Well..
ZenJeager737 has asked me to review his story JASPER HELL HIGH..
To be honest, I don't usually have high hopes for the fanfiction stories of these days.
The alpha and omega Fanfiction.net page will never completely be the same as it was 3 or 4 years ago.
All those people I've come know, are gone now, and I barelly come to this page anymore I read other pages, and review most of the stories from back in the day..
But anyway.
This story was better then I expected, though that probably isn't saying much, I wasn't expecting much.
I like the way it keeps switching between P.O.V's so rapidly, I don't think I've seen that before.
And as for the story itself. Not sure if I have anything worth saying.
But that's pretty common now.
I wish I could say their's no sex. But truth is.. I couldn't tell.
Its rated M so it's very likely. But I hope to god there isn't.. But the hope of 'nice' stories is becoming harder and harder these days.
But anyway..
Sorry for not ranting, swearing, or giving a better review.
This is all I could do.
Zen asked me to point out spelling mistakes also, but I don't think I'll be the best for that. Considering I suck at it myself and don't want to sound hypercritical..
Anyway..
Till next time.
Live long and prosper!
ZenJeager737 has asked me to review his story JASPER HELL HIGH..
To be honest, I don't usually have high hopes for the fanfiction stories of these days.
The alpha and omega Fanfiction.net page will never completely be the same as it was 3 or 4 years ago.
All those people I've come know, are gone now, and I barelly come to this page anymore I read other pages, and review most of the stories from back in the day..
But anyway.
This story was better then I expected, though that probably isn't saying much, I wasn't expecting much.
I like the way it keeps switching between P.O.V's so rapidly, I don't think I've seen that before.
And as for the story itself. Not sure if I have anything worth saying.
But that's pretty common now.
I wish I could say their's no sex. But truth is.. I couldn't tell.
Its rated M so it's very likely. But I hope to god there isn't.. But the hope of 'nice' stories is becoming harder and harder these days.
But anyway..
Sorry for not ranting, swearing, or giving a better review.
This is all I could do.
Zen asked me to point out spelling mistakes also, but I don't think I'll be the best for that. Considering I suck at it myself and don't want to sound hypercritical..
Anyway..
Till next time.
Live long and prosper!
4 hours Later...
Sgt.Carlos Johnson
Day 1
9:00 AM
Location:Snow
carlos wake up after his fall.
sgt.carlos:"cough...cough..what just happend.."
carlos crawls to somewhere.
after reach the somewhere he gets up.
sgt.carlos:"agh.."
carlos is injured on his back and legs, but he can move but at weak speed.
sgt.carlos:*at weak voice* "There Somebody here!"
carlos moves slowly.
carlos collapses.
carlos looks up and slowly dies.
screen to him slowly white.
1 hour later his death...
air camera tracks carlos.
carlos johnson
Status:K.I.A = Killed in Action
location:Snow
cpl.john:"he dead now."
cpt.lilly:"of course."
gen.winston:"nevermind, we will send ambush troops to get his HQ so we get more power."
cpt.lilly:"i will recruit wolves to get our alpha's pack bigger."
gen.winston:"alright."
To Be Continued...
Rest In Peace, Carlos.
Sgt.Carlos Johnson
Day 1
9:00 AM
Location:Snow
carlos wake up after his fall.
sgt.carlos:"cough...cough..what just happend.."
carlos crawls to somewhere.
after reach the somewhere he gets up.
sgt.carlos:"agh.."
carlos is injured on his back and legs, but he can move but at weak speed.
sgt.carlos:*at weak voice* "There Somebody here!"
carlos moves slowly.
carlos collapses.
carlos looks up and slowly dies.
screen to him slowly white.
1 hour later his death...
air camera tracks carlos.
carlos johnson
Status:K.I.A = Killed in Action
location:Snow
cpl.john:"he dead now."
cpt.lilly:"of course."
gen.winston:"nevermind, we will send ambush troops to get his HQ so we get more power."
cpt.lilly:"i will recruit wolves to get our alpha's pack bigger."
gen.winston:"alright."
To Be Continued...
Rest In Peace, Carlos.
It was the middle of the night and I heard something outside of my den i walked over there and i seen a beautiful fox walking past my den i shook my head and went back to sleep "thinking why did that fox walk past my den"? i started to wake up when i felt the warmth of the sun.oh yeah i forgot that i had to go hunting today eves going to be pissed with me but i didnt care at all.i walked over to see hadashi sitting there with her bitchy look. hadashi:what the hell took you Adrien? the whole pack was waiting for you.I'm surprised curt even made you a beta.i rolled my eyes at her and said I'm not scared of you eve is much worse.
bodies, bodies were all around me.
i couldnt breathe at all since the smell was strong; how it almost sufficated me,
*OTSOA!!!* I cried out with my tears dropping, the tears helped me smell.
Southern soldiers all dead, heads and bodies torned up,
rib cages were showing almost everything.....everything.
I ran and ran all ovet the bodies til i found Otsoa's body looking untouched, though laying down.
I yelled his name and started to cry in joy because he was alriught.
The smell camed back, but deeper from Otsoa's body...
slowly i placed my paws in his face, but it all changed...since i felt blood, his face was ripped apart!!
*WAHH!!!!!!*
(wakes up from a thunferstorm and finds silver and vi asleeping)
To Be Continued....
i couldnt breathe at all since the smell was strong; how it almost sufficated me,
*OTSOA!!!* I cried out with my tears dropping, the tears helped me smell.
Southern soldiers all dead, heads and bodies torned up,
rib cages were showing almost everything.....everything.
I ran and ran all ovet the bodies til i found Otsoa's body looking untouched, though laying down.
I yelled his name and started to cry in joy because he was alriught.
The smell camed back, but deeper from Otsoa's body...
slowly i placed my paws in his face, but it all changed...since i felt blood, his face was ripped apart!!
*WAHH!!!!!!*
(wakes up from a thunferstorm and finds silver and vi asleeping)
To Be Continued....