that will never end.

We struggle through stupid tests,
But we always try our best.
We eat at the lunch table,
We all tell...
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posted by TeanRose424
have you noticed when you fall in love it feels like your flying? I have. It the most wonderful feeling in the world. But when do you feel it? Do you feel it when you fall in love, or when you just are overfilled with joy?






Have you ever felt it? Or have you felt anything close to it? What does it mean? Does it mean that you have to fly away from it before your love hurts you? Or does it mean that your body enjoys the joy filling your body?





Tell me what you think...
posted by ashesandwine
I'm not sure if I'll keep this going but if I do, I'll post it on my spot and here:) I still remember posting my first story here! I after sent it to my spot where it's still going, but this was the first place and I thank you all for receiving it:) Thanks! So I hope you like this one too:)


"I love you..." Was the last thing I heard from him, as the blade went through his throat in one gracious move. That was it... All that I had ever fought for, all that I knew and loved, lost in one single move! I was lost in the darkness, trap in the sorrow and blood...
"I'm sorry..." Was the last thing...
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posted by emmett
A was an Artist who wasted his talent
B rode a Bicycle and was very gallant
C was a Conductor with a musical ear
D was a Drunk, addicted to beer
E climbed Mt. Everest and achieved his goal
F was a Fireman and slid down a pole
G was a Glutton and ate what he got
H was a Hunter, a very good shot
I was an Ice skater with brand new skates
J was called Jane and couldn’t pay the rates
K was a King who ruled all the land
L was a Lady, a white glove on her hand
M was a Milkman who turned milk into cheese
N was a Nanny who made the children say please
O mined Opals and sold what he got
P was a Princess who bought...
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posted by Rob_patt_fan
hey... so this is my new story... I don't like the other one! So... I started this one! don't forget 2 comment and rate!

Something was missing. Something big, like my heart! I couldn't find it. I got up from my own screams. I couldn't breathe. He wasn't there to hold me in his cold hands. He wasn't there anymore. I doubted if he would ever come back. I was thinking of everything I could do to get to him. Tears came down of my face and dropped on my pillow as I tried to stand up and go to the bathroom. Charlie was already downstairs so I hurried and made him breakfast. I didn't eat anything like...
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posted by Office_001
A little peak of sun shone in his window, yes! It was Saturday; Jake Scott loved Saturdays because these were the days when his mom, Terri, and he would go to the park for a picnic. Jake was so excited for today that he slept in his clothes though the were now wrinkled but he didn’t care. Creeping down the hall way quiet enough as to not wake his mom Jake went and made himself his favorite cereal. Jake usually had his mom help him get his cereal because he was seven and short that he couldn’t reach the cabinet, but he wanted to surprise his mom, he wanted to make his own breakfast today....
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posted by OneFoggyNight
(Please do note that these are poems I wrote in like two minutes so yeah they might not be that great...)



***You'll never be alone***



Even through the toughest times
Someone will always be there
If you have friends
You’ll never be solo
Even if it doesn’t go right
Even if you think you might die
If you have friends
You’ll make it to the end
Even though it all seems to fade
Receding in the darkest night
Having friends
Makes it all go away
Times may be bad
Times may be good
But if you have friends
You’ll never be alone
______________________________

***No Going Back***





Believe not this lie ive told
I am not...
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For those of you who didn't see my pick, I'm trying to decide whether I should reveal at the beginning of my book, that a main character is going to die at the end. These are three versions of opening paragraphs that I've written. If there's one that you like the best, let me know in the comments or in the pick.

1. This one gives away the most information, including when she dies and how she's killed:
I had no idea when I started at Skip’s Burger Grill, that on October 22, 2009, sitting there in the walk-in refrigerator, huddled together with my colleagues for warmth, my life would be changed...
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posted by Sweet_Pants
Find the casual sun day

Starting with the stumbling wake-up, the strained smile

Smelling the hurried breakfast, bile up her throat

Shrinks away from it, queasy, holding her stomach

Never letting it leave her, the emptiness filling up

Inside her, determined to make it last


Heavy textbooks never all that’s holding her down

Uncertainty sawing through her, the only thing filling

What she considers a burden, but how could hunger

Be so cruel?

It’s drilling into her, snarling, never dulling

Never letting up, just a little longer

A little longer...


She dry heaves, it’s a tiny stall

And the walls are closing...
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posted by Bella_Swan3
If you spend your life wishing to die, willing to end it yourself, even, and the chance was given, would you take it? If you had chosen that fate, when your breath became slow and painful, would you still wish that on yourself? In the shadow of death, would the reality of it dawn on you, when it was just too late?

A life of darkness was not one worth much, to Taylor.

She had been so desperate to die. Willing to do it herself, had it been possible.

She lifted the knife to her bared forearm.

