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A Sprinkle of Moon Dust - I Meet Luna's Family

posted by Moon-Dust12

-First Before I Start I want You to Know Luna's oldest Daughter and husband are not my characters they belong to Dragon-88.

"Moon Dust! You ready to go!" shouted Luna from outside my door. I put on my socks. I walked out. "I'm ready Luna" I said. "Good, have you eaten?" she asked. "No" "WHAT! You don't go out for a night journey to the crystal empire on an empty stomach! We are stopping at the castle to eat!"
"Umm will we disturb Celestia and Eris?" I asked. "No, anyway I should probably say goodbye to Nightshade and the twins." Luna replied. "Wait you have kids!? Where the heck have been?" I shrieked.
"I also have a husband named Blazin Blue" She told me. "Wow where have I been" I repeated.
Finally we got to the castle dining room. Discord had brought Fluttershy to dinner with him. Eris, his and Celestia's daughter was floating above the table. Celestia sat quietly at the end of the table. Nyx and Twila Twilight's oldest daughters were sitting at the table talking to their little brother Sunset and at the other end of the table stood 4 ponies she did not know. "Honey!" Luna called out to the colt. "Honey this is my apprentice Moon Dust" She said to him.
"Moon Dust, this is my husband Blazin Blue, my oldest daughter Princess Nightshade, and the twins Selene and Stella" Luna siad. "Sup' dudes" I replied. Nightshade looked at me weirdly, but then she laughed. I thought to myself I maybe found a friend!

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Dragon-88 That was awesome! You did great! You can add images to your fan fiction if you want. You'll find a picture of Blazin', Luna, and Nightshade together in the Images section. Make sure your click on "Fan Art". That's where you'll find it.

jordy_dash Was my comment deleted? If so then that is masking the voice of constructive criticism!

Sikaurai Ooooh, what did you say? Was it constructive or self-serving? Inquiring minds want to know.

jordy_dash Well it was a rant to try and make it better.... Ahem this is it in a small space of time- TOO SHORT, TOO JUMBLED, NEEDS PARAGRAPHS, MAKE LUNA ACT LIKE LUNA, WHY WOULD SHE BE MARRIED TO AN OC, THATS JUST BREAKING THE LORE, DID I SAY TOO SHORT? AND YEA! Im angry my comment was deleted! Its discrimination to one of the high families of this club! (Im making that a thing now and will invite people to it Kawaii!)

Sikaurai CAPSLOCK = Yelling. Maybe she deleted it because you were yelling at her. Also, rants (as you called it) typically aren't received very well. Now, I may be new to this site, and am still trying to figure my way around here, but I have been on other sites . . . and from what I've experienced there, I DO know that "constructive criticism" isn't just pointing out the "flaws". If you really want to help someone improve their writing, don't just insult it. Point out diplomatically where improvements need to be made. And for chrissakes, look at Moondust12's age. Why are you attacking a pre-teen?

Sikaurai And yes, I consider 14 young.