The flat, cold edge of the blade pierced the pale skin of her wrist. She felt no pain from it.

The midnight...
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posted by kayleebabee
The flight from New york to Rome took an excrutiatingly long time to land and all the while i was getting more and more annoyed with Edward. "as soon as we land we will run to Volterra okay." I muttered quickly braiding my hand through Edwards and sighing contentedly.
"I know that it's just what if we are too late?" his voice broke on the word late.
"we won't be i promise." I didn't know if that was true but i was trying to soothe him i better not voice my true opinion out loud. I half dragged a depressed Edward through the terminals and growled sharply as I saw the bright sunlight outside.
"Oh...
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posted by kayleebabee
Edward and i made the flight to new york with moments to spare.
while the girl scanned our passports through the database i tried to call carlisle. Again.
"Edward your growling stop it." i muttered to low for the human woman to hear.
"right sorry do you think we will make it in time?" his words were cracked and strained in his effort to keep it together.
"I hope so Edward, I really do." i sighed delicately.
we got to our seats on the plane edward was muttering a stream of profanities.
"It is faster than running." I tried to placate him.
"i know that." he hissed at me.
"Hey don't take this out on me."...
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Chapter 2:Getting to know him
Murphy
I spent break alone in the library tiring to find a book I've wanted to read for a while-Pride and Prejudice.
It would have been nice to spend break with Savannah,catching up what all happened during the summer,but she had to spend it with her popular friends. I never liked them and they have never been nice to me. I was always too shy and geeky, I guess.
Stacey was the head of the group,the team captain. I remember when I met her-in third grade. She pushed me down to get to the swings first on the playground. That doesn't matter anymore, except that she...
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posted by sweetpea92
    CHAPTER ONE
    Ugh. I groaned internally as I woke up. My head was pounding, and broken images were swirling around behind my eyelids. I had no idea where I was, or how I had gotten here. I refused to open my eyes and find out, or give any other sign that consciousness had found its way back to me again. Not knowing exactly where and when I was was a dangerous business for me. Very dangerous.
    You see, the last thing I remember before the blackness hit, is that I was running…
    My legs were on fire. They...
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posted by nEvEr-tHe-sAme
The rain fell silently as I layed there waiting. Not like I had a choice though. But it had seemed more like a nightmare than reality. This wasn't how I imagined it... I never even got the chance to say goodbye. Let alone even explain what happened. I needed to wake up... from this nightmare, I tried, but never could... never did.

Life lesson: I learned that trusting people isn't what it actually seemed. There's more to it than you would ever imagine, I mean, it's not just trusting people, but it's who to trust. How can we tell? There might be some ways we think we can tell, but those ways......
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Chapter 1


Artemis Galchowen was going nowhere fast. At the age of 23, he was fired from his job as a theatre consumptions stand steward. At the age of 24, he was living with his two cousins, who worked for the second most successful auto dealer in the nation. At the age of 26, he was kicked out of their house for destroying their $200,000 Mercedes while on a drunken rampage.
At the age of 29, he was working at a secondhand manga book shop and also worked at IHOP for a few more bucks. He lived at Cricket Slope Farms development in a tiny condo with his two supportive friends, Zeke and Megan....
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posted by BellaSwan636
Shaun

It feels like a piercing physical wound; to see her leave me again.

I cannot access the part of me that handles realisation. Serena called her Ashleigh. That child in her arms. Is mine.

My forehead is resting on the edge of the hard granite countertop, and I am trying to ignore the card that is currently lying right in front of me. I already know what is printed on it by heart.

Serena Meyer

Gaurdian Ad Litem, New York.

serenashleigh@mweb.com


And then a number scrawled on in her own handwriting.

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Her eyes haunt me when I close my own. Everything...
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posted by Isabellaashley
PREFACE


The woods were filled with silence and I looked around for any signs of the slayer. As I heard the leaves on the ground rustling, I turned around and there he appeared from the treetops of a nearby tree and he gave me a sly smile which sent shivers down my spine before slowly approaching me and my heart was pounding inside my chest. I was vulnerable as there wasn’t anyone to protect me and I knew that I was going to die here, alone. Please let this be over fast, I thought to myself.
Every step that he took towards me was another step closer to death. His long, black hair was flowing...
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posted by Sweet_Pants
A/N: Ok, this is just a short, about 500 word drabble I came up with. It's about 7-year-old Alice and her drunk derpressed father, called, of course, 'Daddy'. It's not much, but I though I'd post it. Constructive critisizm is welcome.

Please rate and comment.
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The smell of his breath came off in waves of grief and alcohol mixed into what could be described as inner turmoil. Although Alice barely gave a thought to the bottle of whiskey in his hand, as she was more preoccupied with not throwing up from the smell of her father she should have gotten...
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